Imp's MOVIE TRAILER SHOWCASE - Past, Present, and Coming Soon... — Page 2

Han shot in 1977.  Greedo shot in 1997.  Ergo, Han shot first.

Anyway, wrong thread to pick this fight.

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vbangle said:

Can you please stop saying that Han shot <span style=“text-decoration: underline;”>first</span>? There is no first or second. Han was the only one to shoot period. Its just one of things that is said quite a lot around here that just isn’t correct. Thank you.

Yeah vb, I kinda see how that wording could be misconstrued to refer to the ‘Special Edition’ version of things, where we see both Han <span style=“text-decoration: underline;”>and</span> Greedo shooting…and I wouldn’t want that.  But to be equally pedantic, I was meaning the phrase in regards to the original version only, in that Greedo seemed just about to shoot Han, but Han beat him to it…first.

Anyway, back to the trailers…

ROLLERBALL  (released 1975/directed by Norman Jewison)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CV9ysMZamxs  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Being a big fan of the original movie, this was an instance where I was really looking forward to what an ‘updated’ remake might bring.  The signs looked good, as this was going to be directed by the guy that made ‘PREDATOR’ after all.  The original production design and team costumes looked great, but I kinda hoped that the ‘re-imagined’ carnage would involve an assortment of grungy, spiked, ‘MAD MAX’ - influenced costumes, bikes, and post-apocalyptic settings this time around…  And I hoped it would prove to be a worthy successor to the original…  Boy, was I in for a disappointment on both counts, as can be seen below, lol!..

**ROLLERBALL  (released 2002/directed by John McTiernan)
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Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3beTBUTxOXs

I’D LIKE TO CHANGE A LOT OF THINGS FOR MY PREFERRED VERSIONS OF THE ‘SNYDER TRILOGY’ OF ‘MAN OF STEEL’ / ‘BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE’ / ‘JUSTICE LEAGUE’ MOVIES -

‘MAN OF STEEL’ ideas - DON’T INCLUDE scenes with Clark with a full beard, such as the oil rig rescue. And GET RID of the ‘tornado’ scene where Clark’s dad stops him from saving him…which he should have been able to manage easily with his ‘superspeed’! - just make it seem as if his dad passed away sometime 'offscreen! NOTE - However, someone did a neat re-edit of the sequence where it looked like a car unexpectedly struck Clark’s dad when Clark was DISTRACTED handing a child to safety. ** WRITE UP MORE IDEAS HERE WHEN I HAVE TIME **

‘BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE’ ideas - Just END the scene between Batman and Lex Luthor in the jail at the point where Batman punches him! CUT at that point, rather than include the ‘dent’ in the wall, and Lex doing his ‘ding, ding, ding’ dialogue, and make this his FINAL appearance in the ‘trilogy’ - because of the dialogue that Batman says before he ‘brands’ him, we can just assume he ended up in ‘Arkham Asylum’ afterwards! ** WRITE UP MORE IDEAS HERE WHEN I HAVE TIME **

** NOTE: I’ve not decided yet if I would just cut directly to the END CREDITS immediately after Batman punches Lex…OR if I would cut directly to the EXISTING final scenes of Bruce Wayne walking out of the cemetery, followed by Lois at Clark’s graveside, or not **

POTENTIAL IDEA FOR MY PREFERRED NEW ‘JUSTICE LEAGUE’ BEGINNING -

Definitely KEEP Zack Snyder’s own version of the opening which ‘recaps’ Superman being killed by Doomsday creature (during previous BATMAN V SUPERMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE movie) - for it’s atmospherically dark tone and score, as well as it’s continuous movement showing Superman’s death reverberating across the 3 worlds of Humans, Atlanteans, and Amazonians -

It includes the following titles wording - WARNERS BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTIANMENT and DUNE ENTERTAINMENT // an ATLAS ENTERTAINMENT / STONE QUARRY production // a ZACK SNYDER film // zack snyder’s JUSTICE LEAGUE (Cyborg sits at table at this point) // BEN AFFLECK // HENRY CAVILL // AMY ADAMS // GAL GADOT // RAY FISHER // JASON MOMOA (Superman’s ‘voice’ and newspapers flies towards city buildings at this point) // NOTE: At this point EZRA MILLER appears during a clip of Lex Luthor (with hair) inside the Krypton ship watching a ‘hologram’ of Steppenwolf holding 3 cubes materialize…but I’d like to REMOVE this altogether (and would remove the similar scene with Lex and a ‘hologram’ of Steppenwolf from BvS:DOJ too, as I described above), so that the last we’d see of Lex is when Batman punches him in the previous movie! // WILLEM DAFOE (Superman’s voice passes city skyline at this point) // NOTE: At this point JESSIE EISENBERG appears during clip of Superman’s voice distrupting and undersea ‘Atlantean warrior’…but I’d like to REMOVE the wide shot with his name altogether! // JEREMY IRONS // DIANE LANE // NOTE: At this point CONNIE NIELSEN appears as Superman’s voice continues to travel to the Amazonian’s island, where it affects their ‘box’ too - I think I would keep this intro. so far, as Superman’s voice seems to be moving outwards continually up to this point, along with the camera movements. // J. K. SIMMONS // CIARAN HINDS RYAN ZHENG // AMBER HEARD JOE MORTON // LISA LOVEN KONGSLI DAVID THEWLIS - NOTE: At this point the black Amazonian turns in close-up to shout “Alert the queen!” before turning to the ‘box’ again…and I’d CUT at this point.

At this point in Zack Snyder’s edit, we would NORMALLY CUT to a close-up of a kettle on the fire as we continue to then see Bruce Wayne travel on horseback over mountainous scenery to find Aquaman in Iceland and ask him to join his group…but I MIGHT decide to remove this entirely for something else, to cut the bloat, as it’s already been a slow-moving, gradual build-up to this point - SO AT THIS POINT, I MIGHT CUT TO THE NIGHT-TIME ACTION SCENE WITH A NEWSPAPER SAYING SUPERMAN IS DEAD, FOLLOWED BY BATMAN FINDING ONE OF STEPPENWOLF’S ‘SCOUTS’ IN GOTHAM CITY, AND ALFRED DISCUSSING LEX LUTHOR’S FILES AND LOOKING FOR OTHER SUPERHEROS INSTEAD, AND BEING ASKED TO BRING THE JET - NOTE: This was actually the 2nd scene in Joss Whedon’s edit, which came after the dreadful opening ‘mobile footage of Superman’, but it repeats the following credits at the start of it - WARNER BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTAINMENT and DUNE ENTERTAIMMENT // an ATLAS ENTERTAINMENT / CRUEL AND UNUSUAL production // a ZACK SNYDER film…BUT I would MISS OUT the WARNER BROS. PICTURES presents // in association with ACCESS ENTERTAINMENT and DUNE ENTERTAINMENT wording and begin this Joss Whedon scene when the police car passes below, and can live with the remaining credits being repeated at this point -

…and the scene ends with Batman jumping off a building -

…and then I THINK I’d continue on at this point with Joss Whedon’s JUSTICE LEAGUE main titles as Lois visits Superman’s broken monument, and we see various large tribute flags on different cities with the ‘S’ symbol, and Clark’s mother leaving his grave and her repossessed farm, ALONG WITH A REPEAT OF CERTAIN CREDITS WORDING WHICH I NEED TO WRITE OUT HERE STILL -

…and then I’d CUT this Joss Whedon scene once the song ‘Everybody Knows’ ends at this point -

…and then I’d CUT to Zack Snyder’s edit from this point onwards for the Terrorists/Wonder Woman sequence, as the movie is much moodier than Joss Whedon’s version, and has a similar tone to THE DARK KNIGHT opening -

** NOTE: IF I decide that I DON’T want to repeat the CREDITS WORDING in the Joss Whedon ‘Everybody Knows’ title sequence above, I would just CUT directly from Batman jumping off the building to the ‘London Bridge’ shot above to start the Zack Snyder cut of the ‘Terrorists/Wonder Woman’ sequence INSTEAD! - NOTE: ALTHOUGH I WOULD HATE TO LOSE THE FLAG TRIBUTES TO SUPERMAN ACROSS THE GLOBE, AT LEAST I’D BE ABLE TO USE ZACK SNYDER’S FOOTAGE OF HIS MUM LEAVING HER FORCLOSED HOME, WHICH IS MORE ATMOSPHERIC LOOKING **

TO BE CONTINUED - Not sure if I will be ending the Wonder Woman sequence on the full Zack Snyder conclusion with the black policeman looking up after building explodes and the terrorist’s hat floats down…OR if I’d prefer to end it on the white flash as she clashes her forearm bracelets together - either way, I’d then continue with Bruce Wayne on horseback as he goes looking for Aquaman - I’d definately END the sequence with the Joss Whedon dialogue and Aquaman swimming off version though, as we FINISH on Bruce saying “Doesn’t mean I’m wrong”…and then CUT to the Zack Snyder scene of Bruce’s helicopter landing as he tells Alfred he found Aquaman who said no to him, before they board the jet…and then I’d CUT to Zach Snyder’s scene between Bruce and Alfred aboard the jet, before we see it flying through the sky, and then continue onto the next scene as normal in Zach Snyder’s version.

THE MANDALORIAN LAST EP OF SEASON 2 - RECUT LUKES SCENES AT END, TO MAKE HIM SPEAK LESS. HIS EYES AND EXPRESSIONS DONT EMOTE ENOUGH, AND HIS DIALOGUE IS TOO PO-FACED. ALSO CUT DOWN AMOUNT OF GROGU STROKING MANDOS FACE

Ah, you’ve actually pre-empted me there on a couple of ALIEN-related things I’ll be covering soon Monroville. 😃  PM sent.

Have another one in the meantime…

THE ROCKETEER (released 1991/directed by Joe Johnston)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4Q-0A55aV20

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rSpBOCrjd5s

IDEAS FOR KING KONG (Peter Jackson’s 2005 version) -

The UNIVERSAL logo appears…

…and then we continue on as normal with the atmospheric music of the UNIVERSAL PICTURES PRESENTS and A WINGNUT FILMS PRODUCTION title cards…and CUT after the KING KONG main title which ends with a slight animal sound…

…then we CUT to a wide shot of New York ZOO with animal noises as our new opening…

…then we CUT to these New York depression era scenes with Al jolson singing…

…and then we continue on as normal, until I CUT the song at the moment the train passes by…

…and then I’d CUT to the solemn music change as we see the theatre being closed…

…and then we continue on as normal as Anne runs towards the locked doors, and then CUT on the two guys faces once the fat woman shouts It’s all right for you, we haven’t had a paycheque in two weeks…how are we gonna eat?..

…then we CUT to Anne trying to get a job off a producer in the street…

…and then we continue on as normal, as he refuses (NOTE - he mentions Jack Driscoll in this scene!) but notices her looking hungrily at people eating, and offers her a tip for a sleezy job with someone he knows, and then the scene ends on her close-up…

…and then we continue on as normal with the shot below of CARL in a projector room (OR I’d CUT to slightly later in the scene - not decided yet)…

…and then after lights go up and a grey haired producer complains about is this all that they are getting for their $40 grand, I’d CUT once the moustached guy says You promised us romantic scenes with Bruce Baxter and Maureen Mackenzie…

…then we CUT to Carl as we hear the bald producer say Carl, you’ve been in production for over two months!..

…then we CUT to Carl getting out of his seat as he says Yes I understand that, but fellas…we’re not making a film anymore, and I’ll tell you why…etc…

(Not 100% decided yet if I’d instead CUT to Carl as he lets slip about hiring a ship to get to a location, followed by the bald producer saying he’s just meant to be shooting on a backlot first…BEFORE I continue on with Carl saying that he understands that as he gets up to talk about how things have changed and that he’s found a map etc. (I need this as a MENTION OF THE MAP before it’s shown again later in his assistant’s dream, and before it blows out of Carl’s hands after that)

…but either way, I’d then CUT at this close-up shot of Carl telling the producers …that’s where I’ll shoot my picture…

…and then we CUT to the close-up of this guy turning round quickly…

and the next shot which follows normally now matches as the grey haired producer still has his hands together at this point…

…and we continue on at this point as Carl is asked to leave by the bald guy, and then gets a glass of his assistant Preston so that he can listen in as the bald producer sticks up for him but the other two producers slag him off and one says Carl will bankrupt them and demands that the animal footage is sold and that they salvage something from this debacle (I MIGHT remove guy saying he’s a preening self-promoter, not sure yet), and I MIGHT CUT to Carl and Preston running away with film cannisters at this point, OR just continue on as normal as a young helper is sent to call Carl back in, but he’s gone…

…and then we continue on with Carl and Preston running off with film cannisters…

…and then after getting chased by the producers as they escape in a taxi, we CUT on close-up of Preston’s face once Carl tells him Don’t worry Preston, I’ve had a lot of practise at this…

…and then after missing out him saying that he’s used to crapping the crappers, we CUT to Carl’s expressive face…

…and then we continue on as normal and then CUT on Preston telling him that ‘Fay’ is dong a picture with RKO…

…and then we miss out Carl saying Cooper huh?, and CUT to him just saying …I might have known

(I MIGHT end up missing out Carl saying that altogether, not sure yet)

…and then we continue on as normal as the yellow taxi heads towards us, as we hear Preston saying You’re not listening, we gotta delay the shoot, shut production down, we can’t sail tonight…

…and then we continue on as normal as Carl gets out (I MIGHT miss out him telling Preston For God’s sake Preston, start thinking like a winner, and just have him say to call Jack as he needs that goddam screenplay only) to look for a girl and spots Anne walking away from the burlesque club, and then saves her skin when she then steals an apple, and then takes her for a meal to talk about his project…and as Carl say’s …this fateful meeting that changes everything we CUT on a close-up of a curious Anne…

NOTE - i like to imagine that Carl mentioned to Anne that Jack Driscoll was writing the script during this conversation, which convinced her to take the chance with him!

…and then we CUT to a foghorn sounding as the the yellow taxi pulls arrives at the docks at night…

…and then we continue on as normal, and then CUT on Carl’s close-up once he’s said I keep tellin’ ya Jack, there’s no money in theatre…you’re much better off sticking with film…

…so I’d miss out Jack saying he loves the theatre and Carl saying he doesn’t or he would have jumped, and INSTEAD we then CUT to one of the producers swiping his hat in frustration at dock with police -

…and then we continue with this CGI’d shot of the ship against the city, but I MIGHT remove it, not sure yet…

…and then we continue on as normal, as Jack is given a place to sleep by Choy and the Captain…

…and then we continue on as normal until we get to this close-up of the chloroform bottles -

…and then we continue on as normal with this ship shot out at sea, and we CUT at the end of it -

…then we CUT to Jack typing in his cage, and continue on as normal as Jimmy the cabin boy says Compliments of the chef… as he drops food off, and we CUT after he puts the tray down -

…then we CUT to Jimmy taking something as he exits the cage and the typing continues…

…and then we continue on as normal as the black crewman Hayne’s takes Jack’s stolen pen off Jimmy, and tells Driscoll he didn’t mean no harm, and that he’ll keep him out of the way, it’s just that he likes it down here, and that he found him there four years ago, and CUT on his side profile once he ends up saying …stowed away in one of them bat cages…

…then we CUT to Hayne’s saying …he was wilder than half the animals in here…

…and then we continue on as normal, and CUT on the close-up of Hayne’s once he says …he still won’t tell me where he came from, but it wasn’t any place good…

(NOTE - I MIGHT miss out Hayne’s close-up and final line, and just end on the shot where he says …he was wilder than half the animals in here… - NOT SURE YET)

…then we CUT to a zoom-in on the ship again, as we hear it’s engines chug and Carl’s voice saying She’s standing at the railing, she doesn’t know it yet…but they are sailing toward disaster…ya got that?, and then we CUT once we hear Jack’s voice saying okay, so she turns… as we hear typing…

…and then we CUT to Carl saying …she has to look away…and that’s when she sees it…

…and then we continue on as normal as Jimmy comes down the ladder slowly…

…and then we continue on as normal, as Jack says Sees what?, what?…and Carl turns to say …the island…, and continues discuss it with Jack, as Carl then spots Jimmy as Jack types out SKULL ISLAND…

…and then we continue on as normal, as we see the front of the ship chasing dolphins, and hear Carl’s voice saying Alright everyone from the top, aaaand ACTION!..

…and we continue on as normal as we see Carl filming a scene with Anne and Bruce the actor…

…and then we continue on as normal as Anne says I think this is awfully exciting, I’ve never been on a ship before…, as Jack smiles watching, and we CUT once Bruce says I’ve never been on one with a woman before!..

…then we CUT to the close-up of Carl scowling as we just make out Bruce saying muffledly …just being around is trouble!, as Carl sees Jimmy whispering to Haynes…

NOTE: I MIGHT CUT BEFORE CARL SAYS “CUT!”…OR I MIGHT CUT ONCE CARL SAYS “CUT!”…OR I MIGHT CUT ONCE CARL SAYS “GREAT!”…OR I MIGHT EVEN EXCLUDE THIS WHOLE ‘FILMING’ SCENE ALTOGETHER, AND CUT DIRECTLY FROM JACK TYPING ‘SKULL ISLAND’ TO THE CAPTAIN TAPPING HIS COMPASSES - NOT DECIDED YET.

…and then we CUT to the Captain tapping his compasses…

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…then we CUT to a crewman getting a message on the ship’s radio…

…and then we CUT to this shot of the paper message being ripped off…

NOTE - ALTERNATIVELY, I COULD HAVE THE UNIVERSAL PICTURES PRESENTS AND A WINGNUT FILMS PRODUCTION AND KING KONG TITLES IN-BETWEEN ANNE’S CURIOUS CLOSE-UP AND THE FOGHORN AS THE TAXI ARRIVES AT THE DOCKS…

ALSO NOTE - I MIGHT DISCARD SCENE OF CARL FILMING ON THE SHIP AS THE BOY TELLS THE CREW WHAT HE HEARD…AS WE SEE THEM ALL CONFRONT CARL ABOUT HIS INTENTIONS TO FIND SKULL ISLAND LATER ANYWAY - SO I COULD JUST CUT FROM THE CLOSE-UP OF JACK TYPING THE WORDS ‘SKULL ISLAND’ DIRECTLY TO THE CAPTAIN TAPPING HIS COMPASSES ON THE TABLE INSTEAD! - THIS WOULD JOIN 2 VERY ATMOSPHERIC SCENES TOGETHER WITHOUT THE FLUFF OF THE ‘CARL FILMING THE ACTOR/ACTRESS’ SCENE INBETWEEN, AND HELP TO SHORTEN THE RUNTIME EVEN MORE - NOT SURE 100% YET, BUT I QUITE LIKE THIS IDEA.

ALSO NOTE - JACK AND ANNE ARE NOT A LOVE ITEM IN THIS, AND ONLY INITIALLY GET THROWN TOGETHER WHEN THE SHIP IS GETTING ROCKED ABOUT WHEN IT REACHES THE ISLAND!

I’d DEFINITELY NOT include the additional horned dinosaur scene as it’s bloated CGI nonsense that’s over-colorgraded and has ridiculous physics, and merely repeats music heard in brontosaurus chase - keep the more mysterious theatrical footage of big trees/jungle as the men follow after Kong.

I’d DEFINITELY NOT include the additional shooting of the giant bird scene, as it just looks stupid.

I’d DEFINITELY NOT include some of the additional soldiers in truck scenes, but WILL INCLUDE the additional Kong jumping on the truck that shoots at him on pond scene.

I WILL INCLUDE the additional raft/giant fish scene.

ADD MORE PICS OF KONG FALLING AND ANNE AND JACK MEETING UP HERE

…then we CUT to close-up of dead Kong’s hand (which is a great music match here), as reporters take photos, and a guy in the crowd yells “KONG!” -

ADD FURTHER PICS HERE WHERE GUY SHOUTS “KONG!” AND OTHER SHOTS OF CROWDS AND REPORTERS, ENDING WITH DENHAM’S CLOSE-UP AS HE SAYS IT WAS BEAUTY THAT KILLED THE BEAST BEFORE HE TURNS AND WE FADE TO BLACK -

My ENDING involves normal footage of Kong falling and Anne getting up and then embracing Jack on top of the Empire State Building…then CUT to close-up of Kong’s hand with photographers on top of him as we hear a guy shout “Kong” (music blends in well with previous shot of Anne and Jack embracing)…then CUT to something involving New York cop as 2 reporters move forward and one says to the other that Kong must have known what was coming…then CUT OUT other reporter saying what does it matter, he was just a dumb animal…and instead CUT to Carl pushing forward as the other reporter then just says that the aeroplanes got him, as close-up of Carl then says that it wasn’t the planes, it was beauty killed the beast, as he turns slightly…then FADE OUT to black (discarding final wide shot of crowds around Kong’s body, as it makes him look small!)…then CUT to end titles and music.

