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Rogue One: A Star Wars Story - Stardust Edition (PM for link!)

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This a fanedit I ended a while ago and have been watching over to see if it was good enough, so here goes nothing.

I liked a lot of the worldbuilding in R1, however the characters where lacking, the first 20 minutes were too jumpy and the fanservice was too much. So with that in mind the movie now plays out like this:

  • Prologue
  • Jyn in cell
  • Cassian introduction (Defector, planet killer)
  • Bodi and Extremist
  • Death Star & Tarkin’s intro
  • Jyn’s rescue
  • Cut Draven’s “We’ll just put you back were we found you” to make Jyn’s actions more of an option rather than the only way out. After Mon Mothma’s propostion we cut to…
  • MOVED UP: Saw’s first scene to…
  • Take off in Yavin (Now that the audience has seen the danger that both Saw and the empire represents, them leaving for the mission feels hopefully more heroic or at least more impactful)
  • Repurposed establishing shot of Jedha from earlier that leads into Bor Gullet.
  • Cut out “One tends to loose one’s mind” because, well, he never did.
  • Dream sequence and Jedha’s arrival
  • Cut K2’s “That doesn’t sound so bad to me”
  • Cut Ponda and the doctor.
  • Cut Jyn’s plea to Saw “Come with us” to slightly strenghten the reasoning for unnecesarry self sacrifice.
  • Trimmed Saw’s cheesy removal of the tube right before his death. (Sorry Saw but the movie didn’t give us enough reason to care about you or your pointless death)
  • Cut Jyn telling Cassian that he must tell the Alliance about the plans on Scarif and his response of not being able to because they’re in Imperial territory. Now the reason for Cassian not telling the Alliance is because he doesn’t believe in Jyn’s story and so now they must get Galen to corroborate her story. This way, the detour to Eadu feels a lot less pointless and the growth between Jyn and Cassian subtetly more pronounced. Furthermore this makes it so we don’t already know everything we need to for the third act to take place.
  • Cut K2’s spelling out Bodi’s character moment. “You’re a rebel now!”
  • Cut “You can’t talk your way around this” " I don’t have to" in order to end the conversation in a stronger place “Some of us just decided to do something about it” Next scene we see of Jyn is her ‘doing something about it’
  • Replaced Vader’s pun with dialogue borrowed from SW Rebels. “The Emperor expects you tomorrow to account for your failure”. This way we feel like Krennic’s, who’s ambition has always been to be in the Emeperor’s good graces, is moving up the ladder and accomplishing something as a character and also makes the Vader scene less pointless. Of course Krennic never gets to meet the Emeperor cuz he dies in Scarif.
  • Trimmed Baze’s “Good luck, little sister” to just “Good luck”
  • Cut R2 and 3PO’s cameo.

I believe that is all. THE EDIT IS ALL DONE AND READY IN A GOOGLE DRIVE. If anyone’s interested shoot me a PM and I’ll send you the link.

Enjoy!

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Here are some sample clips in order for people to get the idea of how I’m restructuring the first act and how it flows:

https://vimeo.com/252106638

https://vimeo.com/252106781

https://vimeo.com/252106937

Here’s the replaced Vader line which makes Krennic a more active antagonist.

https://vimeo.com/252107104

Password for all: fanedit.org

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The new Vader line works really well (I assume the clicks will be cleaned up) - good match - great stuff! I’m looking forward to checking this out when it’s ready

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That line really does work well! Where did you find it? I don’t recognize it from anywhere.

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darth_ender said:

That line really does work well! Where did you find it? I don’t recognize it from anywhere.

It’s from the Siege of Lothal. SW Rebels S2E1, specifically “…expects you tomorrow to account for your failure”.
“The Emperor” is from earlier in this scene.

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DigMod said:

The new Vader line doesn’t make sense to me. How would it be a good thing to account for your failure to the Emperor?

It means that Krenic would be Sidious’s problem, thusly leaving Vader to do more important things. That and Sidious would most likely kill Krenic for his failures.

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DigMod said:

The new Vader line doesn’t make sense to me. How would it be a good thing to account for your failure to the Emperor?

Well, the idea is that Krennic in his hubris knows that “I will not fail”. He has always been wanting to go up the Imperial ladder and now he’ll get an audience with the Emperor himself. By the time he’s going to meet him he thinks he will have solved all of the issues regarding Galen and such. Little did he know that Galen had a daughter who was growing out of apathy.

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Wow, I will admit that Vader dialogue was a lot smoother than I thought it would be coming from another source. Impressive. Pretty dang impressive man!

I will say from the edit, granted I have not watched it yet … I would prefer the removal of Bor Gullet. Personally that whole thing was goofy and distracting.

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Damn, that line works really, really well!

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jarbear said:

Wow, I will admit that Vader dialogue was a lot smoother than I thought it would be coming from another source. Impressive. Pretty dang impressive man!

I will say from the edit, granted I have not watched it yet … I would prefer the removal of Bor Gullet. Personally that whole thing was goofy and distracting.

I understand why people think it’s goofy and to a certain extent I agree. However they way I have reshuffled it in this cut it’s so hopefully the stakes are raised for the heroes who need to fetch this cargo pilot and also to see Saw Gerrera live up to his reputation as an unhinged extremist. So I think the context now helps alleviate the sillines of the content. If you’re interested in watching the whole thing, shoot me a PM and I’ll send you the link.

Cheers!

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krlozdac said:

  • Cut “You can’t talk your way around this” " I don’t have to" in order to end the conversation in a stronger place “Some of us just decided to do something about it” Next scene we see of Jyn is her ‘doing something about it’

Well, to me she isn’t. She’s just getting her father. She still isn’t sold on the rebellion until after he is killed…by rebel bombs…yeah I’ve never understood that part.

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DigMod said:

krlozdac said:

  • Cut “You can’t talk your way around this” " I don’t have to" in order to end the conversation in a stronger place “Some of us just decided to do something about it” Next scene we see of Jyn is her ‘doing something about it’

Well, to me she isn’t. She’s just getting her father. She still isn’t sold on the rebellion until after he is killed…by rebel bombs…yeah I’ve never understood that part.

This scene you’re referring takes place after her father’s death, not before.