There have been some excellent posts around here adressing certain character flaws if you will, and although I am very close to a release now (praise the maker!), there is still a lot of adjusting to do (I won’t bother to release a product I’m only 99% satisfied with).
So, I expect release date to be between 4th-10th of July.
Things left to do:
- A few tweaks to the opening (mainly audio smoothening) -> Already done some changes to the overall pacing
- Smooth Haja’s abrupt and sudden switch to “i’m gonna help you” (we talked about it above/previous page)
- Remove some inconsistencies with the characters (mostly Obi-Wan &Leia - recent discussion up above made me realize three things I wanted to change - mainly scenes where Obi-Wan either look rather clueless or helpless - simply remove reaction shots or unwarranted questions)
Also, Ive replaced the elevator with something less “sci-fi” (as someone thought it to be) and I think it looks splendid.
There’s probably a lot more to mention, but we’re getting close!
And thank you all for your brilliant ideas, suggestions and feedback!
Just chiming in for the first time and created an account to throw my 2 cents. Hello There!
Everything you’ve been doing has been excellent so far and I can’t wait to see the finished product. I’m not sure if it’s been discussed here yet but has any thought been given to altering Vader taking down the decoy ship in Ep. 5?
I love that he took it down and everything but thought that the real ship being right behind it made the awesome moment fall a bit flat.
How I would go about it is if he takes down the first ship like normal, and then when the other ship takes off he begins to pull it down but cut to fancy blinking lights in the shaking cockpit (using other footage I and others can look for) and it just manages to pull away but with damage to the ship. This would be another way to explain why the ship’s hyperdrive is damaged apart from evil Lola.
Thank you for that, man. And it’s a great compliment that you made a user account just to come with ideas and give praise. Thank you.
I do see where you’re coming from and I do agree that that would be an improvement. I do not know if it’s feasible due to the lack of footage to work with (mainly the fact that when the second ship takes off it’s simply ONE, long shot) and this would probably require extensive VFX and audio work (which God, I’m kind of exhausted from now doing the new Rescue). But! Let me look into it. It’s definitely a neat idea.
You could cut the whole swimming scene and go directly to the stormtrooper opening the door and Obi-Wan choking him out. You can assume he’s wet from being in the “sewers”.
Order the scenes as:
- Obi confronts Haja
- Obi in the streets
- Random creatures
- Imperials monitoring the computers
- Stormtrooper opening door and Obi’s: "I’m in’
This will also help to explain why he didn’t have to swim back with Leia.
Shorten Haja’s dialogue to Obi in the streets:
“Alright if it’s the sewers you want there’s only one place to go. I’ll buy you as much time as I can.”
Let’s not have Haja spell out his “making amends” intentions to the audience like we’re too dumb to understand.
Edit: Haja is a Jedi fanboy. Of course he wants to help a real one.
I like the underwater sequence, so it’ll stay. It’s a great new scenery to the Star Wars universe, and it has great atmospheric value. Also a kick-ass score. And the reference to the “Sewers” could be more the fact that he has to go down there to gain access to the Imperial Base without being detected (at least that’s my interpretation).
I agree with the “making amends”. It’s going. No need to spoon feed.