NOTE - DO A NEW ‘GIANT CENTIPEDE’ SEQUENCE, WHICH JUST HAS THE PAN UP TO THE CENTIPEDE STARTING TO CRAWL ALONG THE CEILING (WITH DINOSAUR GETTING CHOMPED IN THE BACKGROUND)…AND THEN CUT TO THE SHOT OF ANNE SCAMPERING OUT.

INDEPENDENCE DAY  (released 1996/directed by Roland Emmerich)

Teaser Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ywVziLVbCmw  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Teaser Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qYJfxI6QjJQ

Teaser Trailer 3 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7ukcrw3zrxU  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W0J6mB8NsgI

IDEAS FOR A COMBINED ‘THE LAST JEDI/THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ MEGA CUT SEQUEL TO THE ‘FORCE AWAKENS’, AS ONE LONG, EPIC FINALE TO THE ‘SKYWALKER’ SAGA…AND A WAY TO SHOW IN A SINGLE MOVIE THAT SNOKE WAS IN FACT MERELY A CLONE…AS WELL AS A WAY TO INTRODUCE THE EMPEROR AS A ‘WTF’ SURPRISE ELEMENT, WITHOUT IT BEING REVEALED IN THE OPENING SCROLL WORDING BEFOREHAND.

MENTION HOW FRUSTRATING IT’S BEEN TO HAVE TO INCLUDE THE LIKES OF THE ‘QUICKSAND/CAVERN’ SCENE, BECAUSE FINDING THE KNIFE CLUE WAS SO IMPORTANT TO INCLUDE. AND THE SAME WITH HAVING TO GO TO POE’S OLD PLANET TOO, BECAUSE WE NEED TO HAVE C3PO’S MEMORY UNLOCKED TO FIND OUT WHAT THE SITH DIRECTIONS TO EXEGOL ARE.

(NOTE: ALL THE FOLLOWING SEQUENCES ARE IN THE EXACT ORDER THAT THEY APPEAR IN THE MOVIE, EXCEPT I’VE RE-CUT THEM IN THE WAYS I PREFER. I’LL DECIDE WHAT I WANT TO KEEP AND THE ORDER I PREFER ONCE I’VE COMPLETED THEM ALL)

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Rey holds Luke’s broken lightsaber, as Leia says WE HAVE EVERYTHING WE NEED…

…and we continue as we see a group shot of everyone inside the Falcon…

…and we continue as we end THE LAST JEDI footage with the Falcon travelling through blue hyperspace into a flash of white…

(NOTE - THERE’S A STRONG CHANCE THAT I MIGHT CUT TO KYLO TOUCHING VADER’S MASK AS WE HEAR HIS VOICE SAY “JOIN ME…” AT THIS POINT - NOT 100% SURE YET, BUT THIS COULD IMPLY THAT IT’S THE EMPEROR FORCE-CALLING HIM, AS KYLO HEAR’S HIM USE VADER’S VOICE WHEN KYLO INITIALLY GOES TO FIND HIM ON EXAGOL)

…then we CUT to Kylo touching Vader’s mask…

…and we end on this shot…

…then we CUT to Vader’s mask as we hear his voice say JOIN ME…

…then we CUT to Kylo opening his eyes as he sees flashbacks of him killing his father Han, then let’s go of the mask…

…then we CUT to the start of THE RISE OF SKYWALKER footage with a starfield as we pan down to 3 screaming ties travelling towards Kylo’s Stardestroyer in orbit near a red planet…

• NOTE - AT THIS POINT I MIGHT ADD THE ‘VADER’S CASTLE ON MUSTAFAR’ SHOT FROM THE LAST EPISODE OF THE ‘OBI-WAN KENOBI’ TV SHOW BEFORE WE THEN SEE KYLO TURN AROUND…AS A WAY TO CONFIRM THAT HE’S ACTUALLY ON MUSTAFAR AT THIS POINT! *

(OR…SHOULD I PUT KYLO TOUCHING THE VADER MASK AS HE HEARS HIS VOICE SAY “JOIN ME…” AS THE FIRST ‘THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ FOOTAGE, BEFORE THE 3 TIES FLY DOWN OVER MUSTAFAR(?), AS HE LOOKS FOR A WAYFINDER TO GET TO EXEGOL???) - THIS MIGHT HELP TO IMPLY THAT IT WAS THE EMPEROR WHO WAS CHANNELING THE “JOIN ME…” TO KYLO…AS DOESN’T HE SAY THAT EVERY VOICE KYLO HAS HEARD (INCLUDING VADER’S VOICE) HAS BEEN HIM??? - CHECK THIS.

(NOTE - THE WAY THE MUSIC BUILDS IN THE ‘GROUP’ SHOT/FALCON IN HYPERSPACE’ SHOT GIVES THE IMPRESSION OF A ‘CONCLUSION’ AT THAT POINT…SO CUTTING TO THE INITIAL SCENES FROM ‘THE RISE OF SKYWALKER’ SHOULD GIVE AN ADEQUATE IMPRESSION THAT A PERIOD OF TIME HAS PASSED) - UNFORTUNATELY, THESE SCREENSHOTS CAN’T CONVEY HOW THE MUSIC FITS TOGETHER DURING MY CUTS.

…then we CUT to Kylo turning in close-up…

…and continue as normal as he pushes the lid off a stone structure and picks up a Sith Wayfinder, then flies to Exegol to find the Emperor…

(PUT MORE PHOTOS HERE)

NOTE: ADD IN ALL THE DIALOGUE - not sure if I’m going to use THE DARK SIDE OF THE FORCE IS A PATHWAY TO MANY ABILITIES SOME CONSIDER TO BE UNNATURAL dialogue or not yet.

…and continue on until we end on this shot…

…and then we CUT to this close-up of Kylo saying WHAT COULD YOU GIVE ME?..

…and then we CUT to the Emperor’s hands as he says A NEW EMPIRE…

…and continue on as normal as a Stardestroyer fleet appears…and we hear the Emperor’s voice say THE MIGHT OF THE FINAL ORDER WILL SOON BE READY…IT WILL BE YOUR’S IF YOU DO AS I ASK…

…then we CUT to a close-up of Kylo, as we hear the Emperor’s voice say END THE JEDI…AND BECOME WHAT YOUR GRANDFATHER VADER COULD NOT…

…and we end on this shot once Kylo has switched off his lightsaber…

…then we CUT to this close-up of the Emperor smiling as lightening shines on him…

…and continues as normal to black…

the movie normally continues with the Falcon in hyperspace at this point - MIGHT GET RID OF THIS HERE, AND USE ELSEWHERE - NOT SURE YET.

MIGHT GET RID OF CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING HOLOCHESS SCENE AT THIS POINT, BUT MIGHT DO A CUT DOWN VERSION OF IT - NOT SURE YET. AND DEFINITELY GET RID OF ALL SHOTS OF THE BIG YELLOW DISNEYFIED ALIEN!

…and then we CUT to Falcon flying towards ice planet…

…and continue on until we end on this close-up of Poe saying T minus 5!..

…then we CUT to the Falcon entering an ice base (GETTING RID OF FINN RUNNING THROUGH A SPARKING FALCON INTERIOR)…

…and continue as normal as the Falcon turns onto a landing pad, and Finn opens the hatch to an alien contact who tells him that he has a message from a spy in the First Order (doesn’t know who it is), but tells him to transfer the message to Leia…

…and continue as normal as TIEs follow the Falcon and Finn shoots back, and Poe asks how many are left, and we end on this shot as Poe says TOO MANY!..

…and then we CUT to seeing an overhead gantry in front of them…

…and then we CUT to Chewie roaring and pointing (which is a brief shot which came slightly EARLIER)…

…and then we CUT to the Falcon turning on it’s side, as Finn blasts the gantry…

…and continue on as normal as the Falcon blasts through an ice wall…

…and we end on this shot of the Falcon flying away…

NOTE: I MIGHT THEN CUT TO THE EARLIER SHOT OF FALCON FLYING THROUGH HYPERSPACE (SEE ABOVE) AT THIS POINT - NOT SURE YET.

…then we CUT to Rey meditating in a jungle in mid air saying BE WITH ME…BE WITH ME…

…and we end on this close-up of Rey as she says THEY’RE NOT WITH ME…

…then we CUT to Rey saying I DIDN’T FINISH THE TRAINING COURSE…I GOT DISTRACTED… (Note - I’m just laying out the EXACT sequence and dialogue here at the moment, without trying out any kind of re-edit at the moment - although IF I do use it, I MIGHT cut directly from Rey saying I KNOW IT LOOKS…to I THINK I’M JUST TIRED, THAT’S ALL…)

…then we continue as Rey puts her staff over her back saying I’M JUST NOT FEELING MYSELF…

…then we continue as Rey says I KNOW IT LOOKS…

…then we continue as Rey says …UH, IT LOOKS LIKE I’M MAKING EXCUSES…

…then we continue as Leia says DON’T TELL ME WHAT THINGS LOOK LIKE, TELL ME WHAT THEY ARE…

…then we continue as Rey says I THINK I’M JUST TIRED, THAT’S ALL…

…then we continue as Leia looks at her and starts to turn as we hear a female voice shout GENERAL!..

…then we continue as a female rebel says THE FALCON STILL HASN’T ARRIVED…COMMANDER’S ASKING FOR GUIDANCE…

…then we continue as Rey gives Luke’s now-fixed lightsaber back to Leia…

…then we continue as Rey says I WILL EARN YOUR BROTHER’S SABER…ONE DAY…, as Leia takes it and BB-8 beeps…

…then we continue as Rey laughs a little saying NO, YOU CAN’T DO IT FOR ME…

…then we continue as Leia says NEVER UNDERESTIMATE A DROID!..as she walks away and Rey turns and says YES MASTER…

…then the movie continues as normal, as we see Rey flipping through the Jedi texts. as we see a drawing of a Sith Wayfinder, as a voice shouts REY… (BY THE WAY, LUKE GAVE THE IMPRESSION THAT HE HADN’T READ THEM WHEN YODO ASKED HIM IN THE LAST JEDI, BUT IN THIS MOVIE IT’S MADE OUT THAT LUKE WENT LOOKING FOR THE SITH WAYFINDERS - IS ALL THIS ASSUMPTION ON MY PART CORRECT?? - CHECK PROPERLY)

NOTE - OR I could CUT from Falcon breaking through ice into space…to the shot of Rey flipping through the Jedi texts…so that I miss out the entire scene of her giving Luke’s lightsaber back to Leia (DOES SHE ACTUALLY STILL HAVE IT IN CERTAIN SHOTS BEFORE LEIA GIVES IT BACK TO HER!??)

…then we continue as a female rebel pilot shouts FALCON’S BACK!..and we end on Rey closing the book and getting up to leave quickly…

MISS OUT NEXT SEQUENCE OF FALCON ON FIRE, AS IT’S MAINLY SILLY DIALOGUE - AND SUDDENLY LOOKS LIKE IT’S ALL IN DAYLIGHT COMPARED TO SCENE BEFORE IT!

…then we CUT to a large group of rebels gathered beneath the big Tantive ship, as we hear Poe’s voice say WE’VE DECODED THE INTEL FROM THE FIRST ORDER SPY…

…then we continue as Poe says AND IT CONFIRMS THE WORST…SOMEHOW PALPATINE RETURNED…

…then we continue as there are gasps from the gathering, as Rey looks to her side a little…

…then we continue as Leia looks at Rey and then looks away… (NOTE - THIS SHOT OF HER LOOKS WEIRD SOMEHOW, SO I MIGHT MISS IT OUT OR TRIM IT A BIT - I COULD JUST HAVE HER LOOKING AT REY, OR IF I JUST HAVE HER LOOKING AWAY I WILL BE ABLE TO RETAIN ROSE’S VOICE SAYING WAIT…

…then we continue as ROSE says DO WE BELIEVE THIS?..and we hear a voice say IT CANNOT BE…THE…

…then we continue as the alien rebel says EMPEROR IS DEAD…and we hear a voice say DARK SCIENCE…

…then we continue as a bearded rebel says CLONING…SECRETS ONLY A SITH KNEW… (NOTE - I MIGHT cut SECRETS ONLY A SITH KNEW, as what about the likes of the Kamino cloners in AOTC?, and Luke’s alien pal seemed to know about cloners in general, saying they were good at it - Am I correct in this? Was it outlawed over the years? Also, how would this bearded rebel know that only the Sith knew the secrets of cloning? Check properly)

…then we continue as Poe’s voice says HE’S BEEN PLANNING HIS REVENGE… (NOT SURE IF I’LL MISS OUT THIS REVENGE LINE OR NOT)

…then we continue as Poe says HIS FOLLOWERS HAVE BEEN BUILDING SOMETHING FOR YEARS…

…then we continue as Poe’s voice says THE LARGEST FLEET THE GALAXY’S EVER KNOWN…

…then we continue as Poe says HE CALLS IT THE FINAL ORDER…

…then we continue as Poe’s voice says IN 16 HOURS ATTACKS ON ALL FREE WORLDS BEGIN…

…then we continue as Chewie growls…and we hear Poe’s voice say THE…

…then we continue as Poe’s voice says EMPEROR AND HIS FLEET ARE HIDING IN THE UNKNOWN…

…then we continue as Poe says REGIONS…ON A WORLD CALLED EXEGOL…

…then we continue as Rey looks up…

…then we continue as R2D2 beeps excitedly…

…then we continue as C3PO says EXEGOL DOES NOT…

…then we continue as C3PO’s voice says APPEAR ON ANY STAR CHART…THE…

…then we continue as C3PO’s voice says LEGEND DESCRIBES IT AS HIDDEN WORLD…

…then we continue as C3PO says OF THE SITH…

…then we continue as Rey runs to take the Jedi text book out of a box, as we hear Poe’s voice say SO PALPATINE’S BEEN…

…then we continue as Poe says OUT THERE ALL THIS TIME…PULLING THE STRINGS…

…then we continue as Leia says ALWAYS IN THE SHADOWS FROM THE VERY BEGINNING…

…then we continue as we hear a voice say IF WE WANT TO STOP…

…then we continue as Maz says HIM…WE MUST FIND HIM…WE MUST FIND EXEGOL… (NOTE - I MIGHT miss out her saying IF WE WANT TO STOP HIM…as the black rebel and others should be looking down at who’s talking, like those in the shot before do - NOT SURE YET)

…then we continue as we hear a voice say GENERAL…, and Maz turns around…and sees Rey holding a book as she says CAN I SPEAK WITH YOU?..and we hear her say I KNOW HOW TO GET…

…then we continue as Rey says to Leia TO EXEGOL…and Leia says TELL ME…as Rey then says LUKE SEARCHED…

…then we continue as Rey says FOR IT, FOR A LONG TIME…HE NEARLY FOUND IT…as she shows Leia the book and says THERE ARE CYPHERS HERE I CAN’T READ…

…then we continue as Rey flips some pages saying BUT HE SAID TO GET THERE YOU NEED ONE OF THESE…A SITH WAYFINDER… (NOTE - does all this ‘research’ by Luke mean that he read the Jedi texts after all, despite it being implied by Yoda that he might not have in THE LAST JEDI? - Doesn’t matter anyway, as I’d be getting rid of Yoda’s scene in my version)

…then we continue as Rey says THEY’RE COMPASSES THAT LEAD THE WAY TO EXAGOL…

…then we continue as Rey says TO STOP WHAT WE BOTH KNOW IS COMING…I NEED TO FINISH WHAT LUKE STARTED…FIND EXEGOL…

…then we continue as Rey says FIND THE EMPEROR… (NOTE - Leia then says NO…at this point - not sure if I’d include it or not yet)

…and then we CUT to close-up of Rey saying IT’S WHAT YOU WOULD DO…

…then we continue as Rey uncouples a hose on the Falcon in close-up and end the shot JUST BEFORE we hear Poe’s voice say SO… (I’d get rid of Poe saying SO YOU GOT HER UP AND RUNNING…and then Rey saying YOU WERE RIGHT BEFORE…as I’d discard the whole silly sequence where the Falcon is on fire and they have an argument, which that dialogue refers to)

…then we CUT to Rey throwing the hose down under the Falcon as she says I’M GOING TO PICK UP LUKE’S SEARCH FOR EXEGOL…I’M GOING TO START…

…and then continue as Rey says WHERE HIS TRAIL WENT COLD…THE FORBIDDEN DESERTS OF PASAANA…

…and then continue as Poe says YEAH I KNOW, WE’RE GOING WITH YOU…as he pats her on the shoulder…

…and then we continue as normal until we get to the point where BB-8 beeps and C3PO says I WHOLEHEARTEDLY AGREE…and we end on Rey smiling…

…then we CUT to Rey contemplating the jungle as Poe says HEY, WE SHOULD GET GOING…then asks her WHAT IS IT?..and she says NOTHING…so that I can get the beginning of C3PO starting to say IN THE EVENT THAT I DO NOT RETURN…I WANT YOU TO KNOW THAT YOU HAVE BEEN A REAL FRIEND ARTOO…MY BEST ONE IN FACT…as he walks off, and we end on R2D2 beeping profusely…

(OR…DO I INSERT KYLO TOUCHING VADER’S MASK WHICH SAYS “JOIN ME…” SCENE IMMEDIATELY BEFORE REY CONTEMPLATING THE JUNGLE SCENE - TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE SHE SENSES KYLO PERHAPS???)

…then we CUT to Leia giving Rey Luke’s lightsaber again…and we end on them hugging… (NOTE - NOT DECIDED YET IF I’D INCLUDE SCENE BEFORE THIS WHERE REY SAYS SHE HAS SO MUCH SHE WANTS TO TELL LEIA, AND LEIA SAYS TO TELL HER WHEN SHE RETURNS, OR NOT. ALSO NOT DECIDED IF I’D INCLUDE THE NEXT SHOT BELOW WHERE LEIA HOLDS REY’S HEAD WHEN HUGGING, OR NOT)

…then we CUT to the Falcon taking off…

…and we continue on as everyone gathers in the Falcon’s cockpit, and it flies away from the jungle planet…

…and we continue as Kylo and his Knights of Ren watch as his helmet is fixed, and they fly back to his Stardestroyer, as we end the scene of them walking down a corridor JUST BEFORE the stormtroopers speak…

…then we CUT to Kylo throwing down the alien contact’s head on a table…

…and then we continue as Kylo walks past those sitting at the table saying WE HAVE A SPY IN OUR RANKS…WHO JUST SENT A MESSAGE TO THE RESISTANCE…WHOEVER THIS TRAITOR IS, WON’T STOP US…WITH WHAT I’VE SEEN ON EXEGOL, THE FIRST ORDER IS ABOUT TO BECOME A TRUE EMPIRE…

…and then we continue as we see Hux seated, as Kylo turns round saying I SENSE UNEASE ABOUT MY APPEARANCE GENERAL HUX…as those opposite Hux look over at him…

…then we CUT to HUX grimacing, as we hear a voice opposite him say FORGIVE ME SIR, BUT THESE ALLIES ON…

…and then we continue as the officer opposite Hux says EXEGOL…THEY SOUND LIKE A CULT, CONJURERS AND SOOTHSAYERS…

…and then we continue as the person beside him says THEY’VE CONJURED LEGIONS OF STARDESTROYERS…THE SIXTH FLEET WILL INCREASE OUR RESOURCES TEN THOUSAND FOLD!..

