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Reimagining TLJ: Luke killed Rey's parents - I am turning my article into a fan edit with storyboarded scenes

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Hey everyone,

Almost a year ago, I wrote an article which rewrote The Last Jedi and it was well-received among a few subreddits. After sharing it with a friend (an artist and animation major) she became eager to help bring this vision to life. I have written three scripts for scenes based on my initial article which she will be illustrating into boards that I will attach scores and sound effects to.

Since this edit requires so much work, I wanted to bring it to everyone’s attention before we eventually release it. Obviously, it would be a massive bummer if we spent so long on creating something that ended up getting ignored. Ultimately, I’m making it for us. I’m making it for those who sincerely disliked the original story decisions and longed for something more than non-answers about plot lines teased in The Force Awakens.

There have been so many edits and scene reconstructions that have come out since December 2017. Many of them have been good. However, at the end of the day, the film is the same and the story which I found problematic is left in tact. The three scenes which will be storyboarded, pertaining to Rey’s backstory, Luke’s backstory, Kylo Ren’s backstory (I managed to tie them into one another if you have read the post referenced), and a lightsaber duel, completely re-contextualize the film. It feels new. I would not be devoting such time to a project unless the story and the editing was up to my standard of not even feeling like a fan project in the first place. I think those are often the best kind.

I have spent the past 11 months on editing the film. This edited version of The Last Jedi is complete, and if you are interested in seeing what we have in store, I will soon be happy to share with you the current draft up until the points in the film which will implement storyboards.

Frankly, the changes are too many to count. However, I am extremely satisfied with how the cut has turned out. Had you never seen the theatrical version, I genuinely doubt you would have noticed any of the revisions that have been made. I have changed the opening crawl, cut awkward and abrupt humor, cut repetitive lines, cut the Rose/Finn plot line, cut the Holdo plot line, included two 30 second-long deleted scenes, and now we are working on our boarded scenes, “The Tragedy of Ben Solo,” “Luke’s Regret,” and “Kylo Ren vs Rey.”

Last night, I spoke with the storyboard artist, Meg Babchuk whose work you can find here. We finalized deadlines and set the course for the next 6 months as we approach our final deadline.

We plan to release “The Last Jedi Reimagined” on December 1. This allows for most of the month leading up to IX’s release. We are hoping the hype for IX manages to help get our version of TLJ out there.

Thank you guys.

-timartyn

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Hey TiMartyn,

I actually only read your TLJ analysis article earlier today (for anyone else interested: https://medium.com/@timothymably/the-last-jedi-is-poor-storytelling-d22e45427278) after finding it in your TFA/TLJ 48min edit thread. It is very well written and I couldn’t fault it in any way, it also gave me some new perspectives on why I just simply can’t stand the movie (not that I needed any more reasons but it’s interesting to get a better understanding of why I was so at odds with many elements of the story and characters).

I think ultimately Rian would have done a fine job directing the movie but he should never have been allowed to write it and the “trilogy” needed to actually be planned out as a proper trilogy with the big picture of it fitting within and respecting an existing saga always kept front and centre.

Logically I then followed up with reading your “Reimaginging The Last Jedi” article linked in here and I have to say that I am genuinely impressed with your alternate take on the story and how it vastly improves the characters in comparison to the actual movie. Reading your article, I could very much imagine myself watching the movie you describe and actually totally enjoying and buying into it all. There is a logical continuation of what happens in TFA while also making some shocking and properly subversive reveals that are consequential to the story at hand, rather than just for cheap comedic or “gotcha” moments.

More importantly, we learn more about what makes the characters, learning their past and what drives their motivations, emotionally investing us in their struggle. There is real progression and meaning behind events, we understand what the stakes are and root for our heroes to overcome the odds but are left at the end wondering how it will all play out in the final installment, as a middle installment should leave you feeling.

I do have to preface this part with the fact that I highly doubt any edit is ever going to manage to fix this movie for me (there’s just too much wrong with it) but all the same, your vision that you are striving for with this edit sounds extremely interesting and I think you have a very solid understanding of what was actually required to make this movie work for everyone or at least the vast majority (instead of just half the audience as Rian believes is the mark of his ideal movie) and I really hope you can pull off at least what you yourself hope to achieve with it.

