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TV’s Frink said:

The very first edit I made, a good five or six years ago, was exactly this.

Heh, our only problem is that this would end up killing ‘Obi-wan’ prematurely before his appearance in the original trilogy…

On the other hand…since the current scroll only mentions two Jedi and doesn’t name ‘Obi-wan’, we could just ‘imagine’ that Ewen McGregor is playing someone else…and just add ‘Chapters I-III’ to the scroll instead for this to work perfectly!

(sorry for the thread derailment)

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So a little while ago, in the radical redux ideas thread I suggested that you could lower the pitch of Anakin’s voice in order to make him sound better, I tried it out for myself in one of the worst one of the scenes in AOTC. I think it improved the scene quite a bit, otherwise I left the scene unedited, I only changed Anakin’s voice. Here it is (note that this scene won’t even be in my edit but I thought this was the best example of how much better it sounds): https://vimeo.com/159893770

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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Smithers said:

So a little while ago, in the radical redux ideas thread I suggested that you could lower the pitch of Anakin’s voice in order to make him sound better, I tried it out for myself in one of the worst one of the scenes in AOTC. I think it improved the scene quite a bit, otherwise I left the scene unedited, I only changed Anakin’s voice. Here it is (note that this scene won’t even be in my edit but I thought this was the best example of how much better it sounds): https://vimeo.com/159893770

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Either it was deleted or it never existed in the first place. Such are the mysteries of the Internet.”

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Darth Lucas said:
“Page not found
Sorry, there is no video here.
Either it was deleted or it never existed in the first place. Such are the mysteries of the Internet.”

Ah, even though I finished uploading it and it said my page was ready, it says: “Upload complete! Conversion will begin shortly. Your video was successfully uploaded and is almost ready to appear on Vimeo. We just need to finish saving your source file and prepare your video to be encoded. In a few moments, we’ll let you know how long this delightful technological process will take.”

EDIT: The video’s up now

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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Ah, ok, just making sure you didn’t accidentally share a dead link.

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Smithers said:

So a little while ago, in the radical redux ideas thread I suggested that you could lower the pitch of Anakin’s voice in order to make him sound better, I tried it out for myself in one of the worst one of the scenes in AOTC. I think it improved the scene quite a bit, otherwise I left the scene unedited, I only changed Anakin’s voice. Here it is (note that this scene won’t even be in my edit but I thought this was the best example of how much better it sounds): https://vimeo.com/159893770

Sounds pretty good actually.

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Great 😄 don’t you rush yourself now!

Search your feelings, you know it to be true.

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Smithers said:

My Prequels will be edited into two movies, one being a radical edit of TPM and the other being about a half hour of AOTC followed by a completely reordered version of ROTS.

Phantom Menace Changes/Plans (so far):
-100% remove Jar Jar and the Gungans using rotoscoping and image keying
-no “decoy” subplot
-re-dub young Anakin
-re-dub Neimodians
-re-dub Darth Maul
-remove Darth Sidious
-C3PO gets finished and taken to Coruscant
-remove Yoda as a character (preserving surprises)
-add in Count Dooku
-add more Darth Maul
-introduce the clone army as a solution to Naboo’s invasion
-only two battles during the climax rather than four
-Anakin doesn’t go to war as a ten year old kid
-other little changes

AOTC/ROTS Changes/Plans (so far):
-follow same rules as my TPM edit^
-no forbidden love
-less lightsaber fights
-General Grievous is Darth Maul (re-dubbing and special effects)
-Anakin’s turn is more gradual and understandable
-Anakin doesn’t kill children
-Mace Windu’s lightsaber is blue
-Mace Windu is a complete dick
-Palpatine doesn’t electrocute himself until he becomes a genital wart
-no Jango Fett
-other little changes
-change/add in new versions of Anakin’s nightmares
-Padme doesn’t die
-new ending

Many more major changes to the stories are coming, but I just want to make sure they actually work out before announcing them everything in the list above will be happening for sure.

THE PHANTOM MENACE

  1. Retain Yoda in Episode I. Yoda is the Grand Master of the Jedi Council and one of the few redeeming features of the film. Removing his character would not preserve any revelations.
  2. Personally, I like the idea of Anakin destroying the Droid Control Ship at such a young age, a feat which demonstrates his abilities as a pilot.
  3. Do not re-dub Darth Maul.
  4. Keep Darth Sidious.