…and then we continue as the person looks over at Hux saying SUCH RANGE AND POWER WILL CORRECT THE ERROR OF STARKILLER BASE…as we hear a female voice say WE’LL NEED TO INCREASE RECRUITMENT, HARVEST MORE…

…and then we continue as the female voice says OF THE GALAXY’S YOUNG…as the officer then says THIS FLEET…WHAT IS IT, A GIFT?..WHAT IS…

…and then we continue as the officer says HE ASKING FOR IN…

…and then we continue on as we hear the officer say RETURN?..as Kylo suddenly throws him to the ceiling using the Force…and says PREPARE TO CRUSH ANY WORLDS THAT DEFY US…MY KNIGHTS AND I ARE GOING HUNTING FOR THE SCAVENGER…

…and then we continue as the Falcon drops out of lightspeed at the planet Pasaana…

…and then we continue as Poe says SURE THIS IS IT?..and then C3PO says THESE ARE THE EXACT CO-ORDINATES THAT MASTER LUKE LEFT BEHIND…

…and then we continue as the group turn round a bend, and come across a colourful gathering…and Poe says WHAT IS THIS?..and then C3PO says IT’S AGGY AGGY’S FESTIVAL OF THE ANCESTORS…OOH, THIS CELEBRATION OCCURS ONLY ONCE EVERY 42 YEARS…and then Finn sarcastically says WELL THAT’S LUCKY…and we end on C3PO raising his finger saying LUCKY INDEED!.. (NOTE - I’m not certain yet if I’d cut here OR after they all turn round and C3PO looks back and forth at the group OR if I’d just keep the whole scene as it is where C3PO turns to look behind)

…then we cut to a big barbecue and dancing aliens, as Rey says I’VE NEVER SEEN ANYTHING LIKE THIS…then Finn says I’VE NEVER SEEN SO FEW WAYFINDERS…then Poe says THERE’S ALWAYS RANDOM FIRST ORDER PATROLS IN CROWDS LIKE THESE…as BB-8 looks at a smoke cannister…

…then we continue as Poe says KEEP YOUR HEADS DOWN…CHEWIE…LET’S SPLIT UP, SEE WHAT THE LOCALS KNOW…as Rey turns and stops to look around, and we end on her looking over at some alien children watching a puppet show…

…then we CUT to this shot of the alien children (I’m not keen on the close-up laughing puppet, though it’s no biggie if I keep it in), as we then hear an alien voice, and then hear C3PO’s voice say SHE SAYS WELCOME!..as the female alien drapes a necklace over Rey’s neck…and wants to know Rey’s family name, but Rey says I DON’T HAVE ONE…I’M JUST REY…

…and then we continue as Rey suddenly turns away, and goes looking around in a hurry…and we end on her in Force-contact with Kylo…

…then we CUT to Kylo saying YOU CAN’T HIDE REY…NOT FROM ME…

…and then we continue as Rey says I SEE THROUGH THE CRACKS IN YOUR MASK…YOU’RE HAUNTED…YOU CAN’T STOP SEEING WHAT YOU DID TO YOUR FATHER…

…and then we continue as Kylo says DO YOU STILL COUNT THE DAYS SINCE YOUR PARENTS LEFT?..SUCH PAIN IN YOU…SUCH ANGER…I DON’T WANT TO HAVE…

…and then we continue as we hear Kylo’s voice say TO KILL YOU…I’M GOING TO FIND YOU, AND I’M GOING TO TURN YOU TO THE DARK SIDE…

…and then we continue as Kylo says WHEN I OFFER YOU MY HAND AGAIN…YOU’LL TAKE IT…

…and then we continue as Rey says WE’LL SEE…as Kylo suddenly snatches Rey’s necklace… (NOTE - I MIGHT add 'Han meme saying “That’s not how the Force works” here, as I’m not keen on the fact that Kylo can ‘force-grab’ her necklace from a huge distance away - in the same manner that he gets Rey’s lightsaber to fight off the Knights of Ren - as it seems to be yet another ridiculously OVER-POWERED ability introduced by these sequels!)

…and then we continue as Rey runs towards the others saying WE HAVE TO GO…BACK TO THE FALCON, NOW…as Finn then says WHY?..and Rey then says IT’S REN…

…and then continue as a female officer takes the necklace to Kylo saying SIR, WE’VE HAD THIS ANALYZED…IT COMES FROM THE MEDIAN SYSTEM…PASAANA, FORBIDDEN VALLEY…as Kylo then tells an officer PREPARE MY SHIP…ALERT THE LOCAL TROOPS…SEND A DIVISION…

…and we continue on a the officer says YES…SUPREME LEADER…

…and then we continue as Rey and the others run until we hear a voice shout FREEZE!..HOLD IT RIGHT THERE!..

…and then a stormtrooper with a gun pointed at them says I’VE LOCATED THE RESISTANCE FUGITIVES, ALL UNITS REPORT…before he is shot dead with a crossbow arrow…

…and then we continue as a masked figure says FOLLOW ME…and they all enter a slow moving vehicle…

…and we continue as the masked figure says LEIA SENT ME A TRANSMISSION…and he opens a small hatch to say something to the small alien driver…as Finn says HOW DID YOU FIND US?..and Lando takes off his mask saying WOOKIEES STAND OUT IN A CROWD!..

…and we continue on until Poe says GENERAL CALRISSIAN, WE’RE LOOKING FOR EXEGOL…and Lando then says OF COURSE YOU ARE…

…and we continue as Lando shows a hologram of a Sith Wayfinder, saying ONLY TWO REMAIN…as Rey then says A SITH WAYFINDER…LUKE SKYWALKER CAME HERE TO FIND ONE…as Lando then chuckles and says I KNOW…I WAS WITH HIM…LUKE AND I WERE TRAILING AN OLD JEDI HUNTER…OCHI OF BESTOON…HE WAS CARRYING A CLUE THAT COULD LEAD TO A WAYFINDER…WE FOLLOWED HIS SHIP HALFWAY ACROSS THE GALAXY, HERE…WHEN WE GOT TO HIS SHIP, IT WAS ABANDONED…NO CLUE, NO WAYFINDER…

…and then we continue as Rey says IS OCHI’S SHIP STILL HERE?..as Lando then says IT’S OUT IN THE DESERT WHERE HE LEFT IT…and Rey then says WE NEED TO GET TO THAT SHIP…SEARCH IT AGAIN…as TIE fighters appear in the distance, and Lando says I’VE GOT A BAD FEELING ABOUT THIS…

…and we continue as Lando says OCHI’S SHIP IS OUT PAST LURCH CANYON, GO…and they say their farewells, as Rey then says LEIA NEEDS PILOTS GENERAL…as Lando says MY FLYING DAYS ARE LONG GONE…BUT DO ME A FAVOUR…GIVE LEIA MY LOVE…and Rey then says YOU SHOULD GIVE IT TO HER YOURSELF, THANKYOU…as we hear the TIES fly nearer, and Lando looks out…

…and then we continue as Rey and the others run from the TIEs, and steal a couple of speeders as stormtroopers give chase, and then use jetpacks…

…then we CUT to Rey on her speeder… (MISSING OUT THE WHOLE “THEY FLY NOW?” DIALOGUE)

…and we continue until Rey eventually says I SEE A SHIP…and we end on the close-up of Ochi’s ship (JUST BEFORE REY THEN SAYS I’VE SEEN THAT SHIP BEFORE… - BECAUSE MY VERSION OF THE FORCE AWAKENS WON’T INCLUDE REY’S VISIONS OF HER BEING TAKEN AWAY FROM HER PARENTS, OR IN OCHI’S SHIP)…

NOTE - AT THIS POINT I’D HAVE LIKED TO BE ABLE TO GET RID OF THE GROUP FALLING INTO THE ‘QUICKSAND’, AND THEN INTO THE CAVERN BELOW/FINDING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’/AND REY HEALING THE INJURED GIANT SNAKE…BUT I’M DEFINATELY GOING TO HAVE TO INCLUDE FINDING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’ NO MATTER WHAT UNFORTUNATELY…BUT WILL STILL GET RID OF ‘REY HEALING THE INJURED GIANT SNAKE’, NO MATTER WHAT! - SO I COULD USE THE SHORT SCENE OF ‘THE FAT REBEL REPORTING TO LEIA AND ROSE’ TO EITHER BREAK UP THE SCENE OF THE GROUP INSIDE THE CAVERN (IN PLACE OF THE BIT WHERE REY ASKS POE WHAT HE WAS GOING TO TELL HER, AND HE’S EVASIVE AS POE RIBS HIM ABOUT HAVING SECRETS)…OR I COULD USE IT TO

…our heroes sink into the ‘quicksand’…

…and then we CUT to BB-8 and the rest of our heroes falling into a cavern…

…and then we continue until this point BEFORE Rey asks Finn what he was going to say in the ‘quicksand’…

…then we CUT to the fat rebel updating Leia and Rose… (FINISH WORDING HERE)

…and then we CUT to a close-up of Chewie growling as we then hear Poe telling C3PO he doesn’t want to know what made the cavern…

…and then we continue until our heroes find Ochi’s skeleton (FINISH WORDING HERE), and we end on Finn saying NO HE DIDN’T… (SO THAT WE DON’T SEE POE TURNING AWAY SAYING HE DOESN’T LIKE BONES)

…then we CUT to BB-8 rolling towards the ‘map knife’…

…and then we continue as C3PO tell our heroes that he his programming won’t let him translate the knife wording, and we end on this shot once he’s said something like “I regret sir…”

NOTE - I WILL DEFINATELY NOT BE INCLUDING REY HEALING THE GIANT SNAKE, BUT IT LOOKS LIKE I WILL NOT BE ABLE TO INCLUDE THE SHOT OF CHEWIE PUTING THE ‘MAP KNIFE’ INTO HIS BAG EITHER.

…then we CUT to the Knights of Ren ship, as we them looking around…

…and then we continue as we see Ochi’s ship in the distance, the group climbs up towards it (FINISH WORDING HERE), and C3PO says WE CANNOT POSSIBLY FLY IN THAT OLD WRECK…

…then we CUT to the close-up of C3PO behind Chewie saying I SUGGEST WE RETURN TO THE MILLENNIUM FALCON AT ONCE…and continue as Rey senses something and says I’LL BE RIGHT BEHIND YOU…OKAY?..as Finn looks out at her leaving…

…and then we continue as Poe and the rest enter Ochi’s ship…

…and then we continue as they inspect the ship and it starts up okay…as Finn looks out and sees Rey in the distance, then says CHEWIE, TELL REY WE GOTTA GO…

…and then we continue as Chewie goes looking for Rey, as we see a couple of Knights of Ren watching him…

…and then we continue as Rey walks further into the desert, then stops…as we then see Kylo’s ship approach her…

…and then we continue as Ochi’s ship starts up…as Poe says WHAT’S SHE DOING?..WHERE THE HELL’S CHEWIE?..and then Finn says IT’S REN…as Poe turns to see him leave…

…and then we continue as Finn runs round a rocky area and sees First Order landing craft…

…then we CUT to Chewie being taken aboard a landing craft by stormtroopers, as Finn looks on…

…and then we continue as Rey ignites Luke’s lightsaber, as Kylo approaches in his ship, and end as Rey turns around saying HMMMPH… (NOTE - THE SHOT ENDS ON THE BACK OF HER HEAD, BUT THERE’S NOT A SCREENSHOT OF IT)

…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship…

…then we CUT to a close-up of Kylo…

…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship…

…then we CUT to Rey running away from Kylo’s ship, as she sommersaults above it, and slices a wing off, as it crashes into a fireball against a large rock…

…and then we continue as we see a close-up of Rey, and end on the shot just before we hear Finn’s voice shout REY!..

NOTE - IF THIS ABOVE WAY OF KILLING KYLO WAS TO WORK, I’D NEED TO RE-EDIT THE EARLIER SCENE OF HIM SAYING TO REY HE WAS GOING TO TURN HER TO THE DARK SIDE…AS THAT SEEMS STRANGE NOW THAT HE’S TRYING TO RUN HER DOWN AND KILL HER INSTEAD! - I THINK THE DIALOGUE CAN BE RE-EDITED TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE HE WANTS HER DEAD INSTEAD.

(HOWEVER, I MIGHT ALSO JUST INCLUDE FAR MORE SCENES INVOLVING KYLO FROM THIS POINT, PERHAPS EVEN RIGHT UP UNTIL THE EMPEROR FORCE-THROWS HIM A GREAT DISTANCE DOWN A DEEP PIT? - WHAT I’D DEFINATELY WANT TO GET RID OF IS THE REY/KYLO FIGHT AMONGST THE WAVES, AND THE WHOLE REY DYING/KYLO BRINGING REY BACK TO LIFE/THEM KISSING/KYLO DYING HAVING GIVEN HIS LIFE-FORCE TO REY SCENARIO!)

AND ALSO, THIS IS JUST AN INITIAL IDEA BELOW WHICH I DON’T KNOW WILL WORK OUT OR NOT WITH THE WHOLE ‘DEATH OF LEIA’ SCENARIO YET, SO THIS IS JUST TO REMIND ME THAT I’D TRY THESE OPTIONS AT THIS POINT - so I’d either CUT to this shot of Leia with the others as she senses something is wrong…

(NOTE - I’LL JUST SHOW THESE PICS ABOVE, BUT I DON’T KNOW IF I’D BE SHOWING MORE OR THE SCENE OR NOT YET)

…OR ALTERNATIVELY…I’D CUT FROM THE CLOSE-UP OF REY ABOVE TO THIS SHOT OF LEIA SENSING KYLO’S DEATH INSTEAD, WHERE SHE SAYS “BEN…”

…and IF I end up doing EITHER of these options above with Leia, I’d then CUT to Finn running (NOTE - the first shot wouldn’t load for me) as he shouts REY!..THEY GOT CHEWIE!..THEY GOT HIM!..as he points to a First Order lander flying away, as we end on the close-up of Rey looking up…

(NOTE - I COULD PERHAPS THEN CUT TO ONE OF THE REACTION SHOTS OF FINN…MOST LIKELY THE ONE OF HIM SHOUTING NOOO!..OR I MIGHT JUST CUT TO THE SHOT BELOW AT THIS POINT)

…then we CUT to Poe shouting WE GOTTA GO, THEY’RE COMING!..

…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey turning around to see TIES approaching, as we hear Finn and Poe shouting REY!..and WE GOTTA GO!..as she back around and says CHEWIE…and Finn runs towards ship shouting REY, C’MON…REY!..

…then we CUT to Kylo walking away from the wreckage of his ship…

…then we CUT to this shot of Kylo walking away from the wreckage…

…then we CUT to this shot of Kylo walking away from the wreckage, as he comes to a halt…

…then we CUT to this close-up of Kylo… (AS HE PRESUMABLY WATCHES OCHI’S SHIP TAKE OFF IN THE DISTANCE)

(NOTE - I’D PREFER TO NOT SHOW REY’s FORCE-LIGHTNING, AS I’D RATHER SHE DIDN’T SEEM SUPERPOWERED, AND WOULD RATHER KEEP THE PALPATINE REVEAL TO WHEN KYLO TELLS HER EVENTUALLY)

…and then we continue as we see Ochi’s ship hiding in asteroids…

…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey, as Finn’s voice says IT WASN’T YOUR FAULT…and then Rey says IT WAS…and then Finn says NO, IT WAS REN, HE MADE YOU…and we end on the shot where Rey turns around saying CHEWIE’S GONE!..

…then we CUT to BB-8 looking up at Rey…

…then we CUT to Finn silently facing us…as Rey looks worried…

…and then we continue as we see the Falcon being towed by TIEs towards a Stardestroyer, as we hear Hux’s voice say WE RECOVERED THE SCAVENGER’S SHIP, BUT SHE GOT AWAY…

…then we CUT to inside the Stardestroyer as General Pryde says IS THAT ALL?..as Hux then says NO ALLEGIANT GENERAL, THERE WAS ANOTHER TRANSPORT IN THE DESERT…IT BROUGHT BACK A VALUABLE PRISONER…and General Pryde then says PRISONER?..

…and then we continue as a door slides open, and a guarded Chewie roars…

…and then we continue as Hux says THE BEAST USED TO FLY WITH HAN SOLO…as Chewie then roars…and General Pryde says TAKE IT TO INTERROGATION STATION…and turns to leave…

…and we continue as Chewie is taken away by the Stormtroopers who say MOVE IT!..and we end on hearing Poe’s voice say WE’VE ONLY GOT 8 HOURS LEFT…

…then we CUT to Poe saying IF THE MISSION FAILS…IT’S ALL BEEN FOR NOTHING…and continue on until we end on Rey saying FOR CHEWIE…

…then we CUT to Ochi’s ship powering up to leave…

NOTE- HOWEVER…I DON’T KNOW YET IF I CAN JUST HAVE REY USE HER FORCE-SENSE TO SEARCH THE WRECKAGE OF THE DEATHSTAR FOR THE SECOND WAYFINDER…SO I MIGHT NEED TO USE THE WHOLE FINDING THE DAGGER/NEEDING TO GO TO KAJIMI TO MAKE BABU FRICK MAKE C3PO SAY IT’S INSCRIPTION SCENARIO (ALTHOUGH I DEFINATELY DON’T WANT REY TO USE THE KNIFE AS A ‘SHAPE MAP’ AGAINST THE DEATHSTAR WRECKAGE TOO)…SO I MIGHT HAVE TO DO THE ABOVE SCENE LIKE THIS INSTEAD -

…and we continue as Chewie is taken away by the Stormtroopers who say MOVE IT!..and we end on hearing Poe’s voice say WE’VE ONLY GOT 8 HOURS LEFT…

…then we CUT to Finn saying POE, CHEWIE HAD THE DAGGER…as Poe then says WELL, WE GOTTA FIND ANOTHER WAY…and Finn say THERE ISN’T…THAT WAS THE ONLY CLUE TO THE WAYFINDER THING, AND IT’S GONE!..as C3PO then says IT’S TRUE…THE INSCRIPTION ONLY LIVES IN MY MEMORY NOW…as we continue the scene right up until Rey says FOR CHEWIE…

…then we CUT to Ochi’s ship powering up to leave…

NOTE - ALTHOUGH I MIGHT END UP USING THE ENTIRE SCENE WHICH ENDS IN POE SAYING KAJIMI!..I’M NOT SURE YET.

ALTERNATIVELY…IS IT POSSIBLE TO JUST END ON THE SHOT OF C3PO SAYING YES MASTER POE! ??..AND HAVE THEM GO TO KAJIMI ANYWAY, WITHOUT INVOLVING BABU FRICK??

******** NEW IDEAS! *********

1. NOT SURE YET IF I WANT TO INCLUDE A RE-EDITED VERSION OF REY THINKING SHE’S KILLED CHEWIE WITH FORCE-LIGHTNING, AS WELL AS INCLUDE A RE-EDITED VERSION OF THE WHOLE ‘OCHI’S SHIP GOING TO KOJIMA/REY VS REN FIGHT/POE GETTING THE PASSKEY FROM AN EX-GIRLFRIEND’ SCENARIO…BUT I THINK I’M LEANING THAT WAY - EXCEPT I HOPEFULLY CAN DO WITHOUT INCLUDING BABU FRICK REMOVING C3PO’S MEMORY TRYING TO GET HIM TO TRANSLATE THE KNIFE INSCRIPTIONS - JUST HAVE HIM CASUALLY MENTION TO POE, FINN, AND REY THAT IT’S ONLY STORED IN HIS MEMORY NOW…AND END ON SHOT OF HIM SAYING “YES MASTER POE” - SO THIS IMPLIES THAT REY CAN NOW FIND OUT OFF C3PO THAT A WAYFINDER OBJECT IS ON THE DEATHSTAR RUINS (WHICH HE DETAILS IN THE SCENE WITH BABU FRICK WHICH I MIGHT BE GETTING RID OF)…WITHOUT HAVING TO USE THE KNIFE AS A ‘VISUAL GUIDELINE’ WHICH I DISLIKE - I JUST HOPE I CAN SHOW THE GROUP ENTERING THE CAVERN SMOOTHLY, SO THAT THEY FIND OCHI’S SKELETON AND KNIFE, WITHOUT HAVING TO SHOW THEM GOING THROUGH ‘QUICKSAND’, WHICH I DISLIKE TOO.