So in saying that, I wish you all the best with your edit 😃

Val

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Valheru_84 said:

Hey TiMartyn,

I actually only read your TLJ analysis article earlier today (for anyone else interested: https://medium.com/@timothymably/the-last-jedi-is-poor-storytelling-d22e45427278) after finding it in your TFA/TLJ 48min edit thread. It is very well written and I couldn’t fault it in any way, it also gave me some new perspectives on why I just simply can’t stand the movie (not that I needed any more reasons but it’s interesting to get a better understanding of why I was so at odds with many elements of the story and characters).

I think ultimately Rian would have done a fine job directing the movie but he should never have been allowed to write it and the “trilogy” needed to actually be planned out as a proper trilogy with the big picture of it fitting within and respecting an existing saga always kept front and centre.

Logically I then followed up with reading your “Reimaginging The Last Jedi” article linked in here and I have to say that I am genuinely impressed with your alternate take on the story and how it vastly improves the characters in comparison to the actual movie. Reading your article, I could very much imagine myself watching the movie you describe and actually totally enjoying and buying into it all. There is a logical continuation of what happens in TFA while also making some shocking and properly subversive reveals that are consequential to the story at hand, rather than just for cheap comedic or “gotcha” moments.

More importantly, we learn more about what makes the characters, learning their past and what drives their motivations, emotionally investing us in their struggle. There is real progression and meaning behind events, we understand what the stakes are and root for our heroes to overcome the odds but are left at the end wondering how it will all play out in the final installment, as a middle installment should leave you feeling.

I do have to preface this part with the fact that I highly doubt any edit is ever going to manage to fix this movie for me (there’s just too much wrong with it) but all the same, your vision that you are striving for with this edit sounds extremely interesting and I think you have a very solid understanding of what was actually required to make this movie work for everyone or at least the vast majority (instead of just half the audience as Rian believes is the mark of his ideal movie) and I really hope you can pull off at least what you yourself hope to achieve with it.

So in saying that, I wish you all the best with your edit 😃

Val

Thank you so much, Val! I appreciate your kind words. I am happy it connected with you. Two films into this trilogy, characters feel relatively shallow and one-dimensional. I don’t think that’s necessarily due to the Disney branding of the franchise, or even the fault of actors. I think it’s in the writing. We haven’t had very much story in regards to character motivations, and it leads to stories feeling hollow. The big challenge when I wrote the article “reimagining” the film was just that- what can motivate these characters and how can that make the story engaging? Ultimately, it’s tricky. It’s hard to make a story interwoven between characters and each of their different backstories. So far in the current films in regards to motivations, we are told that Rey has overcome issues of abandonment and has found a new family in the Resistance, and that Kylo Ren wants to tear down the old ways to forge his own path. On the surface, those both work. But, in execution, I think they fall flat.

I hope our vision when it’s fully realized in storyboards can win you over! I aim to surprise even the most skeptical of fans. 😃 We’ll let you know when it’s out!

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I read the article and was deeply impressed by it. Actual logical and compelling changes, motivations, character development, etc. I will be following this.

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jarbear said:

I read the article and was deeply impressed by it. Actual logical and compelling changes, motivations, character development, etc. I will be following this.

Thank you, I appreciate that a lot. We will let you know when it is out!

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This kinda reminds of how to avoid leaks the onset Vader twist in ESB was “Obi-Wan killed your father.”

How are you implementing this new scenes? Just as storyboards? Like some sort of lost film reconstruction?

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Anakin Starkiller said:

This kinda reminds of how to avoid leaks the onset Vader twist in ESB was “Obi-Wan killed your father.”

How are you implementing this new scenes? Just as storyboards? Like some sort of lost film reconstruction?

Unfortunately, I figure the draw in this edit’s appeal is in that plot twist!

There will be three storyboarded scenes, each of which I have a plan as to how to implement organically. If you have ever seen an unfinished film that utilizes animatics in a few sequences, it’s essentially going to look just like that.

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Your article was a good read! I look forward to this.

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ben_danger said:

Your article was a good read! I look forward to this.

Thank you! I appreciate it 😃 I’ll let you know when it’s available!