ATTACK OF THE CLONES & REVENGE OF THE SITH.

I dislike all of these changes:

  1. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.” Her death is poetic: Padmé dies as Anakin is reborn as Darth Vader.
  2. The Jedi Order is a monastic order of warrior monks, so the forbidden love theme makes sense.
  3. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.”
  4. As a Jedi Master, Mace Windu’s lightsaber should be green, not purple or blue.
  5. No, keep all of the lightsaber duels except for Yoda’s.
  6. No, General Grievous should be a different character.
  7. No, Jango Fett is a bad ass.
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Scott109 said:
THE PHANTOM MENACE

  1. Retain Yoda in Episode I. Yoda is the Grand Master of the Jedi Council and one of the few redeeming features of the film. Removing his character would not preserve any revelations.
  2. Personally, I like the idea of Anakin destroying the Droid Control Ship at such a young age, a feat which demonstrates his abilities as a pilot.
  3. Do not re-dub Darth Maul.
  4. Keep Darth Sidious.

ATTACK OF THE CLONES & REVENGE OF THE SITH.

I dislike all of these changes:

  1. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.” Her death is poetic: Padmé dies as Anakin is reborn as Darth Vader.
  2. The Jedi Order is a monastic order of warrior monks, so the forbidden love theme makes sense.
  3. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.”
  4. As a Jedi Master, Mace Windu’s lightsaber should be green, not purple or blue.
  5. No, keep all of the lightsaber duels except for Yoda’s.
  6. No, General Grievous should be a different character.
  7. No, Jango Fett is a bad ass.

Dude how about you actually give helpful suggestions rather than writing off all of my changes as stupid? Go watch the theatrical versions if you dislike all of my ideas, and there are a shit ton of other fanedits that do exactly what you describe. I’m actually aiming to make the prequels good, not just cut out a few lines. Honestly why did you even reply to my thread if you disagree with all of my changes?

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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Scott109 said:

Smithers said:

My Prequels will be edited into two movies, one being a radical edit of TPM and the other being about a half hour of AOTC followed by a completely reordered version of ROTS.

Phantom Menace Changes/Plans (so far):
-100% remove Jar Jar and the Gungans using rotoscoping and image keying
-no “decoy” subplot
-re-dub young Anakin
-re-dub Neimodians
-re-dub Darth Maul
-remove Darth Sidious
-C3PO gets finished and taken to Coruscant
-remove Yoda as a character (preserving surprises)
-add in Count Dooku
-add more Darth Maul
-introduce the clone army as a solution to Naboo’s invasion
-only two battles during the climax rather than four
-Anakin doesn’t go to war as a ten year old kid
-other little changes

AOTC/ROTS Changes/Plans (so far):
-follow same rules as my TPM edit^
-no forbidden love
-less lightsaber fights
-General Grievous is Darth Maul (re-dubbing and special effects)
-Anakin’s turn is more gradual and understandable
-Anakin doesn’t kill children
-Mace Windu’s lightsaber is blue
-Mace Windu is a complete dick
-Palpatine doesn’t electrocute himself until he becomes a genital wart
-no Jango Fett
-other little changes
-change/add in new versions of Anakin’s nightmares
-Padme doesn’t die
-new ending

Many more major changes to the stories are coming, but I just want to make sure they actually work out before announcing them everything in the list above will be happening for sure.

THE PHANTOM MENACE

  1. Retain Yoda in Episode I. Yoda is the Grand Master of the Jedi Council and one of the few redeeming features of the film. Removing his character would not preserve any revelations.
  2. Personally, I like the idea of Anakin destroying the Droid Control Ship at such a young age, a feat which demonstrates his abilities as a pilot.
  3. Do not re-dub Darth Maul.
  4. Keep Darth Sidious.

ATTACK OF THE CLONES & REVENGE OF THE SITH.

I dislike all of these changes:

  1. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.” Her death is poetic: Padmé dies as Anakin is reborn as Darth Vader.
  2. The Jedi Order is a monastic order of warrior monks, so the forbidden love theme makes sense.
  3. No, keep Padmé’s death and merely remove the line, “She has lost the will to live.”
  4. As a Jedi Master, Mace Windu’s lightsaber should be green, not purple or blue.
  5. No, keep all of the lightsaber duels except for Yoda’s.
  6. No, General Grievous should be a different character.
  7. No, Jango Fett is a bad ass.