2. THE EMPEROR HAS DEMANDED THAT KYLO KILLS REY, AND HE IS DEFINATELY JUST ABOUT TO STRIKE HER AT THIS POINT BEFORE LEIA INTERVENES - SO JUST HAVE HER KILL HIM WHEN HE IS DISTRACTED BY LEIA SAYING ‘BEN’, AND LEAVE IT AT THAT IN MY VERSION…WITHOUT HIM BEING REDEEMABLE! (NOTE - ALSO, I HATE THE OVERLY ‘SUPERPOWERED’ FORCE-HEALING NOTION FOR REY, SO THIS SCENARIO ALSO GETS RID OF THAT - ALTHOUGH I CAN JUST ABOUT ACCEPT THAT BABY YODA CAN DO IT IN THE MANDALORIAN!) - BUT I MIGHT RE-EDIT THE SHOTS OF REY SKEWERING HIM, AND MIGHT INCLUDE KYLO SEEING HAN SAYING ‘BEN’ TOO…INBETWEEN THE SHOTS OF LEIA LYING DOWN HOLDING HAN’S MEDAL…AND KYLO DROPPING HIS LIGHTSABER, WHICH REY THEN GRABS. (NOT SURE ABOUT ALL THIS YET…SEE WHAT I’VE WRITTEN LOWER DOWN ABOUT IT ALL)

3. ALTHOUGH I DISLIKE YODA’S FORCEGHOST BEING ABLE TO AFFECT ‘REAL WORLD’ LIGHTNING IN THE LAST JEDI…(WHICH IS WHY I’M REMOVING THAT SCENE, AS WELL AS THE FACT THAT LUKE IS ALREADY WEARING JEDI ROBES AT THAT POINT, WHICH I DON’T WANT IN MY VERSION - HE WILL ONLY BE SEEN TO WEAR THEM AFTER HE HAS REJOINED WITH THE FORCE, AND DOES HIS FORCE-PROJECTION FIGHT WITH KYLO NEAR THE END OF THE LAST JEDI PORTION OF MY THE LAST JEDI/THE RISE OF SKYWALKER ‘MEGA-CUT’)…I RECKON I CAN LIVE WITH SEEING LUKE’S FORCEGHOST CATCHING THE LIGHTSABER AND LIFTING THE X-WING FOR REY TO FLY TO EXEGOL (AND LEADING THE REBELLION SHIPS TO WHERE IT IS TOO), AS BOTH THOSE INSTANCES DON’T SEEM AS RIDICULOUSLY OVER-‘SUPERPOWERED’ AS YODA’S FORCEGHOST BEING CAPABLE OF BRINGING DOWN ‘REAL-WORLD’ LIGHTNING WHEN HE WANTS! ALSO, THEY ARE BOTH GREAT SCENES INVOLVING SEEING JUST A BIT MORE OF A LIKEABLE LUKE FOR THE LAST TIME IN MY VERSION AT THE END OF THE DAY - (APART FROM WHEN WE SEE HIM AND LEIA WATCHING REY TOGETHER AT THE VERY END OF MY ‘MEGA-CUT’)

4. ONCE REY KILLS KYLO, SHE HEADS TO LUKE’S ISLAND IN KYLO’S SHIP AND BURNS IT, AND AFTER LUKE TELLS HER THAT LEIA KNEW ABOUT HER BEING A PALPATINE, HE GIVES HER LEIA’S LIGHTSABER AND RAISES HIS X-WING FOR HER TO USE KYLO’S WAYFINDER IN…AND THEN WE CAN GO TO POE AND THE GANG GETTING THE EMPEROR’S MESSAGE, AND THEN EVENTUALLY FOLLOWING REY’S COURSE IN LUKE’S X-WING - THE LAST WE WILL SEE OF THE EMPEROR IS HIS HOLOGRAM TO GENERAL PRYDE, AS I DISLIKE ALL HIS EVENTUAL SCENES ON THE SPIKEY THRONE! - WE CAN ASSUME HE AND HIS FOLLOWERS WERE ALL DESTROYED IN THE FINAL BATTLE, AND THEN HAVE REY GO TO TATTOOINE TO BURY BOTH LIGHTSABERS AS SHE NOW MADE HER OWN, AND END THINGS WITH HERE SEEING LUKE AND LEIA’S FORCEGHOSTS, AND SAYING HER NAME IS REY SKYWALKER.

…THE GROUP HAS LEFT IN THE FALCON TO HEAD TO ENDOR AND THE DEATH STAR RUINS, AND COME ACROSS SOME LOCALS ON ‘ALIEN HORSES’ (WHICH WILL NOT END UP ON THE STARDESTROYER BATTLE!) WHO HELP THEM, AND REY THEN SKIMS OVER TO THE RUINS ON HER OWN TO THE RUINS AND FINDS THE WAYFINDER OBJECT…

(NOTE - I’M GOING TO ASSUME THAT REY IS ‘DRAWN’ TO THE LOCATION OF THE WAYFINDER, EVEN THOUGH WE WON’T HEAR C3PO SAY THE KNIFE’S INSCRIPTION DIRECTIONS (!)…AS WE DON’T SEE KYLO USING A KNIFE ‘GUIDE’ EITHER WHEN HE FOUND THE FIRST ONE!

…and then we continue as she turns…

…then we CUT to a ‘Sith’ version of Rey unfurling a double-bladed lightsaber, who proceeds to fight her after saying DON’T BE AFRAID OF WHO YOU ARE…

…until we end on this close-up of Rey…

…then we CUT to the ‘Sith’ version of Rey snarling in close-up, as Rey falls backwards and drops the wayfinder…

…then we continue on as Kylo appears, and picks up the wayfinder…

…then we continue as Rey ignites her lightsaber and walks slowly towards Kylo, as Kylo says LOOK AT YOURSELF…YOU WANTED TO PROVE TO MY MOTHER THAT YOU WERE A JEDI, BUT YOU’VE PROVEN SOMETHING ELSE…as Rey comes to a halt…

…then we CUT to a close-up of Rey saying GIVE IT TO ME…

…and then we continue as Rey says THE DARK SIDE IS IN OUR NATURE…SURRENDER TO IT…and then Reys say GIVE IT TO ME…once again, as Kylo then says THE ONLY WAY YOU’RE GOING TO EXEGOL IS WITH ME…as he crushes the wayfinder, and Rey shouts NOOO!..and then starts to fight with him, as they both jump downwards…

…and then we continue as Leia senses something is wrong, and we end on the shot of her walking away…

…then we CUT to Rey and Kylo fighting on the outside of the death star ruins…

(I’M GETTING RID OF THE ANIMATRONIC MAZ AS I DISLIKE IT - IT’S WOODEN COMPARED TO THE CGI VERSION IN THE FORCE AWAKENS - AND HOW COME SHE’S ABLE TO KNOW THAT LEIA KNOWS WHAT HAS TO BE DONE, AND THAT TO REACH HER SON WILL TAKE ALL OF HER STRENGTH THAT’S LEFT?? - IS SHE PSYCHIC?? - CHECK THE FORCE AWAKENS AND READ UP ON WIKIPEDIA ABOUT HER)

…and then we continue as Finn runs towards them shouting REY!..and then Rey shouts NO!..as she Force-pushes him back…

…and we end on this shot of Finn being obscured by the waves…

…the we CUT to Finn landing and sliding back towards Jenna…

…and we then continue as Rey and Kylo keep fighting…until he’s just about to kill her and suddenly stops…

(NOTE - NOT SURE IF I’D RE-EDIT FIGHT SHORTER OR NOT - FOR INSTANCE AFTER REY AND KYLO DO THEIR FIRST JUMP INTO THE WAVES IN THE DISTANCE, DO I INSERT FINN SHOUTING REY!..AND THEN CUT TO REY LANDING LIKE A SUPERHERO FROM HER SECOND JUMP?? - ALSO, DO I RE-EDIT THE END OF THE FIGHT A BIT, JUST WHEN KYLO GOES TO TAKE A KILLING SWIPE AT HER?? - NOT SURE YET)

…and we continue as Leia whispers BEN…and a distracted Kylo turns around

…and then we continue as Leia lies down on her bed as she holds Han’s medal…

(NOTE - I MIGHT END UP DOING A SHORT RE-EDIT OF KYLO SEEING HAN AT THIS POINT - NOT SURE YET, AND ALSO NOT SURE WHAT TO HAVE EITHER ONE OF THEM SAY YET)

…and then we see Kylo drop his lightsaber in slow motion, as Rey grabs it and stabs him with it…

…and then we continue as Leia passes away and her arm drops…

…and then we continue as Rey senses her death, saying LEIA!..

…and then we continue as Rey pulls the lightsaber out of Kylo…

…and then we continue as Rey cries in shock…

…and then we continue as R2D2 sounds mournful beside Leia…

…and then we continue as Rey kneels down beside Kylo, and we end on the shot of his wound…

…then we CUT to Rey saying I DID WANT TO TAKE YOUR HAND…BEN’S HAND…as she then gets up, and Kylo watches her leave…

…so we see Kylo for the LAST time at this point…and then Rey runs towards Kylo’s ship, gets in, and flies away…as Finn and Jenna watch, and the Falcon then arrives…

NOTE - I DON’T WANT TO INCLUDE ANY SHOTS OF ‘SHROUDED’ LEIA…SO I’D GET RID OF THE ONE THAT CONTINUES AT THIS POINT, WHERE SHE IS SURROUNDED BY REBELS AS MAZ SAYS “GOODBYE DEAR PRINCESS…” (as she should have ‘disappeared’ at the point where she died)

…then we CUT to Poe, Finn, and Chewie arrive back at the rebel base, and are told by a female rebel that Leia has gone…as Chewie ends up roaring in distress… (FINISH OFF WORDING HERE)

…then we CUT to a close-up of the Emperor’s hologram, as he says THE PRINCESS OF ALDERAAN HAS DISRUPTED MY PLANS…BUT HER FOOLISH ACT WILL BE IN VAIN…

(NOTE - DUE TO THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE STARTING JUST SLIGHTLY BEFORE THE ‘WIPE’ EFFECT FROM A CLOSE-UP OF KYLO ENDS…IS IT POSSIBLE TO START HEARING THE EMPEROR SAY “THE…” OVER THE PRECEDING SHOT OF CHEWIE ROARING BESIDE AN ORANGE X-WING I’M CUTTING DIRECTLY FROM??)

…and then we continue as the Emperor then says COME TO ME ON EXEGOL GENERAL PRYDE…

…and then we continue as we end on General Pryde saying AS I SERVED YOU IN THE OLD WARS, I SERVE YOU NOW…

…then we CUT to the Emperor saying THE FINAL ORDER BEGINS…SHE WILL COME…HER FRIENDS WILL FOLLOW…as General Pryde then says YES MY LORD…and bows his head… (NOTE - I’M GOING TO INCLUDE THE REST OF THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE ABOUT SENDING A SHIP TO SORT OUT A PLANET THE REBELS CARE ABOUT, AFTER ALL!)

…and then we continue as a Sith Stardestroyer appears, and it fires down at the planet Kojima…

…then we CUT to a rebel female telling Poe (FINISH WORDING HERE)

…and then we CUT to a side view of Poe (JUST AFTER HE HAS SAID “THIS IS HOW IT FINISHES…”), just as he shuts his mouth and then turns when Rose says LISTEN…IT’S ON EVERY FREQUENCY…

THE CLOSE UP OF ROSE CONTINUES HERE, BUT I DONT KNOW IF I’LL INCLUDE IT OR NOT YET!

…then we CUT to a close-up of Rose saying LEIA MADE YOU ACTING GENERAL…WHAT NOW?..

…and then we CUT to Leia’s body, as Poe says (FINISH OFF WORDING HERE) …as we eventually hear Lando say …WE HAD EACH OTHER…and we end on a close-up of Poe…

(NOTE - I MIGHT END UP MISSING OUT THIS WHOLE SCENE ALTOGETHER - BUT I’M NOT SURE YET, AS LANDO IS REALLY GOOD IN IT, AND I WOULDN’T LIKE TO LOSE IT UNLESS IT LOOKS LIKE IT WOULD BE BETTER WITHOUT IT)

…then we CUT to Kylo’s ship burning on Luke’s island sanctuary…

…and then we continue as a distressed Rey throws wood on the fire…

…and then we continue as she then throws Luke’s lightsaber towards the fire…and Luke’s Forceghost suddenly catches it and walks towards her saying (FINISH WORDING HERE)…and we end on the close-up of Rey…

…then we CUT to Rey sitting as she says (FINISH WORDING HERE)…

…and then we continue as they have a conversation (FINISH WORDING HERE)… (I MIGHT BE CUTTING SOME DIALOGUE OUT - NOT SURE YET)…and we end on this shot of Luke standing up again…

…and then we continue as Rey then proceeds to be given Leia’s lightsaber, and see a flashback of young Luke and Leia training with each other…

…and then we continue as Luke eventually tells Rey that she has everything she needs…as she runs to get the other wayfinder out of Kylo’s smouldering ship… (FINISH WORDING HERE)

…and then we continue as the sea starts bubbling…and Rey runs to see Luke’s X-wing rising up…

…and then we continue as Rey turns around to see Luke’s smiling Forceghost is lifting the X-wing up for her…

(NOTE - THIS WILL BE THE LAST TIME WE SEE LUKE’S FORCEGHOST, APART FROM WHEN WE SEE HIM BESIDE LEIA AT THE VERY END)

…then we CUT to a close-up of R2 beeping…

…then we CUT to C3PO saying PICKING UP A SIGNAL?..FROM WHOM?..

…and then we continue as the conehead droid gets plugged in…

…and then we continue as

…and then we continue as Rey flies Luke’s X-wing towards Exagol…

…and then we continue as Finn says SHE’S SHOWING US…SHE’S SHOWING US HOW TO GET THERE…as Poe then says THEN WE GO TOGETHER…

…then we continue as the bearded rebel says to sad Chewie COME ON BUDDY, WE NEED YOU…as he then gets up to follow the others and we hear Finn’s voice say SO LONG AS THOSE STARDESTROYERS ARE ON EXEGOL…

…and then we continue as Finn then says to the gathering…WE CAN HIT 'EM…and a rebel voice then says HIT 'EM, HOW?..and another rebel voice then says (FINISH WORDING HERE)

…and then we continue as Poe then says…LIKE THIS ONE…as he presses a remote…

…and then we continue as Finn says EXCEPT THEY WON’T…AIR TEAM’S GONNA FIND THE TOWER, GROUND TEAM’S GONNA BLAST IT…as a rebel then says GROUND TEAM?..

…and then we continue as Finn looks over and says I HAVE AN IDEA FOR THAT…

…and then we continue as Poe says ONCE THE TOWER’S DOWN, THE FLEET WILL BE STUCK IN THE ATMOS CHECK THIS WORD FOR JUST MINUTES…WITH NO SHIELDS, AND NO WAY OUT…

…then we CUT to Lando saying THAT’S OUR CHANCE… (NOTE - NOT SURE YET IF I SHOULD MISS OUT THE PREVIOUS SHOT OF ROSE SAYING “WE THINK THE CHECK THIS WORDING CANNONS MIGHT CONNECT TO THE MAIN REACTORS”, OR NOT)

…and then we continue as the bearded rebel says WE NEED TO DO SOME HOLDO MANOEUVRES…DO SOME REAL DAMAGE…as C3PO and an alien turn to look at him…and we hear Finn’s voice says C’MON, THAT MOVE IS ONE IN A MILLION…

…and then we continue as Finn says FIGHTERS AND FREIGHTERS CAN TAKE OUT THEIR CANNONS IF THERE ARE ENOUGH OF US…

(NOTE - NOT SURE YET IF I WANT TO INCLUDE BOTH OF THESE ABOVE SCENES AFTER LANDO SPEAKS, OR NOT)

…and then we continue as NIET NUB GUY says some alien gibberish…and then a female rebel says HE’S RIGHT, WE’D BE NO MORE THAN BUGS TO THEM…

…and then we continue as Finn says THAT’S WHERE LANDO AND CHEWIE COME IN…THEY’LL TAKE THE FALCON TO THE CORE SYSTEMS…SEND OUT A CALL FOR HELP FROM ANYBODY LISTENING…as Poe then says WE’VE GOT FRIENDS OUT THERE, THEY’LL COME IF THEY KNOW THERE’S HOPE… * NOTE * - NOBODY CAME AT THE BATTLE OF CRAIT THOUGH, SO I NEED TO HAVE A THINK ABOUT THE WORDING USED HERE OR IN ‘THE LAST JEDI’ PORTION OF MY ‘MEGACUT’!

…and then we continue as there’s concerned muttering in the gathering, as Poe says THEY WILL…FIRST ORDER WINS BY MAKING US THINK WE’RE ALONE…WE’RE NOT ALONE…GOOD PEOPLE WILL FIGHT IF WE NEED THEM…

(NOTE - I’M NOT KEEN ON THE BEGINNING OF THE ‘REBELS GETTING READY TO LEAVE’ SCENE THAT CONTINUES AT THIS POINT, SO I THINK THE BEST WAY TO START IT WOULD BE JUST AFTER THE BLACK FEMALE REBEL HAS RUN TOWARDS THE GREEN SHIP - THE MUSIC STARTS NICELY HERE, AND BUILDS UP ALONG WITH POE’S DIALOGUE FROM THIS POINT)

…then we CUT to a pilot starting up his green ship’s engine, as we see all the rebels preparing to leave, and we hear Poe’s voice say WHAT OUR MOTHERS AND FATHERS FOUGHT FOR, WE WILL NOT LET DIE…NOT TODAY…TODAY WE MAKE OUR LAST STAND…FOR THE GALAXY…FOR LEIA…

…and then we continue as Poe says…FOR EVERYONE WE’VE LOST…and Finn then says THEY[VE TAKEN ENOUGH OF US…NOW WE TAKE THE WAR TO THEM…

…and then we continue as the rebel fleet leaves the jungle planet…

…and then we continue as Rey’s X-wing arrives at the Stardestroyer fleet above Exagol…

…and then we continue as a female captain’s voice says SHE’S ON APPROACH…and then General Pryde’s voice says ALL SHIPS RISE TO DEPLOYMENT ALTITUDE…as Rey’s X-wing dives down…

(NOTE - THIS WILL BE THE LAST WE SEE OF HER UNTIL AFTER THE BATTLE IS WON, AND SHE TRIUMPHANTLY FLIES BACK INTO VIEW AGAIN TO JOIN THE OTHER SHIPS LEAVING) - CHANGE OF PLAN! I THINK I HAVE TO SHOW REY ENTERING THE STRUCTURE TO CONFRONT THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, AS IT JUST SEEMS UNSATISFYING TO LEAVE THAT OUT AFTER ALL - BUT I INTEND TO MAKE IT SEEM AS IF HE WANTS HER TO TAKE THE THRONE AS HIS HEIR…UNTIL SHE TRIES TO ATTACK HIM THAT IS!

…then we CUT to seeing the Stardestroyers slowly rise up… (NOTE - I THINK I’D RATHER MISS OUT THE ‘TINY SHIP DIVING DOWN’ SHOT)

ADD MORE PICS OF REY HERE, AS SHE WALKS INTO THE LARGE STRUCTURE - AND THE SCENE ENDS ON THIS SHOT BELOW -

…then we CUT to the Tantive IV and the rest of the rebel fleet heading to Exogal, following the course set by Rey… (FINISH WORDING HERE) - NOTE: we actually CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL HERE, SEEING AS I’M NOW SHOWING REY ENTER THE STRUCTURE.

…and then we continue as a Stardestroyer crewman says CAPTAIN…WE HAVE RESISTANCE CRAFT INCOMING…as a female commander walks towards General Pryde’s hologram saying ALLEGIANT GENERAL…and the hologram says (FINISH WORDING HERE)

…and then we continue as the rebel fleet arrives at Exegol…

…and then we continue as Poe says LOOK AT THAT FLEET…

(NOTE - ALTHOUGH I’VE PREVIOUSLY GOT RID OF POE TALKING ABOUT THE STARDESTROYER CANNONS BEING CAPABLE OF DESTROYING ENTIRE WORLDS, I’M NOT SURE YET IF I NEED TO GET RID OF ANY DIALOGUE ABOUT THE CANNONS DURING THE FOLLOW BATTLE SCENES, OR NOT - STILL TO CHECK IT OUT MORE)

…and then we continue as the Stardestroyers begin to fire at the rebel ships…

…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON, AS WE EVENTUALLY END THIS 1ST BATTLE PORTION ON REBEL SHIPS DIVING DOWNWARDS…

…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL, AS WE SEE REY BEING LOWERED BELOW THE STRUCTURE ON A LEVITATING PLATFORM -

FILL IN LOTS MORE PICS OF REY ENTERING THE STRUCTURE HERE, AS THE SEQUENCE ENDS ON THIS SHOT -

…then we CUT to the 2nd part of the space battle continuing… - NOTE: we actually CONTINUE AS NORMAL NOW SINCE I’M INCLUDING REY VS THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, as we resume with the space battle at this point -

FILL IN MORE PICS HERE, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE GENERAL PRYDE TELLING HIS OFFICERS TO JAM THE NAVIGATION SIGNAL AND ROUTE IT THROUGH HIS COMMAND SHIP INSTEAD, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE FINN REALISE THAT THE SIGNAL IS ON THE COMMAND SHIP NOW -

…as Finn says “WAIT…THE NAV SIGNAL’S COMING FROM THAT COMMAND SHIP…THAT’S OUR DROP ZONE” -

…and then we CUT to a female rebel pilot saying “YOU WANNA LAUNCH A GROUND INVASION ON A STARDESTROYER?” -

…as Finn says “I DON’T WANT TO, BUT WE CAN’T TAKE OUT THAT SHIP’S NAV SYSTEM FROM THE AIR…” -

PUT MORE PICS AND DIALOGUE HERE, AS WE END ON THIS SHOT OF FINN SAYING “WE HOPE” -

…AND THEN WE CONTINUE ON, AS WE EVENTUALLY SEE A REBEL ‘GROUND’ TROOPS CARRIER LAND ON A STARDESTROYER HULL, AS GENERAL PRYDE IS NOTIFIED, AND WE END THIS 2ND BATTLE PORTION ON A CLOSE-UP OF THIS OFFICER TALKING TO HIM… (FINISH WORDING HERE) - CHANGE OF PLAN! - I’D PREFER TO CUT DIRECTLY FROM THE TROOPS CARRIER LANDING STRAIGHT TO THE CLOSE-UP OF IT’S DOOR OPENING AND THE HORSES COMING OUT, AND PLACE THE GENERAL PRYDE SCENE OF HIM BEING TOLD THEY ARE NOT USING SPEEDERS AFTER THAT -

NOTE: SINCE I’M SHOWING REY VS THE EMPEROR NOW AFTER ALL, I WANT TO USE SOME OF HIS DIALOGUE WHICH OVERLAPS SHOTS OF THE HORSES - EXCEPT I’M GOING TO RE-ARRANGE THINGS SO THAT WE NOW CUT DIRECTLY TO THE CLOSE-UP OF THE TROOPS CARRIER DOOR OPENING, AND SEE THE HORSES COME OUT -

I WANT TO MISS OUT THE SHOTS OF FINN AND JANNAH TALKING TO EACH OTHER (AS I THINK IT MIGHT HELP THE SEQUENCE TO SEEM TO NOT COME ACROSS QUITE SO RIDICULOUS TO ME), SO THAT WE JUST HEAR MUSIC ACCOMPANYING THE HORSES SCENE, AS I THINK THIS WILL IMPROVE IT A BIT - NOTE, MIGHT IT BE POSSIBLE TO CUT DIRECTLY FROM THE SHARP SHOT OF THE CARRIER LANDING TO THE CLOSE-UP OF IT AS THE DOOR OPENS AND WE SEE THE HORSES AND FINN AND REST ON HORSEBACK…AND THEN CUT TO CONVERSATION BETWEEN GENERAL PRYDE AND HIS CREW HERE INSTEAD???..BEFORE THEN CUTTING BACK TO OVERHEAD SHOT OF FINN AND THE REBELS ON HORSEBACK??? - (ANYWAY, HOW DID THE CREWMAN KNOW THAT THEY WERE’NT USING SPEEDERS BEFORE THE REBELS HAD EVEN COME OUT OF THE CARRIER??)

…AND I’D END ON THIS SHOT BELOW, IMMEDIATELY BEFORE WE HEAR FINN AND JENNAH TALKING TO EACH OTHER -

…and then we CUT to the scene where a black officer says that a troop carrier has landed, and General Pryde tells another crewmember to jab their speeders, only to be told they aren’t using speeders (NOTE - the way things are ordered in the original version, how does the crewmember know they aren’t using speeders when the troops carrier door hasn’t even opened yet?) -

…and then we CUT to the overhead shot of the rebels on horseback, at the point immediately after where Finn and Jennah were talking to each other - HOPEFULLY THE MUSIC BLENDS IN WELL ENOUGH IN MY NEW RE-ARRANGEMENT OF THIS OVERALL SEQUENCE -

…then we CUT to First Order troops landing on a Stardestroyer hull… NOTE - we actually CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL HERE NOW, seeing as I’m including the horses after all - STILL MORE PICS AROUND HERE TOO

• NOTE - I MIGHT DECIDE TO SCRAP THE ‘HORSES’ SHOTS AFTER ALL, AND JUST CUT DIRECTLY FROM THE REBEL TROOP CARRIER LANDING ON THE STARDESTROYER TO THE FIRST ORDER TROOP CARRIERS LANDING TOO! *

…then we continue as the rebel ‘ground’ troops engage in battle with the First Order troops… (NOTE - I’M GETTING RID OF ALL THE REBEL TROOPS RIDING ON ALIEN HORSEBACK!) - NOTE, I’M KEEPING THEM AFTER ALL NOW!!

STILL TO FILL IN LOTS OF PICS HERE TOO

(NOTE - AS MUCH AS I DISLIKE THE WAY HE’S BEEN BROUGHT BACK, I’M GOING TO HAVE TO INCLUDE SCENES OF REY OVERCOMING THE EMPEROR AFTER ALL, DUE TO ALL THE BLOOD ON REY AT THE END…BUT WILL RE-EDIT THINGS MUCH MORE TIGHTLY THROUGHOUT IN THE SCENES INVOLVING THEM BOTH - LESS IS MORE!) - NOTE, THE BLOOD ISN’T AN ISSUE ANYMORE, AS I’M NOT INCLUDING THE WORSE BLOODIED SCENES OF HER AT THE END ANYWAY. THIS ISN’T AN ISSUE ANYMORE ANYWAY, AS I’M GOING TO INCLUDE REY VS THE EMPEROR NOW AFTER ALL.

…SO EVENTUALLY, WE SEE REY HEAD TOWARDS THE EMPTY THRONE -

STILL TO ADD MORE PICS HERE

STILL MORE PICS TO ADD HERE OF THE LIKES OF REY LOOKING AROUND AT ALL THE SITH FOLLOWERS CHANTING , BEFORE SHE EVENTUALLY HEARS THE EMPEROR SAY “LONG HAVE I WAITED…” AT THIS POINT, AND WE SEE HIM -

…AND WE END THE SHOT JUST IMMEDIATELY BEFORE THE EMPORER THEN SAYS “FOR MY GRANDCHILD TO COME HOME”, AS I DON’T THINK I WANT TO USE THAT LINE -

WHAT I’M HOPING TO DO WITH THE OVERALL SEQUENCE THAT COMES NEXT - ADD LOTS OF PICS HERE TO SHOW HOW REY GOES TO ATTACK THE EMPEROR AFTER HE TRIES TO GET HER TO TAKE THE THRONE, AND DEALS WITH HIS RED GUARDS, AND HE THEN BLASTS HER, WE SEE THE LIGHTSABERS FALL, HE SEES HIS FINGERS GROW AND TALKS, THEN WE SEE REY BEING HELD IN THE GRIP OF THE FORCE AS THE EMPEROR SAYS “AND NOW…”, AND HE TALKS ABOUT THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR AS HE BLASTS HER, MAYBE MAYBE MISS OUT THE MAD EMPEROR SHOT HERE AS WELL AS REY FALLING, AND CUT DIRECTLY TO THE X-WING SPACE BATTLE AGAIN AT THIS POINT???

NOTE, I’M GOING TO SHOW ALL THE DIALOGUE BETWEEN THE EMPEROR AND REY BELOW, TO MAKE IT EASIER TO SEE AT A GLANCE WHICH LINES OF DIALOGUE I WANT TO USE WHEN I ADD FURTHER PICS HERE -

So after the Emperor says “LONG HAVE I WAITED…”

Emperor’s face then says “…FOR MY GRANDCHILD TO COME HOME” -

Then we briefly see Rey’s face (as next dialogue begins over the end of it) -

Emperor’s face slowly zooms closer as he then says “I NEVER WANTED YOU DEAD…I WANTED YOU HERE…EMPRESS” -

Then dialogue continues as he gestures towards the throne saying …“PALPATINE” -

Emperor then says “YOU WILL TAKE THE THRONE…” -

Then Rey backs away -

Emperor then says “IT IS YOUR BIRTHRIGHT TO RULE HERE…IT IS IN YOUR BLOOD…” -

Then dialogue continues as the Emperor says “…OUR BLOOD” -

Rey continues to back away saying “I HAVEN’T COME TO LEAD THE SITH…I’VE COME TO END THEM” -

Emperor then says “AS A JEDI?” -

Rey says “YES”, As Emperor then says “NOOOO…” (NOTE - WOULD THEN CUTTING TO EMPEROR SHOUTING “THE JEDI ARE DEAD!” WORK? - IS REY TOO CLOSE TO HIM IN THAT SHOT?? - FOLLOWED BY THEN CUTTING TO REY’S FACE AS EMPEROR THEN SAYS “AS ALL THE SITH LIVE IN ME…YOU WILL BE EMPRESS, WE WILL BE ONE!” - NOT SURE, CHECK)

Emperor then says “…YOUR HATRED, YOUR ANGER…YOU WANT TO KILL ME…THAT IS WHAT I WANT…”

KILL ME, AND MY SPIRIT WILL PASS INTO YOU…AS ALL THE SITH LIVE IN ME…" -

Then dialogue continues as Emperor says “YOU WILL BE EMPRESS, WE WILL BE ONE!” -

Then we see Rey’s face -

Then after the close-up on Rey’s face, THE SPACE BATTLE RESUMES AT THIS POINT, as the stardestroyer fleet’s engines ignite -

…AND SPACE BATTLE ENDS ON POE’S VOICE SAYING “JUST STAY ALIVE!” -

We then see Rey’s face, as Emperor then says “THE TIME HAS COME!”, as Rey turns around and we see the hooded Sith followers moving around and kneeling, as lightning crackles behind the throne -

(NOTE - I MIGHT BE CUTTING at the end of the shot where we see the lightning crackling up behind the throne, with the hooded followers in the foreground - not 100% sure yet)

crowd

hoods

crackle behind throne

…and then the Emperor says “WITH YOUR HATRED YOU WILL TAKE MY LIFE…AND YOU WILL ASCEND!” -

Rey says “ALL YOU WANT IS FOR ME TO HATE, BUT I WON’T…NOT EVEN YOU” -

Emperor then says “WEAK…LIKE YOUR PARENTS” -

Rey says “MY PARENTS WERE STRONG…THEY SAVED ME FROM YOU” -

Emperor then says “YOUR MASTER LUKE SKYWALKER WAS SAVED BY HIS FATHER…THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE…IS ME!” -

and then we see Rey watch the Emperor look upwards, as she turns to look up also -

as Rey looks on in horror…Emperor’s voice-over says “THEY DON’T HAVE LONG…” -

then Emperor’s voice-over continues to say “…NO-ONE IS COMING TO HELP THEM…AND YOU ARE THE ONE WHO LED THEM HERE…” -

then Emperor’s voice-over continues to say “…STRIKE ME DOWN (I MIGHT REMOVE these 3 words - not 100% sure yet)…TAKE THE THRONE, REIGN OVER THE NEW EMPIRE, AND THE FLEET WILL BE YOURS…ONLY YOU HAVE THE POWER TO SAVE THEM…REFUSE…AND YOUR NEW FAMILY DIES!”, as we end on Rey’s face -

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At this point, we see Rey’s X-wing as Kylo appears and rushes towards the Sith building -

as we see Rey look down then turn around to the Emperor -

as we see a brief shot of the Emperor -

as Rey nods in despair -

as the Emperor says “GOOOOD!” -

as Kylo rushes into the Sith building and leaps onto a huge chain -

as we resume the space battle as the rebels run back to their carrier on the stardestroyer hull, and Finn ends up aiming a big gun around to fire at the command deck -

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as we hear the Emperor’s voice say “THE RITUAL BEGINS…” -

as the Emperor moves towards Rey saying “…SHE WILL STRIKE ME DOWN…AND PLEDGE HERSELF AS A SITH!”, as we end on Rey’s face as the Sith followers chant -

at this point we see Kylo shooting at the red guards then being surrounded by the KLnights of Ren, as the Emperor’s voice says “SHE WILL DRAW HER WEAPON…” -

and then we see a brief close-up of Rey reaching for Luke’s lightsaber as we hear the Sith followers chanting -

and then Rey ignites her lightsaber as the Emperor then says “SHE WILL COME TO ME”, and Rey then slowly walks forwards as she turns to the side to look at the Sith followers who chant -

(NOTE- I MIGHT CUT JUST WHEN THE SABER IGNITES ABOVE JUST BEFORE WE HEAR THE EMPEROR’S VOICE - NOT SURE YET)

at this point we see Kylo is still fighting with the Knights -

as Rey continues to walk slowly towards the Emperor as he says “SHE WILL TAKE HER REVENGE…”, and the Sith crowd chant -

at this point we see Kylo still fighting with the Knights -

as Rey then walks closer to the Emperor as he says “…AND WITH A STROKE OF HER SABER, THE SITH ARE REBORN…”, and Rey lifts her saber upwards -

the Emperor then shouts “THE JEDI ARE DEAD!” -

as Rey holds her saber up as the Sith crowd chants -

and we then cut between close-ups of Rey and Kylo in ‘Force communication’ -

as we hear the Emperor’s voice say “DO IT…” -

as the Emperor then says “…MAKE THE SACRIFICE!” -

and Rey slowly raises her lightsaber behind her back as if to strike, as the Emperor closes his eyes, but instead the lightsaber disappears, as we close-in on the Emperor -

and Kylo now has Luke’s lightsaber behind his back, and begins to fight the Knights with it -

as Rey grabs Leia’s lightsaber from behind her back, and ignites it -

as the Emperor pulls away from Rey as she starts to fight his red guards -

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as Kylo continues to fight the Knights -

as Rey continues to fight the red guards up until when she stands up suddenly -

as Kylo finishes off the final red guard, and joins Rey as they both hold up their lightsabers together -

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as the Emperor’s voice says “STAND TOGETHER…” -

and the Emperor then says “…DIE TOGETHER!”, as he raises his wizened hands -

as Rey and Kylo are knocked backwards off their feet -

as Luke and Leia’s lightsabers tumble along the ground -

as Rey and Kylo are pulled forward by the Emperor -

as the Emperor suddenly recoils and gasps (NOTE - I MIGHT THEN CUT TO REY GRABBING LEIA’S SABER FROM BEHIND HER BACK AND FIGHTING THE RED GUARDS AS THE EMPEROR BACKS AWAY) -

as the Emperor watches his hands regenerating, and he says “THE LIFEFORCE OF YOUR BOND…A DYED IN THE FORCE…A POWER LIKE LIFE ITSELF…” -

as the Emperor’s voice says “…UNSEEN FOR GENERATIONS…” as we see Kylo and Rey powerless in front of him -

as the Emperor’s voice says “…AND NOW…”, as we see Rey powerless in front of him -

as the Emperor says “…THE POWER OF TWO…RESTORES THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR!”, as he raises his now regenerated hands towards them, and we hear Rey scream -

as the Emperor starts to suck the lifeforce out of Rey and Kylo -

as the Emperor manically laughs and his eyes turn yellow -

as the Emperor continues to suck the lifeforce out of Rey and Kylo, and they eventually fall to the ground -

as Rey falls in close-up as we hear the sound of an X-wing -

and the space battle continues again at this point -

NOTE - I’VE JUST SHOW THE EXACT WAY THE SCENES ABOVE PLAY OUT IN THE MOVIE JUST THE WAY THEY ARE, UNTIL I CAN SORT OUT THE WAY I WANT TO REARRANGE THEM…BUT FROM THIS POINT BELOW, I’M NOW RESUMING TO JUST SHOW THE WAY I WANT TO CUT THINGS FOR THE REST OF THE MOVIE -

NOTE - I MIGHT just CUT from ‘Steps’ saying “I KNOW, I SEE THEM” above, and miss out the shot below of Poe saying “NO, NO, STEPS, STEPS!”…

…and instead CUT directly to the shot below of ‘Steps’ X-wing being hit, as I think it sounds more effective if we just hear ‘Steps’ screaming, and Poe yelling “NOOOOO!” before he crashes -

as we hear frantic radio chatter, and CUT at the point when an exploding X-wing passes the bottom-RIGHT of the screen -

…and then we CUT back MUCH SOONER to the Emperor now (INSTEAD OF WAITING FOR THIS WHOLE SECTION OF THE SPACE BATTLE TO CONCLUDE AS NORMAL), as I think it’s better if we get to see him fully restored at this point, so that we keep the momentum up of his transformation, rather than have to wait so long to see what happened with him after Rey and Kylo fell to the ground earlier! (NOTE - IN THE MOVIE, POE WOULD NORMALLY APOLOGISE TO EVERYONE IN DISPAIR AT THIS POINT, AND WE WOULD THEN GO ON TO SEE LANDO APPEAR WITH THE HUGE FLEET - WHICH KINDA MADE US KNOW THAT EVERYTHING WAS GOING TO BE OKAY NOW…BUT BY KEEPING THE ‘CALVALRY’ FROM ARRIVING UNTIL AFTER THE EMPEROR’S FULL TRANSFORMATION, THIS GIVES A LONGER IMPRESSION OF THINGS GOING FROM BAD TO WORSE FOR THE REBELS!) -

…as we CUT to the fully restored Emperor saying “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE…”, and the Sith crowds chant, as the Emperor acknowledges them -

…as we CUT back to the space battle (JUST AFTER ‘STEPS’ HAD CRASHED), and resume at the point JUST AFTER the exploding X-wing passed the bottom-RIGHT of the screen…so that we now see an exploding Y-wing pass the bottom-LEFT of the screen -

…and continue on as normal as Poe apologises to everyone in dispair -

…FINISH PICS AND DIALOGUE OFF HERE, AS LANDO APPEARS WITH A HUGE FLEET (NOTE - I MAY GET RID OF ‘POE SAYING EVERY CANON HIT IS A WORLD SAVED’ SHOTS, AND JUST JOIN THE FALCON SHOTS TOGETHER INSTEAD…AND MAY ALSO SHORTEN STARDESTROYER CREW SCENE A BIT, SO THAT WE DON’T SEE GENERAL PRYDE AND BLACK OFFICER TALKING, AS I DON’T LIKE THAT DIALOGUE! - OR GET RID OF IT ALTOGETHER?? - NOT SURE YET)

…and as Poe excitedly hears from his ‘ex-girlfriend’ and Babu Frik (NOTE - I MIGHT GET RID OF BABU FRIK - NOT SURE YET!), this section of the space battle ends as normal on this shot of exploding stardestroyers -

…as we CUT to the Emperor’s voice shouting “NOTHING WILL STOP THE RETURN OF THE SITH!”, as he then raises his hands and fires lightning bolts upwards (NOTE - HE SEEMED TO BE SUDDENLY POSITIONED ON THE THRONE AFTER HE FLUNG KYLO DOWN THE CHASM IN THE MOVIE, BUT NOW THERE’S BEEN PLENTY OF TIME FOR HIM TO BE SITTING ON IT AT THIS POINT!) - NOTE - ALTERNATIVELY…I MIGHT GET RID OF ALL THE ‘OVER-POWERED’ EMPEROR SHOTS OF HIM FIRING LIGHTNING UP IN THE SKY AT THE SHIPS, AS WELL AS THE SCENE OF POE’S SHIP AND OTHERS POWERERING UP…AND JUST CUT BACK TO REY REVIVING AND HEARING VOICES BEFORE SHE GETS UP AND RETRIEVES LEIA’S LIGHTSABER AT THIS POINT INSTEAD!