Well that’s just like, your opinion man…

Seriously though, stop phrasing your opinions as facts, you just sound really butthurt and stupid.

Not enough people read the EU.

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Yeah, Scott, please do give your opinions, but you’re stating them as if they’re fact or demands. Like when you said “Personally, I like the idea of Anakin destroying the Droid Control Ship at such a young age, a feat which demonstrates his abilities as a pilot,” that’s fine, but for every other criticism you’re just going “no, don’t do that, do this.”

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What ever happened to this project, it sounds incredibly hard to pull off but id love to see it happen

“I will call this one BOHIJ”
-Chris O’Neil

“Heh Funnie Scream”
-The Boys From Oneyplays

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It’s still in the works, I’m just working away at it but I assure you it will be done.

For those of you that do not understand cough Scott cough these are not like any other edit of the PT, they are supposed to be a new experience so please don’t tell me to reinstate characters or plotpoints that have no business being in my edit. Even if I wanted to, I couldn’t work Jango Fett into it without causing confusion, the same thing goes for almost all of Scott’s suggestions.

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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I don’t think I’ve mentioned this before so I thought I’d post an update.

TPM will also contain a few scenes from AOTC to introduce the clones way earlier. The clone wars will start at the end as a response to the Federation’s attacks. You will see one or two more politics scenes but they will be interesting and contribute to the story, you will also see the clone army being prepared for war twice. Hopefully it’ll blend well with the rest of the film

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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Smithers said:

I don’t think I’ve mentioned this before so I thought I’d post an update.

TPM will also contain a few scenes from AOTC to introduce the clones way earlier. The clone wars will start at the end as a response to the Federation’s attacks. You will see one or two more politics scenes but they will be interesting and contribute to the story, you will also see the clone army being prepared for war twice. Hopefully it’ll blend well with the rest of the film

I really like this idea, but I’m not sure how I’m going to go about introducing the clones without Obi-Wan discovering them on Kamino

No offense, kid, but I don’t think you know how to boil water.

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Smithers said:

Nobody discovers them, Palpatine just introduces them as soon as he’s elected chancellor and later on we see them prepped for battle, it’s more of a small subplot than anything but I think it’ll make for a cool ending

I was actually planning on this kind of thing in my re-write of the prequels, so props to you!

No offense, kid, but I don’t think you know how to boil water.

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Here’s a preview clip of a few scenes from my TPM edit. It will contain these scenes (note that these are a proof-of-concept, not finished products):
-Darth Maul lands on Tatooine (new music and new footage from fan film)
-The dinner scene (rearranged and rescored)
-Leaving Tatooine (added deleted scene, rescored and trimmed fight to remove confusing close up shots)
-Meeting on coruscant (Qui-Gon says “Obi-Wan will train him” rather than taking on Anakin himself, -Mace Windu states that the Queen has already left and orders the Jedi to follow her to Naboo in secret, Amidala is shown leaving)
-Senate meeting from AOTC (Palpatine is elected chancellor, Jar Jar is redubbed, and a montage of -the clone army is shown)
-Jedi on the blockade (Neimoidans redubbed, Qui-Gon says “this dispute” rather than “trade dispute”)
-Qui-Gon’s death (rescored, trimmed, and rearranged)
-Finale (rescored with the Shadow of the Empire OST and trimmed to exclude Gungans)

https://vimeo.com/163052348

Many sound effects are missing from these clips because they are very rough, give me your thoughts and suggestions. Thanks!

On another note, I’ll soon be recording all of Anakin’s dialogue once I buy a shotgun microphone. The young actor whom I’m working with has experience doing school plays, commercials, etc. and I think he’ll do great in the part.

Prequel Fan-Edit thread: http://originaltrilogy.com/topic/Yet-another-series-of-prequel-edits/id/17329

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They all look great! The shots of Maul from the fan film look kind of out of place, but it’s forgivable. What do you plan on doing with Dooku?

Not enough people read the EU.

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You’re completely redubbing Anakin? That’s awesome!

In the dinner scene, I think you should really find a way to cut “I don’t want to you to race it’s awful I die every time you do it,” because that line is Tommy Wiseau levels of bad.

I don’t know how I feel about the montage of the clone army. I feel like when you start showing the clones, you shouldn’t cut back to the senate. If it’s necessary to make the timing work, I think you should at least put clapping audio when you cut to those 2 Vurk.