…and we continue on as normal, as the Emperor’s laugh fades and Rey turns over to see the lightning hitting the ships -

as Rey ‘Forcegrabs’ Leia’s lightsaber, and stands facing the Emperor who then stops firing his lightning -

…and then we CUT to the ship’s no longer being hit by the Emperor’s lightning, as Poe says “I’M BACK ON…THIS IS OUR LAST CHANCE, WE GOTTA HIT THOSE CANONS NOW!” (NOTE - IT MAKES MORE SENSE TO ME THAT THE ELECTRICAL BOLTS ARE PAUSED AT THIS POINT WHEN THE EMPEROR GETS DISTRACTED BY REY CONFRONTING HIM AGAIN, INSTEAD OF THE POINT THAT THEY ARE PAUSED IN THE MOVIE! - BUT WILL KEEP TO THIS IF JOINING DIRECTLY TO THE WIDE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR VS REY MAKES IT LOOK LIKE HE’S TOO SUDDENLY OFF HIS THRONE!) -

NOTE - THIS NEXT SECTION SHOWS HOW I MIGHT END UP REDOING THE EMPEROR VS REY DUEL - NOT SURE YET - AND HOPEFULLY ALL THE MUSIC MELDS TOGETHER WELL ENOUGHH!

…as we then CUT to the Emperor getting up slowly and saying “LET YOUR DEATH BE THE FINAL WORD IN THE STORY OF REBELLION!”, as he fires lightning bolts at Rey, who blocks them with Leia’s lightsaber -

…and then we MAYBE CUT to the wide shot of the Emperor vs Rey (NOTE - HE’S NOW SUDDENLY MOVED FORWARD OFF HIS THRONE - WILL THIS STILL WORK OKAY?? - NOT SURE) - NOTE - CHANGE OF PLAN! - I MAY END UP CONTINUING THIS WHOLE SCENE USING ALL OF THE EMPEROR’S DIALOGUE FOR DRAMATIC EFFECT, SEEING AS I’M SHORTENING THE OVERALL SCENE SO MUCH NOW, AND GETTING RID OF ALL THE SILLY-LOOKING SHOTS OF HIM ANYWAY!!

…and then we CUT to Rey standing her ground, as the Emperor says “I AM ALL THE SITH!” -

…and we continue as normal as Rey says “AND I…”, as she ‘Forcegrabs’ Luke’s lightsaber behind her back -

…and we continue as normal as Rey says “…I’M ALL THE JEDI!”, as she clashes both her lightsabers together -

…and then we CUT to the ‘electrical bang’ as the Emperor disappears and the Sith throne disintergrates (NOTE - DOING IT THIS WAY MEANS I CAN’T USE A COUPLE OF SHOTS I LIKED, BUT I REALLY PREFER THE WAY THIS THEN LEADS BACK INTO THE SCORE AFTER REY CLASHES HER LIGHTSABERS TOGETHER!) -

and we then continue on as normal, as the entire building disintergrates on top of the Sith crowds -

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…and then we continue as Rey Force-pulls Luke’s lightsaber to her…

(NOTE - I’M GOING TO TRY TO SHOW THAT REY EARLIER DROPPED LUKE’S LIGHTSABER BEHIND HER BACK - INBETWEEN THE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR’S FACE WITH HIS EYES CLOSED WAITING FOR THE BLOW…AND THE SHOT OF REY THEN PULLING HER EMPTY HAND BACK FROM BEHIND HER BACK - ALSO, THE VERSION I’M DOING WILL SEE THE EMPEROR SEEMING TO WANT TO BE KILLED, BUT HIS BODY IS SOMEHOW BROUGHT BACK TO NORMAL BY BEING AFFECTED POSITIVELY BY THE FORCE OF BEING AROUND HIS GRANDDAUGHTER??? - WILL IT MAKE SENSE AT ALL???

ALTERNATIVELY - I COULD IGNORE EVERYTHING I WROTE DIRECTLY ABOVE, AND INSTEAD HAVE THE EMPEROR WANT HIS GRANDDAUGHTER TO TAKE THE SITH THRONE, BUT SHE ENDS UP MAKING AN ATTACKING MOVE AND KILLS HIS RED GUARDS…AND THEN CUT TO HIM RAISING HIS HAND TO ZAP HER…AND THEN CUT TO THE LIGHTSABERS TUMBLING ALONG THE GROUND…AND THEN CUT TO HIM RECOILING BACK AS HE TALKS ABOUT THE DYAD/BOND (BETWEEN THEM - DOES IT COME ACROSS THAT WAY??) BEING ABLE TO GIVE HIM LIFE…AND THEN CUT TO REY BEING HELD BY THE FORCE IN FRONT OF HIM AS HE SAYS "AND NOW…(THEN CONTINUES TO TALK ABOUT THE ONE TRUE EMPIRE) AS HE RAISES HIS HAND TO ZAP HER AGAIN…(I MIGHT THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR CACKLING AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW AT THIS POINT, IF IT WORKS) THEN CUT TO REY FALLING ON THE GROUND AS WE CONTINUE ON AS NORMAL AS WE SEE THE SPACE FIGHT CONTINUE FOR A BIT…AND THEN CUT TO THE FULLY FORMED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE” AS WE SEE THE SITH CROWD AS THE EMPEROR LOOKS AROUND TO THEM…THEN CUT BACK TO THESPACE FIGHT FOR A BIT…THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR’S VOICE SAY SOMETHING LIKE “THE SITH HAVE RETURNED” ?? AS WE SEE STARDESTROYERS BEGINNING TO FALL, AS WE SEE HE IS ON THE THRONE NOW AS HE FIRES LIGHTNING BOLTS UPWARDS…

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…and then we continue as Rey emerges out of the smoke, and drops both her lightsabers…

…then we CUT to the smoking debris of Stardestroyers raining down…

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(NOTE - AFTER THE FLEET LEAVES EXAGOL, I’D INCLUDE THE BESPIN CITY/EWOKS/STARDESTROYER ON JAKKU MONTAGE SCENES TO KEEP THE SCORE INTACT…AND THEN CONTINUE AS WE WIPE TO THE REBEL SHIPS ARRIVING BACK IN THE JUNGLE, AND CARRY ON UNTIL BB-8 AND THE CONEFACE DROID ARE HAPPY TO SEE EACH OTHER - HOWEVER, I’D THEN GET RID OF ALL THE OTHER SCENES, AND JUST CUT TO THE BB-8 GREETING REY SCENE SO THAT IT ALL DOESN’T DRAG ON WITH THE LIKES OF OVERLY FAMILIAR MUSIC AND HUGGING, KISSES, AND CRYING ETC. - IT ALSO MAKES FOR A NICE CONTRAST WHEN WE GO FROM DIRTY, BLOODIED REY TO CLEANED UP REY IN THE FINAL SCENE IMMEDIATLEY AFTERWARDS, AND JUST FEELS MORE OF AN INTIMATE ENDING OVERALL)

…and then we CUT to R2D2 whistling, as C3PO says DID YOU HEAR THAT?..

…and then we contiue as Rey lands in Luke’s X-wing and BB-8 rushes to greet her…

…and then we quickly FADE to blackness as we CUT to the Falcon arriving at Tattooine…

(NOTE - THE MUSIC FADING DURING THE BRIEF BIT OF BLACKNESS WILL TIE IN WELL WITH THE PREVIOUS SHOT OF REY LOOKING ROUND, AND GIVES THE IMPRESSION THAT A BIT OF TIME HAS PASSED BEFORE WE SEE THE FALCON IN THIS SHOT)

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…and then we continue as an old woman passes by saying THERE’S BEEN NO-ONE FOR SO LONG…

…and then we continue as the old woman says WHO ARE YOU?..

…then we CUT to Rey as she senses something and looks around…and then sees the Forceghosts of Leia and Luke…

…and then we continue as Rey turns round again and says REY SKYWALKER…

…and then we continue as Rey and BB-8 look out at Tattooine’s twin suns setting…

(NOTE - JUST PUT DIRECTED BY J.J. ABRAMS END TITLE HERE INSTEAD, AS NORMAL)

JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??

ALSO - INSTEAD OF WHAT I’VE SHOWN ABOVE, I THINK I MIGHT PREFER TO ALTER THE ENDING EVEN MORE LIKE THIS BELOW! - by fading out the ‘Stardestroyer crashing on Jakku’ shot directly to the ‘blackness of time having passed’ shot as it fades back to the Falcon flying over Tattooine with Rey burying the lightsabres (NOTE - Using my ‘rule’ of whether I would discard a sequence if I’d imagined it was a ‘deleted scene’ which I’d discovered I could incorporate or not…I think I could do without seeing the fleet landing back on the jungle planet, and everyone meeting up - It’s a pity to lose R2D2 and C3PO, but they weren’t given a good ‘send-off moment’ anyway. And I don’t really need to see Rey land the X-wing as she’s greeted by BB8, as they’re seen in the final sequence anyway. Still not sure whether I’d include either a ‘falcon in lightspeed shot’ (there’s quite a good brief one of it coming towards us during the lightskipping scene) or the Chewie/Poe/Finn holochess scene or not…but IF I don’t include Chewie, Finn, and Poe along for the trip on the Falcon with Rey at the end, then this way allows me to imagine that Poe MAY have ended up with his space girl ex., while Finn MAY have ended up with Jennah…rather than seeing Old Lando hitting on her!

(NOTE - I COULD EVEN CUT FROM THE STARDESTROYER FALLING TO JAKKU, DIRECTLY TO THE CLOSE-UP OF ARTOO BEEPING AS C3PO LOOKS UP TO SEE REY LAND AND GREET BB-8, THEN FADE TO FALCON FLYING OVER TATTOOINE)

…and then we quickly FADE out from the shot above, and CUT to the brief ‘blackness of time passing’ as we fade back to Falcon arriving at Tattooine…

…and we continue on as normal, as Rey emerges from the Falcon -

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…and then we continue on as normal, as Rey looks over the edge -

…and then we continue as an old woman passes by saying THERE’S BEEN NO-ONE FOR SO LONG…

…and then we continue as the old woman says WHO ARE YOU?..

…then we CUT to Rey as she senses something and looks around…and then sees the Forceghosts of Leia and Luke…

…and then we continue as Rey turns round again and says REY SKYWALKER…

…and then we continue as Rey and BB-8 look out at Tattooine’s twin suns setting…

(NOTE - JUST PUT DIRECTED BY J.J. ABRAMS END TITLE HERE INSTEAD, AS NORMAL)

*** Just a thought - would adding in an edited version of the broom boy ending work?? - perhaps in-between where stardestroyer is crashing towards Jakku sands…and the usual end scene where Falcon flies past a sandcrawler on Tattooine. ***

JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??

ANOTHER ALTERNATIVE IDEA = AFTER WE SEE THE MONTAGE WHICH ENDS IN THE STARDESTROYER CRASHING DOWN TO TATTOOINE, MAYBE CUT TO ‘LIGHTSKIPPING’ SHOT OF FALCON IN HYPERSPACE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING CHESS SCENE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO RAY EXITING THE FALCON IN CLOSE-UP, THEN MAYBE CONTINUE AS NORMAL FROM THERE RIGHT UP UNTIL OLD WOMAN ASKS ‘WHO ARE YOU’, AND WE SEE RAY REPLYING “REY”, THEN MAYBE CUT TO FALCON FLYING OVER SANDCRAWLER AS JAWAS SAY “OOH TEENIE!”, THEN FADE TO CIRCULAR IRIS.

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HOW I MIGHT GET RID OF KYLO IN EMPEROR VS REY SCENE -

…after roof has opened, and we have battle montage as Emperor’s voice tells Rey that only she can save them if she takes the throne, we eventually end on this close-up of Rey looking upwards -

(Kylo normally appears at this point, as he looks at Rey’s X-wing)

…and then we CUT to Rey looking downwards and slowly turning -

…and continue as we see a brief shot of the Emperor -

…and then we CUT to close-up of Rey reaching for Luke’s saber -

FINISH THIS OFF - NOT SURE YET, BUT WOULD I CUT TO EMPEROR CLOSE-UP?? (WHICH IS SEEN INBETWEEN REY ‘HANDING’ LUKE’S SABER OFF TO KYLO), AND THEN CUT TO REY IGNITING THE SABER (WE WON’T NOTICE IT’S LEIA’S ONE I RECKON), AS EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE FIGHTS HIS RED GUARDS??..

OR…COULD I INSTEAD CUT TO EMPEROR ANGRILY RAISING HAND AT THIS POINT (IMMEDIATELY AFTER REY HAS REACHED FOR LUKE’S SABER)…AND THEN CUT TO LUKE’S IGNITED SABER TUMBLING AWAY…THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LEIA’S SABER BEHIND HER BACK INSTEAD, AND IGNITING IT, AS EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE FIGHTS HIS RED GUARDS…THEN CUT TO REY FINISHING OFF THE RED GUARDS AND STANDING UP SUDDENLY…

OR SOMETHING LIKE THIS, AS THE DYED OF THEIR FORCE BOND ENDS UP MAKING THE EMPEROR REGENERATE AND NOT REQUIRE REY ANYMORE?? - EMPEROR’S VOICE-OVER OVER MONTAGE OF BATTLE WHICH ENDS WITH HIM SAYING “…YOUR NEW FAMILY DIES!” / CUT TO EMP SAYING “…THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE IS ME!” / CUT TO REY SAYING MY PARENTS WERE STRONG, THEY SAVED ME FROM YOU / CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LUKE’S SABER?? / (NOT SURE IF I CAN CUT TO REY IGNITING LUKE’S SABER HERE)?? / CUT TO EMPEROR BACKING OFF AS REY FIGHTS RED GUARDS?? / CUT TO REST OF REY FIGHTING RED GUARDS WHICH ENDS WITH HER STANDING UP SUDDENLY?? / CUT TO EMPEROR RAISING HIS HAND ANGRILY?? / CUT TO BOTH LIGHTSABERS TUMBLING ALONG GROUND?? / CUT TO EMPEROR LOOKING AT HIS HANDS REGENERATING ETC. FINISH OFF WHAT HE SAYS ABOUT DYED ETC, AS WE THEN CUT TO REY HELD IN FRONT OF HIM AS HE SAYS “…AND NOW…”, AS WE THEN CUT TO HIM SAYING “…BECOMES THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR!”, AND ANGRILY RAISES HIS HAND AGAINST HER AGAIN / AND WE CUT TO HIM LAUGHING MANICALLY AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW?? / AND WE CUT TO REY FALLING TO THE GROUND…AS THE SPACE BATTLE RESUMES…AND THEN WE CUT TO THE NOW REGENERATED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE!” - NOT SURE ABOUT THIS LAST PART - CHECK

OR SOMETHING LIKE THIS PERHAPS…AFTER THE EMPEROR SAYS “…YOUR NEW FAMILY WILL DIE!” AND WE END ON REYS FACE LOOKING UP IN DESPAIR (NOTE - OR WOULD I CUT TO HER LOOKING DOWN AND AROUND, AND THEN CUT TO EMPEROR SAYING “THE ONLY FAMILY YOU HAVE HERE IS ME!”??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE REBELS GOING BACK TO THE CARRIER ON THE STARDESTROY HULL, AS FINN AND JANNAH SPIN THE GUN TURRET AROUND TO AIM AT THE COMMAND BRIDGE AS WE HEAR THE EMPEROR’S VOICE SAY “THE RITUAL BEGINS…”, AS WE BRIEFLY SEE HIM SUSPENDED A DISTANCE AWAY FROM REY AS THE SITH CROWD CHANTS, THEN CUT (NOTE - WOULD I CUT TO REY SAYING SOMETHING TO HIM OR NOT AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LUKE’S LIGHTSABER AND IGNITING IT, THEN CUT (NOTE - WOULD I CUT TO REY SAYING SOMETHING TO HIM OR NOT AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN SEE THE EMPEROR ‘ZAP’ HER WITH HIS WIZENED HANDS…WE’D THEN SEE LUKE’S IGNITED LIGHTSABER TUMBLE ACROSS THE GROUND BRIEFLY…WE’D THEN SEE THE EMPEROR RECOIL AND SAY (FINISH WORDING HERE) AS HE LOOKS AT HIS REGENERATING FINGERS…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY REACHING FOR LEIA’S LIGHTSABER BEHIND HER BACK, AS THE EMPEROR BACKS AWAY AND SHE STARTS FIGHTING HIS RED GUARDS…WE’D THEN CUT TO HER FINISHING FIGHTING WITH HIS RED GUARDS, AND STANDING UP SUDDENLY…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR ‘ZAPPING’ HER WITH HIS REGENERATED HANDS THIS TIME (NOTE - WOULD I HAVE HIM SAYING HIS WORDS ABOUT ‘THE ONE TRUE EMPEROR’ BEFOREHAND, OR NOT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO LEIA’S LIGHTSABER BRIEFLY TUMBLING ACROSS THE GROUND…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE EMPEROR LAUGHING AS HIS EYES TURN YELLOW…WE’D THEN CUT TO REY FALLING ON THE GROUND, AS WE SEGUE BACK INTO THE SPACE BATTLE (NOTE - OR SHOULD I JUST CUT DIRECTLY TO THE SPACE BATTLE AT THIS POINT??)…WE’D THEN CUT TO THE FULLY FORMED EMPEROR SAYING “LOOK WHAT YOU HAVE MADE…” AS HE TAKES IN THE SITH FOLLOWERS CHANTS

ALTERNATIVE NEW IDEA! - INSTEAD OF HAVING THE EMPEROR ‘OVERLY-SUPERPOWERED’ WITH LIGHTNING ABILITY COMPARED TO RETURN OF THE JEDI, I COULD INSTEAD CUT THINGS IN A WAY SO THAT I GET RID OF THE EMPEROR SAYING “NOTHING WILL STOP THE RETURN OF THE SITH!” AND FIRING LIGHTNING AT ALL THE REBEL SHIPS…AND JUST HAVE HIM GETTING UP AND SAYING “LET YOUR DEATH BE THE FINAL WORD IN THE STORY OF REBELLION!” AND FIRING HIS NORMAL LIGHTNING AT REY AT SOME POINT AFTER AFTER SHE HAS GOTTEN UP AND FORCE-GRABBED LEIA’S LIGHTSABER! - BUT STILL END WITH REY CLASHING HER SABERS TOGETHER, THEN CUT TO THE ELECTRICAL BANGS AND EPIC SCORE.

FINAL DECISION!! - JUST KEEP THE OVERPOWERED EMPEROR, AS REY IS EQUALLY OVERPOWERED WHEN SHE BRINGS THE WHOLE SITH BUILDING DOWN ON THE CROWDS…AND KEEP POE AND THE OTHER SHIPS RECOVERING INBETWEEN REY HOLDING HER LIGHTSABER AND THE WIDE SHOT OF THE EMPEROR HAVING MOVED FORWARDS - I MIGHT GET RID OF HIM SAYING “YOU ARE NOTHING” (AS I DON’T LIKE THOSE SHOTS), OR MIGHT EVEN GET RID OF HIM SAYING “A SCAVENGER GIRL IS NO MATCH FOR THE POWER IN ME” INSTEAD - BUT NOT 100% SURE YET.

LATEST ULTIMATE FINAL DECISION!!! - I RECKON THAT I WILL NEED TO KEEP THE SHOTS OF THE EMPEROR DRAINING THE LIFEFORCE OUT OF BOTH REY AND KYLO AFTER ALL, TO MAKE THINGS LOOK BETTER AND TIE IN TO THE ‘REDEMPTION’ LORE AFTER ALL…BUT I’M STILL DEFINITELY GOING TO KILL KYLO OFF BY THE EMPEROR THROWING HIS ASS DOWN THE PIT! - WHICH MEANS I’LL NEED TO KEEP REY BEING ABLE TO SUPERPOWER FORCEHEAL KYLO AFTER STABBING HIM, UNFORTUNATELY (good grief, does this ‘forceheal’ power mean that Rey is actually ‘The Chosen One’ if she can stop death like that??!)…BUT CAN NOW COBBLE TOGETHER SOME OF THE SHOTS OF KYLO THROWING HIS SABER AWAY (FROM THE HAN DREAM SCENE) TO MAKE IT SEEM THAT HE IS PERHAPS CONTEMPLATING HIS SURVIVING REY’S SABER STAB AND THE DEATH OF HIS MOTHER AND THAT HE’S GOING TO HELP REY, AND PLACE THAT AFTER THE SHOT OF CHEWIE HOWLING BESIDE THE ORANGE X-WING OVER THE DEATH OF LEIA, AND BEFORE THE TRANSITION FADE TO THE EMPEROR’S HOLOGRAM TALKING TO GENERAL PRYDE, THUS KEEPING THE START OF THE EMPEROR’S WORDS NOW.

ALSO DISCARD SILLY-LOOKING FULL FRONTAL SHOT OF REY AND KYLO GETTING THEIR LIFEFORCE DRAINED, AS THE OVERALL SCENE WILL LOOK BETTER WITHOUT IT.

ADDITIONAL NEW THOUGHTS - I RECKON THAT I COULD END ON SHOT OF EMPEROR’S WIZENED HANDS AS HIS VOICE OFFERS HIM A NEW EMPIRE, THEN CUT OUT NEW ORDER FLEET SHOTS AND DIALOGUE ALTOGETHER AS IT’S RIDICULOUS THEY BREAK OUT OF THE GROUND! - THE FLEET IS MENTIONED BY POE IN HIS LATER TALK WITH THE REBELS, SO JUST KEEP THE FLEET SIZE AS A LATER REVEAL IN THE MOVIE WHEN REY FIRST REACHES IT IN LUKE’S X-WING.

ALSO - HAVE ANOTHER LOOK TO SEE IF I CAN WORK OUT A WAY TO JUST KEEP REY CONFRONTING THE EMPEROR ON HER OWN WITH NO ‘REDEEMED’ KYLO INVOLVEMENT ALTOGETHER! - EITHER HAVE REY KILL HIM WITH HIS OWN LIGHTSABER?..OR STILL HAVE HERE ‘FORCE HEAL’ HIM, AS HE THEN THROWS AWAY HIS LIGHTSABER AND HAS NO FURTHER INVOLVEMENT IN THE MOVIE? - SO THAT I CAN STILL HAVE FADE FROM HIM TO HOLOGRAM SHOT OF EMPEROR TALKING TO PRYDE. OR IS THERE A WAY TO STILL HAVE HIM COME TO HELP REY, BUT JUST HAVE THE EMPEROR DISPATCH HIM DOWN THE CHASM WITHOUT HAVING TO USE ANY OF THE ‘FORCE DRAIN’ SHOTS OF HIM AND REY WHATSOEVER?

Monroville said:

Well, I guess no one else can post trailer links here but Imp.  No problemo. All posts deleted.

Thanks Monroville, and I’ve gotten a chance to get around to the ALIEN stuff now…

ALIEN  (released 1979/directed by Ridley Scott)

Teaser Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gxzFQAncfpI

Teaser Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZFxgr8NTD20

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rf99ouvFBJw

ALIEN: DIRECTOR’S CUT  (released 2003/directed by Ridley Scott)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OpNTQUzN-8A

ALIENS  (released 1986/directed by James Cameron)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fheA6Ua_nNc

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LRrcg7mXU5o

ALIENS: SPECIAL EDITION  (released 1992/directed by James Cameron)

DVD Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U7YGl9iouTs

But then things went downhill, unfortunately…

ALIEN 3  (released 1992/directed by David Fincher)

Trailer A - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3lC-VJxB2hc  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Trailer B - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WwaNZaGT0BM  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Trailer C - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ei7IvP8Qzqo

Trailer D - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K4xqxWhCZ6A

Trailer E - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0wJsw6KmRyU

ALIEN RESURRECTION  (released 1997/directed by Jean-Pierre Junet)

Teaser Trailer -  http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=brA2HO8gVWM

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qJKVNwZpKQc  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

**Coming Soon… ** Ridley Scott’s prequel PROMETHEUS is due for release in 2012…

…and continue on as normal as the Falcon blasts through an ice wall…

…and we end on this shot of the Falcon flying away…

NOTE: I MIGHT THEN CUT TO THE EARLIER SHOT OF FALCON FLYING THROUGH HYPERSPACE (SEE ABOVE) AT THIS POINT - NOT SURE YET.

…then we CUT to Rey meditating in a jungle in mid air saying BE WITH ME…BE WITH ME…

…and we end on this close-up of Rey as she says THEY’RE NOT WITH ME…

…then we CUT to Leia saying REY…

…and continue as normal as we hear Leia saying …BE PATIENT, and Rey says I’M STARTING TO THINK IT’S IMPOSSIBLE TO HEAR THE VOICES OF THE JEDI THAT CAME BEFORE…

…and continue as normal as we end on Leia saying NOTHING’S IMPOSSIBLE…

…then we CUT to the close-up of Luke’s mended lightsaber being handed to Rey, and end on Leia looking at her…

(OR…DO I MISS OUT LEIA GIVING LUKE’S LIGHTSABER TO LEIA, AND CUT FROM FLOATING REY DIRECTLY TO SCENE WHERE SHE SAYS “I DIDN’T FINISH THE TRAINING COURSE…” ???)

…then we CUT to Kylo touching Vader’s mask…

…and we end on this shot…

…then we CUT to Vader’s mask as we hear his voice say JOIN ME…

…then we CUT to Kylo opening his eyes as he sees flashbacks of him killing his father Han, then let’s go of the mask…

…then we CUT to Rey saying I DIDN’T FINISH THE TRAINING COURSE…I GOT DISTRACTED… (Note - I’m just laying out the EXACT sequence and dialogue here at the moment, without trying out any kind of re-edit at the moment - although IF I do use it, I MIGHT cut directly from Rey saying I KNOW IT LOOKS…to I THINK I’M JUST TIRED, THAT’S ALL…)

PREDATOR  (released 1987/directed by John McTiernan)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrDsvVKY_d4

PREDATOR 2  (released 1990/directed by Stephen Hopkins)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ciuvNsG10_E

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pLe_1SheJms

PREDATORS  (released 2010/directed by Nimrod Antal)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DaKbXJUWRZk

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xkC2Op3VA5E  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

• KEEP THIS POST FREE, IN CASE I WANT TO ADD ANY MORE STAR WARS:RISE OF SKYWALKER IDEAS *

…I’ve since had some NEW IDEAS after all! -

MAINLY, the fact that I’m going to ACCEPT that I need to use the footage of Kylo being ‘redeemed’ enough to fight by Rey’s side against the Emperor…but will STILL kill him off by having the Emperor force throwing him down the chasm instead of trying to make Rey do it!! - this way I keep the integrity of the movie’s storyline involving the ‘Dyed’ in the force between Rey and Kylo, and make it much easier on myself to keep some great shots of their fight with the Emperor, and I liked the Emperor’s dialogue about the last Skywalker during that anyway - I just need to remove the CLOSE-UP of Rey and Kylo getting their lifeforce sucked out, as it looks silly, and the whole scene will come across more impactful. Rey just eventually comes round to tackle the Emperor herself, with NO revival for Kylo this time! - unfortunately, I’d need to include the Knights of Ren fighting Kylo to show Rey giving Kylo Luke’s lightsaber, albeit in a cut down version of the overall scene - shorten his fight and their communication moment, and don’t have him doing his ‘stance’ when he gets the lightsaber!

ALSO, I think I might just remove Rey’s training scene, and getting Luke’s lightsaber off Leia, as well as the scene where she gives Luke’s lightsaber back to her,and just have the FIRST scene of Rey showing her studying the diagram of the wayfinder in one of the Jedi books she took, as someone says the Falcon is back (it was away on the mission to contact a spy earlier on)…and then CUT to Poe telling everyone about the spy saying that Palpatine was back…then Rey runs to get the book (wearing Luke’s lightsaber that she had give back to Leia earlier!!!), and tells Leia she is going to find Exegol and the Emperor just as she would have done, as she fuels the Falcon and the gang say they are gong with her no matter what, as she smiles…and we CUT to the Falcon departing (I love this CUT) - which REMOVES Rey looking into the jungle as Poe comes up to her (unfortunately, this means missing out C3PO’S nice dialogue with R2 as his best friend, but I can live with that), Rose speaking to Finn, and Leia handing Luke’s lightsaber back and hugging crying Rey. All this helps to focus on the wayfinder much better, and helps to cut down the runtime a lot.

ALSO, I might not have Finn shouting REY during the duel, as it would distract her, and I might have her forcethrown him back in a different way as she senses him approaching, and once Rey flies off after reviving Kylo, we see Finn and the girl looking on as the Falcon approaches…then cut to the woman telling Poe, Finn, and Chewie that Leia is gone, as Chewie wails - getting rid of Maz and the rebels mourning over a shrouded Leia - it’s a bit stagey, and slows the movie down, and I’d rather imagine she faded away quite quickly seeing as she’s a forceghost at the end! - then I’m going to CUT to a short version of a revived Kylo contemplating things, as he throws his lightsaber into the sea, then turns to look at the Death start ruins, before his close-up then wipes to the Emperor speaking to general Pryde - this way I can get the start of the Emperor’s dialogue after all!

STILL not sure if I should have Rey using forcelightning to blow up the ship, as why didn’t she try lightning on the Emperor in the same way as Count Dooku did with Yoda in AOTC? And would Kylo be able to fight her off if she used it on him, when he goes to fight her? - But it’s a powerful scene overall, although I’d maybe get rid of her screaming CHEWIE, and just have her only whisper his name eventually instead, NOTE - should the forcelightning only be a dark power that the Emperor has? Should I only have Count Dooku dueling Yoda with lightsaber in my AOTC edit?

ALSO, try rearranging the scenes of HUX the spy shooting the troopers and the scenes of Kylo telling Rey she’s a Palpatine to see if it would work better overall. Do I use shot of HUX aiming gun and have some of the arguing dialogue, or just have the shot of dead stormtroopers, and HUX saying I’m the spy, and then Finn saying NO YOU DIDN’T when Poe says I KNEW IT?

But things went downhill here too, unfortunately…

ALIEN VS PREDATOR  (released 2004/directed by Paul W. S. Anderson)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LTx0u-RurMs  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HwwOO4pm6qM

ALIENS VS PREDATOR: REQUIEM  (released 2007/directed by Colin Strause and Greg Stause)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YrTXTb03Ixc

I MIGHT END UP DECIDING TO END MY ‘MEGA-CUT’ OF ‘THE LAST JEDI’/‘RISE OF SKYWALKER’ SOMETHING LIKE THIS, SO THAT WE JUST HEAR MUSIC (in a similar way to what I have in mind for my ending of ‘REVENGE OF THE SITH’) -

JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??

ANOTHER ALTERNATIVE IDEA = AFTER WE SEE THE MONTAGE WHICH ENDS IN THE STARDESTROYER CRASHING DOWN TO TATTOOINE, MAYBE CUT TO ‘LIGHTSKIPPING’ SHOT OF FALCON IN HYPERSPACE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING CHESS SCENE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO RAY EXITING THE FALCON IN CLOSE-UP, THEN MAYBE CONTINUE AS NORMAL FROM THERE RIGHT UP UNTIL OLD WOMAN ASKS ‘WHO ARE YOU’, AND WE SEE RAY REPLYING “REY”, THEN MAYBE CUT TO FALCON FLYING OVER SANDCRAWLER AS JAWAS SAY “OOH TEENIE!”, THEN FADE TO CIRCULAR IRIS.

…then CUT to black to imply some time has passed, as we then see the Falcon in hyperspace -

PUT THIS INFO. IN BLUE BOX - would it result in a sudden cut to silence from the previous shot of the stardestroyer falling? Would I need to FADE to black instead if I do this?

…then CUT to the Falcon in hyperspace -

PUT THIS INFO. IN BLUE BOX - this Falcon in hyperspace shot is one that I didn’t use from earlier in the movie.

…and we continue as normal as Chewie plays holochess with Finn and Poe, as they all get up when an alert goes off, and Poe agrees that he’s cheating and switches off the table -

PUT THIS INFO. IN BLUE BOX - the reason I MIGHT add the above scene is to imply that Chewie, Finn, and Poe all accompanied Rey on her journey to Tattooine, and to add a little bit of levity near the end of my new ‘saga’ conclusion.

…and we continue on as normal, as Rey emerges from the Falcon -

NOTE - put more close-up pics of rey and bb8 leaving falcon here. This was the final shot below -

first wide shot of landed Falcon -

…and then we continue on as normal, as Rey looks over the edge -

…then CUT to this angle of Rey looking at her lightsaber -

PUT THIS INFO. IN A BLUE BOX - CUT the above shot immediately before we HEAR the noise that the old woman’s animal makes offscreen.

PUT THIS INFO. IN A BLUE BOX - I MIGHT decide to include the interior of the Falcon at this point, where Chewie growls as Finn and Poe accuse him of cheating at holo-chess - NOT 100% SURE YET.

…then CUT to my FINAL shot of the ‘saga’ as we see the Falcon flying over a sandcrawler and a group of Jawas say “OOH TEENIE!”

…as we fade out to a circular ‘iris’ and the END CREDITS appear (NOTE - I need to listen to the END CREDITS music of ‘The Last Jedi’ and ‘Rise Of Skywalker’, to see which I prefer to conclude my ‘saga’ on - so I may end up having J.J. ABRAMS here instead, if I prefer the end music of ‘Rise Of Skywalker’) -

PUT THIS INFO. IN A BLUE BOX - I MIGHT be able to briefly CUT to a silent RIAN JOHNSON credit first, THEN fade out to a circular ‘iris’ showing the J.J. ABRAMS credit immediately afterwards as the music kicks in.

*** Just a thought - would adding in an edited version of the broom boy ending work?? - perhaps in-between where stardestroyer is crashing towards Jakku sands…and the usual end scene where Falcon flies past a sandcrawler on Tattooine. ***

JUST A COUPLE OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT - should I add the shot of the Falcon in hyperspace BEFORE the shot near the end of the Falcon going back to Tattooine?? Also, should I add the scene of Chewie playing the hologram chess game with Finn and Poe as well, or not?? - And would either work okay and soundwise??

ANOTHER ALTERNATIVE IDEA = AFTER WE SEE THE MONTAGE WHICH ENDS IN THE STARDESTROYER CRASHING DOWN TO TATTOOINE, MAYBE CUT TO ‘LIGHTSKIPPING’ SHOT OF FALCON IN HYPERSPACE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING CHESS SCENE, THEN MAYBE CUT TO RAY EXITING THE FALCON IN CLOSE-UP, THEN MAYBE CONTINUE AS NORMAL FROM THERE RIGHT UP UNTIL OLD WOMAN ASKS ‘WHO ARE YOU’, AND WE SEE RAY REPLYING “REY”, THEN MAYBE CUT TO FALCON FLYING OVER SANDCRAWLER AS JAWAS SAY “OOH TEENIE!”, THEN FADE TO CIRCULAR IRIS.

ADDITIONAL THOUGHT - AFTER STARDESTROYER FALLS ON JAKKU DESERT, SHOULD I JUST CONTINUE TO FADE TO REBELS LANDING AS NORMAL AS BB-8 AND CONEFACE MEET UP, AND THEN ALSO CONTINUE WITH R2 AND C3P0 WATCHING REY LAND X-WING TO BE GREETED BY BB-8…BEFORE I THEN CUT TO BLACK AND FALCON IN LIGHTSPEED BEFORE WE SEE CHEWIE, POE, AND FINN PLAYING HOLOCHESS?? - MIGHT WORK BETTER FOR PACING TOO??

AN EXTRA RANDOM THOUGHT! - I’ve decided that I ABSOLUTEY DESPISE the notion of the ‘horse’ attack on top of the Stardestroyers!!! - SO IS IT POSSIBLE TO SOMEHOW RE-EDIT THINGS TO HAVE ‘LANDO ARRIVING WITH HIS HUNDREDS OF REBEL SHIPS ARRIVING’ BE THE LAST APPEARANCE OF THE DOGFIGHT, THEN HAVE SOME KIND OF REY AND BEN AGAINST THE EMPEROR SCENES, CULMINATING WITH HIM BEING BLOWN AWAY, THEN WHEN REY EMERGES TO JOIN THE REST OF THE FLEET AFTERWARDS, WE ASSUME THAT THE FIRST ORDER SHIPS WERE BEATEN OFFSCREEN??? - check if this would work sometime. But I’d need to ALSO get rid of all of Finn and the girl’s antics blowing up the ‘main’ Stardestroyer and eventually jumping onto the Falcon etc., as we wouldn’t see how they got onto the Stardestroyer originally!

THIS IS A NICE LITTLE EDIT THAT WORKS WELL - when redoing Rey obliterating the Emperor in the way that I want, when we pan across to the ‘Sith’ statues…miss out the shot of Finn, and instead CUT DIRECTLY to the stardestroyer blowing up as Pryde runs in slow motion - this happens to be a great music match luckily.

SIN CITY  (released 2005/directed by Robert Rodriguez)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AN7mRnEvC9E

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F0M8qjlAT8s

THIS IS HOW I’D LIKE TO ALTER THE BEGINNING OF ‘THE HOBBIT:AN UNEXPECTED JOURNEY’ FOR MYSELF. NOTE - RATHER THAN DO A ‘BOOK CUT’ OF THE NOVEL, I’D PREFER TO DO A TWEAKED ‘JACKSON ADAPTION’ WHICH KEEPS THE LIKES OF THE VISUALLY-GREAT ‘PROLOGUE’ SEQUENCE AT THE BEGINNING. WHILE DOING AWAY WITH THE SILLINESS OF THE ‘TROLLS’ SEQUENCE -

…and continue on as normal until Bilbo opens his red book -

THEN CUT HERE JUST BEFORE WE HEAR BILBO’S VOICE SAY “I’M OLD NOW FRODO…”, AND JUST CUT DIRECTLY TO THE PORTION OF BILBO’S CLOSE-UP AS WE HEAR HIS VOICE SAYING “…I’M NOT THE HOBBIT I USED TO BE” (NOTE - I’m not 100% sure that I need to do this or not) -

…and continue on as normal as Bilbo eventually writes IT BEGAN LONG AGO -

…and continue on as normal as we see the ‘PROLOGUE’ of the dwarf miners and elf King visiting palace/Smaug’s attack/the elf King not helping/the dwarves having to leave their land, while Thorin ends up working as a blacksmith (NOTE - I’D INCLUDE SOME OF THE ELF KING FOOTAGE FROM THE EXTENDED VERSION TO SHOW THAT THERE HAD BEEN A FALLING OUT BETWEEN HIM AND THE DWARF KING), and we END on the close-up of Thorin hammering a sword he’s making, as we hear Bilbo’s voice say “…AND HE NEVER FORGAVE, AND HE NEVER FORGOT!” -

…then we CUT to this shot of the shire which pans upwards, as we then return to seeing Bilbo writing (NOTE - the THEATRICAL version already transitions to this shot via a brief fade to black in-between…but has Bilbo’s voice saying DIFFERENT words initially!) - STILL TO FINISH WRITING IF I’D PREFER THE EXTENDED OR THEATRICAL VOICEOVER HERE -

…and continue on as normal as we eventually see Bilbo write THERE LIVED A HOBBIT -

…and continue on as normal as we eventually see Frodo appear and head out to get the mail -

…and continue on as normal as Frodo gives the letters to Bilbo, and Bilbo tells him his book isn’t ready yet -

and we END on the shot where Bilbo says “…READING!” -

…and then CUT to Frodo saying to his uncle that people are beginning to think he’s odd and unsociable, as Bilbo then tells him to put a sign on the gate -

…and continue on as normal as we eventually hear Bilbo say something about Ghandalf not liking lateness, as we then see Bilbo sitting on a bench with a long pipe -

The 7 Faces Of Doctor Lao was one of my favourite films when I was a kid and I still love it.

Being about a mysterious ancient aeon spanning eccentric, who has multiple incarnations, travels with a dimensionally transcendental home, feigns stupidity or weakness to confuse and confound his foes and has a Yeti and the Loch Ness monster featured, who drops into a town and leaves after sorting out a mess.

I'm kind of pre-programmed to liking him.

The book The Circus Of Dr Lao is much less family friendly though and well worth a read (though possibly impossible to film).

RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK  (released 1981/directed by Steven Spielberg)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g2fHir1eTYU

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7THge74MSpQ

Re-release Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3QAhz3QqOmQ

INDIANA JONES AND THE TEMPLE OF DOOM  (released 1984/directed by Steven Spielberg)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V26M7VbIjeQ

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HOwWfns4qqw

INDIANA JONES AND THE LAST CRUSADE  (released 1989/directed by Steven Spielberg)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qu4uB8GnfaE  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=A7TaY8HWYd8

2003 'Trilogy' DVD Release Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ABXbtj6Mmhw  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

2008 'Trilogy' DVD Release Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MdxwTDdVQ-I

But then things went downhill, unfortunately...

INDIANA JONES AND THE KINGDOM OF THE CRYSTAL SKULL  (released 2008/directed by Steven Spielberg)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VwBoXJ-eYvk

Theatrical Trailer 1 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gQT5k8qsI34

Theatrical Trailer 2 - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nH2bTOBxE98

doubleofive said:

I was all excited, put it in my calendar even, then noticed “Back in ‘cinemas’”. That sounded rather British to me, then I realized that I hadn’t heard of it because it wasn’t in my country.

I assumed the upcoming ‘BACK TO THE FUTURE’ re-release was coming out across USA too.  I’m surprised if it’s just us that’s getting it.  Keep an eye on your listings nearer October in case of developments.

In the meantime, I’ll continue on randomly…

BIG TROUBLE IN LITTLE CHINA  (released 1986/directed by John Carpenter)

Fanedited Trailer (a nicely ‘updated’ one I came across recently) - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SBz-8j0H87Q

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SIPXEUSi-iM

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=592EiTD2Hgo

NOTE - rather than starting the Boba escape scene ‘inside his helmet visor’, I might instead start just AFTER the initial shot of his arm breaking through the sand and hitting the ground (immediately after the hand shot fades out), where the background has changed and we now see him grunting as both his arms go up -

…OR…I MIGHT instead start at this point below, just after he has pulled himself out upright, as an alternative way of slightly extending our look at Boba’s escape before the ‘inside his helmet visor’ shot, and the music would blend nicely here with the preceding Boba in the tank shot -

I haven’t been around to comment on this show before now, but I’ve really enjoyed the majority of THE MANDALORIAN’s initial 2 seasons. I wasn’t expecting too much from the TV show side of things initially, but it’s exceeded my expectations with some excellent moments throughout…and it’s been fun to be transported back to a ‘STAR WARSY’ setting on a regular basis.

And since I’ve just mentioned on the main THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT discussion thread that I’d prefer to alter the ending of the 2nd season more to my own taste, I thought I’d show EXACTLY HOW over here.

It was a fantastic moment when ‘Luke Skywalker’ initially revealed himself at the time…but despite a good effort, the digital face replacement wasn’t quite there during all the shots, mainly due to a somewhat ‘dead-eyed’ look I think. On top of that, things then ended up being just a little too schmaltzy for my liking, which is another reason I’d rather alter it. But that’s just my own take on that at the end of the day.

I’ve since seen Shamook’s excellent ‘deepfake’ improvement of the scene on YouTube of course, and I only wish that there could be a future official release of the show using his version. I would be content with the existing ending if that was the case. Anyway, it’s terrific news for us all that he’s actually been hired by Lucasfilm now, and it’s great to know that this type of thing is in very capable hands for their future shows.

Anyway, here’s how I’d alter things for a less schmaltzy, final moment once the summoned Jedi is allowed to enter by the Mandalorian…

As the tension builds, the Mandalorian puts the child down, and then presses a switch to open the doors…

…and as the anticipation builds, we get our last look at the waiting group…

…and then the lightsaber switches off, as we get to the ‘Oh WOW, look who it is!’ moment…

…and as a brief reprise of John Williams’ familiar music plays over Luke’s casual reveal, I’d finish off with a final look at ‘the child’ who looks back at him and blinks…

…and then I’d CUT to blackness as we hear a brief echoing sound (from where the lift door closed during the final shot in the original version), as the echo fades to silence and the words ‘Directed by PEYTON REED’ appear, before the end theme begins as normal…**

So I’d be content with just that, as we only see the best of the existing ‘Luke’ shots, without having to see any more of them. A ‘Jedi’ has heard the child’s ‘Force call’, and come to his aid…so we are at the end of the Mandalorian’s mission now. We effectively end on the sudden ‘Oh WOW!’ factor of the reveal that it’s actually ‘Luke Skywalker’ who has responded, and know that all will be well for the child now, with no further dialogue necessary.

Now onto the NEXT season’s adventures, post haste!

HAPPY NEW YEAR to all.

With one thing and another, It’s been over 2 years since I’ve commented at length about anything specific around here…BEFORE THE DARK TIMES…BEFORE THE RISE OF…er, THE PANDEMIC! But I’ve had plenty of time to mull over the conclusion of the Sequel Trilogy which came out at the end of 2019, and hope to go into some thoughts of my own on it before too long. Along with an idea or two also, but that’s for another day.

As a long-time fan of the Original Trilogy’s imaginative world-building, I wondered what a regular live-action TV show would offer in a ‘Star Warsy’ setting…so I’m glad to say that I’ve found plenty of impressive and fun moments throughout THE MANDALORIAN and THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT shows so far.

After previous disappointments with certain aspects of the franchise, I’d kept my expectations very low for THE MANDALORIAN. I initially had some reservations about how things would turn out when I found out that the main character was going to be accompanied by a little, doe-eyed, Disney-fied ‘yodaling’…but he’s turned out to be a big hit now, even though I wasn’t too keen on the idea at the start. And due to the way things progressed in the show, I warmed to him too…especially as he remained SILENT throughout, rather than being given some kind of awful ‘toddler Yoda’ voice. Thank the Maker!

Yes, there’s been some overly-goofy moments along the way, but both shows have had enough entertaining moments in them to offset any eye-rolls I’ve had with them. And Boba’s ‘backstory’ involving his experiences with the Tusken tribe really helps to strengthen his initial appearances in THE MANDALORIAN show for me now too.

So yeah, It’s still a great time to be a fan of the franchise I reckon, and if the overall quality of these initial two shows are anything to go by, them I’m certainly looking forward to all the other live-action spin-off shows yet to come too.

However, having said all that…

just as I thought that THE MANDALORIAN season 2 finale’s last moments came off a bit unconvincing and cloying for my taste, I also had a couple of niggling issues with the opening episode of THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT too…

…because a scene showing EXACTLY HOW Boba escaped from the Sarlacc was always going to be a big moment that a lot of us were looking forward to seeing onscreen…but I’m afraid that Robert Rodriguez came up with something very mediocre, as far as I’m concerned…because the way he ended up putting this major sequence together was lacklustre and cheap-looking I thought, with lazy camera angles and strangely-edited shots…and very little sense of jeopardy overall. And as a fan of a lot of his work, it pains me to say that.

I’d hoped for a much more substantial sequence for that moment, but it was poorly handled I felt. Practical effects can look excellent if they are done well, but the start of the Sarlacc ‘flashback’ was a gloopy, rubbery-looking disappointment for me, and the whole thing seemed rushed overall. And I didn’t particularly like the way Boba was shown to escape in the first place, with his hand suddenly bursting upwards through the sand like something out of the ending of ‘Carrie’! Some may love what we got, but I guess I just hoped for something a bit more dramatic and better-staged for this particular sequence.

Hell, I’d rather Boba had just managed to get his jetpack to splutter back into life for a few seconds eventually to be honest, and then grenaded the beast’s insides on his way out for good measure. At the very least I’d have liked to have seen less cutting and better camera angles used on the actual scene Rodriguez came up with…as the ONLY thing that salvaged it for me somewhat, was the neat accompanying music that started up once Boba broke out of the sand. But a missed opportunity for this particular set-piece to have been something more special I reckon.

So just for fun, I played around with the opening of the show for a while to see how things would look and sound if it was re-arranged a little more to my liking…which just involves simplifying things even more when it comes to seeing Boba alive outside of the Sarlacc that he escaped from eventually - at some point after the barge exploded, he just DID…with the method UNSEEN this way, so that I can imagine whatever I wish… 😃

We begin with a certain short musical fanfare, as it fades out to the silence of familiar blue wording…

…then we CUT to the existing opening scenes…

…as we see a familiar figure inside a healing tank…

…then we CUT to a whole new ‘flashback’ here, as Boba recalls a desolate part of Tatooine…

…then we CUT back to Boba moving uncomfortably in his healing tank at this point…

…then we CUT to the rest of his ‘flashback’, where we hear heavy breathing from inside a familiar helmet, as the score kicks in at this point…

…then things continue normally as per the episode, as a Sandcrawler comes across Jabba’s barge wreckage at night, and the Jawas steal Boba’s armour, etc…

(by the way, re-instating the initial ‘flashback’ showing Slave I on the watery world of Kamino would work equally fine for me too, as a juxtaposition to then seeing a ‘flashback’ to the sands of Tatooine afterwards - seeing as we then got a shot of Slave I taking off from Kamino in the 2nd episode of the show)

And while I generally liked the majority of the music heard throughout both of these shows, especially the main and end themes…there were certain moments where I would have liked something a little less bombastic personally. And the scene where Boba is getting dressed in his costume finery by his droids was one such moment! We got an overly-dramatic piece of music throughout the scene, which made it faintly ridiculous I thought…which is a pity, as it would have been a neat moment if there had been a moodier, lower-key piece of music over it I reckon…or no music at all.

So here’s how my ideal re-edit of how that would look instead, which would give a much quieter reveal of his costume at this point -

We see Boba in his healing tank, and hear a female voice say Wake up Boba…

…at this point Boba says The dreams are back to Fennec Shand, as he sighs and gets handed his black robe from the approaching droid…

…as Fennec turns to walk away saying Time to go, they’re lined up to pay respects…I’ll let them know you’re on your way, and we end on a close-up of Boba’s gnarly face, as the music fades away…

…then I’d CUT to this shot of Boba now on his throne, as we see him in his full armour again for the first time…

By the way, I reckon Temuera Morrison is doing great in the role so far, and his rugged face and accented line delivery are working very well for the character, just as it did for his ‘dad’.

One other thing about the opening episode of THE BOOK OF BOBA - as much as I love all of ‘Ray Harryhausen’ creature features, I wasn’t too keen on the look of the sand monster at the end. It seemed too on the nose as something the great man would have designed for one of his flicks, but not very ‘Star Warsy’-looking if you know what I mean. Just my own view on that. After looking at it again, I’d probably prefer to remove certain shots of it to make the sequence pass a little quicker, and lessen the amount of skirling that we hear the beast make.

Lastly, I thought Steph Green’s 2nd episode turned out wonderfully overall - I never realised that I needed so much Tusken grunting in my life, and they have been wonderfully portrayed so far. I laughed when a few of them immediately started to take the stolen swoop bikes apart when Boba offered the bikes to them - that was a genuinely funny ‘call back’ to the ones that were starting to dismantle Luke’s speeder in A NEW HOPE, I thought. And Unlike Robert Rodriguez’s 1st episode, this had a really kinetic, cinematic look to it’s set-pieces.

Safe to say that my much younger self would have absolutely lapped all this up if it had been around at the time, even though my current older self would like to tweaked certain things a tad. Roll on the next episode!

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CUT to Boba’s face, to begin scene of Jawas taking his helmet and armour -

OR A POSSIBLE ALTERNATE BEGINNING…WHERE THE SHOW WOULD START IN A MORE ‘LINEAR’ WAY WITHOUT SEEING BOBA HAVING ‘FLASHBACKS’ IN HIS BACTA TANK AT JABBA’S PALACE UNTIL MUCH LATER ON -

We begin with a certain short musical fanfare, as it fades out to the silence of familiar blue wording…

…then we CUT to twin suns, as we pan down to a familiar desolate part of Tatooine…

…then we CUT to hearing heavy breathing from inside a familiar helmet, as the music kicks in at this point…and we see an exhausted Boba collapse to the ground, as the music fades down…

…then things continue normally as per the episode, as a Sandcrawler comes across Jabba’s barge wreckage at night, and the Jawas steal Boba’s armour, etc…

…and then we continue as normal as the Tuskens come across him and take him back to their camp…and AT SOME POINT, i COULD THEN CUT BACK TO THE ORIGINAL OPENING SCENES OF JABBA’S PALACE, AND BOBA IN HIS BACTA TANK AS FENNEC WAKES HIM UP…

LATEST THOUGHT - IF I DO A SHORT STORY OF BOBA FETT, I MIGHT JUST END IT WITH BOBA AND FENNEC TAKING OVER JABBA;S PALACE - NOT SURE YET.

Bingowings said:

The 7 Faces Of Doctor Lao was one of my favourite films when I was a kid and I still love it.

Yeah, ‘7 FACES OF DR LAO’ was something I always liked to catch on TV when I was younger too.  It’s one of those gems that doesn’t seem to be available on DVD here in the UK, but I got it on Region 1 for my 2 young brats who loved it too.  It was great seeing it again after all these years.  😃

And here’s something else I used to make sure I caught when I was younger, whenever it was shown.  Again, it doesn’t seem to be available in UK, so I had to order this on Region 1 for the young 'uns too.  And again, they loved it!  But unlike the washed-out trailer shown here, the original sumptuous colour on the DVD is terrific, and was another great piece of nostalgia for me…

CAPTAIN SINDBAD  (released 1963/directed by Byron Haskin)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PPW2iyT_V64

NEW OPENING SCENE I’d prefer for ‘THE MIST’

(so that I can get rid of the 'poster art shots which ‘take me out’ of the movie immediately, and stick to the more atmospheric lightning sounds instead, rather than the continuous radio music tune)

The DIMENSION FILMS logo fades in to the sound of lightning, then fades out to black as we hear just a snippet of the original radio intro. tune…

Then I’d CUT to the pull-back shot of the family watching the lightning storm as THE MIST title comes up…

Then we continue as normal, as the family go down into the basement for safety…

Then I MIGHT CUT to the tree crashing through the window towards us at this point…

OR…I MIGHT instead CUT to the last final black bit of the ‘tree’ shot above at this point, as sound of the lightning fades away, and we fade into daylight the next morning, and see the devastation outside the house…

FLASH GORDON  (released 1980/directed by Mike Hodges)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0IN5pDu82nI

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tQZlBIWNd1g  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

THE WAY I’D PREFER TO HEAR JAR JAR’S INITIAL DIALOGUE AFTER HE’S SAVED BY QUI-GON -

…we see Qui-Gon shouting “GET AWAY, GET OUT OF HERE!” before he throws himself on top of Jar Jar…as he then walks off into the woods as Jar Jar says “HEY WAIT!” and goes after him…

…then I’d CUT to this point where Jar Jar says “MEESA CALLED JAR JAR BINKS…MESSA YOUR HUMBLE SERVANT”, as Obi-Wan replies “THAT WON’T BE NECESSARY” -

THE WAY I’D PREFER TO SEE AND HEAR THE PODRACE END IN THE PHANTOM MENACE -

Anakin overtakes as Sebulba crashes and ends up exclaiming “POOHDOO!”

NEED TO REALLY CHECK THIS CAREFULLY FOR THE SOUND AND MUSIC FIRST, BUT I’D IDEALLY LIKE TO CUT TO THESE SHOTS OF THE WATCHING GROUP AND ANAKIN’S PODRACER NEXT -

…and then I’d CUT to the close-up of R2 beeping, and C3PO saying “I CAN’T BELIEVE IT!” (UNLESS I decide to keep C3PO’s introduction to ATTACK OF THE CLONES only! - like Adywan intended) - BUT CHECK THE FOOTAGE FIRST TO SEE IF I WANT TO CONTINUE WITH ANY OF THE ORIGINAL SHOTS BEFOREHAND HERE FIRST, INSTEAD

…and then I’d CUT to a disgruntled Watto eventually saying “EEEEHHHHH!” - BUT CHECK THE FOOTAGE FIRST TO SEE IF I WANT TO CONTINUE WITH ANY OF THE ORIGINAL SHOTS BEFOREHAND HERE FIRST, INSTEAD

…and then I’d CUT to the point where Jabba looks round slightly, as he grunts “HMMMMMMM!” (UNLESS I decide to include the WHOLE shot where Bib Fortuna taps him to wake him up, instead)

• NOTE * - I MIGHT prefer to shift the R2/C3PO shot to IMMEDIATLELY BEFORE the Qui-Gon/Watto shot shown below - not sure yet

…and then I’d CUT to Qui-Gon going to speak to Watto about winning Anakin off him

LEGEND  (released 1985/directed by Ridley Scott)

Teaser Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=az40e63ZClU

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mz16afKwpWM  NOW GONE!  Will look for replacement soon.

Some very good points as usual from others around here. Well the 6th episode had some neat moments along the way, but it was yet another mixed bag for me overall.

The ‘cliffhanger’ that this penultimate episode ended on - 'Grogu having to CHOOSE between learning to be a Jedi or rejoining Mando - is going to be the most important indication of how season 3 of THE MANDALORIAN is going to turn out. If ‘Grogu’ decides to stay with Luke, then Mando will be freed up to have adventures on his own without having to worry about having the child around anymore. Perhaps he could end up more like a ‘lone wolf’ kind of character, or perhaps end up with some other form of sidekick partner eventually? Either way, the show might feel refreshed somewhat if it goes down this route.

Additionally. we wouldn’t need to see ‘Grogu’ (or ‘deepfake’ Luke) again if he chooses this option. and the implication would be that ‘Grogu’ MIGHT be one of the students that were eventually massacred by Kylo and his followers in THE LAST JEDI movie… And seeing as Luke is portrayed as being dogmatic about the established Jedi ‘rules’ of ‘attachments’ in this latest episode, it adds weight to him beating himself up so much when we see him in that movie - adding to the impression that when he rails against the dogma of the Jedi order to Rey, he’s actually railing against himself and his own dogmatic ‘teaching’ failures too, and has understandably been brought low and cynical by the deaths it resulted in. Despite disliking the direction that the Sequel Trilogy storyline took with Luke and other characters, there’s a part of me that wishes that Disney and co. would go down this ‘dark’ route, and retire the cutesy character of ‘Grogu’ altogether at this point, to allow for this possible scenario to tie-in with THE LAST JEDI’s ‘training temple’ outcome. Hell, they were content enough to kill off ALL three of our main heroes from the Original Trilogy after all, so why not?

But the kids needn’t worry, as the chances of that happening are ZILCH…and there’s ongoing ‘Grogu’ merchandising to consider, no doubt…

…and during the previous episode, the mechanic Peli Motto made a point of saying that she had ‘hollowed out’ the space where an ‘astromech droid’ would normally fit on Mando’s ‘starfighter’…so as sure as ‘Grogu’ is green, I’m gonna guess that he WON’T end up wanting to be a Jedi after all…and that we will see him merrily whizzing around with Mando once again, come that show’s next season…

…and a ‘starfighter’ toy with little Mando and ‘Grogu’ figures in it WOULD look pretty neat I suppose… 😉 I just felt sad for the little guy for being made to ‘choose’ one or the other in the first place…as you just know that he wanted a shot of that little lightsaber so bad!

Anyway, the final episode is also going to determine how good an ending THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT show is getting, and I don’t mind admitting that I’m kinda nervous seeing as it’s another one by Robert Rodriquez! Hopefully he (and the writers) can come up with something better than his 2 previous episodes - the ‘MOD gang’ has been very muted since their initial appearance thankfully, and I just hope he doesn’t go overboard with any involvement they have in this last episode - someone on another site wished the youths had been given a more grungy, ‘Mad Max’-look to them and their bikes overall, rather than looking like something from a trendy ‘Coruscant’ fashion show…and I agree.

So we’ll soon find out if this particular show goes out on a high or not…but either way. I reckon that THE MANDALORIAN show in general is now inextricably linked with this one, and that fans of Mando and ‘Grogu’ really need to watch both shows to understand things better - especially if Mando and a ‘chainmail’-wearing ‘Grogu’ start off their next season adventures in the ‘starfighter’. Still, anything could happen in the finale of THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT, so I’ll be watching with interest.

As far as the ‘facial look’ of Luke’s scenes in episode 6 go - although not all of them were as convincing as others, there were some that I thought were truly excellent. And some of the musical moments were really great during those scenes too, I thought. I wonder if these were 'Shamook’s first ‘official’ deepfake efforts since joining Lucasfilm? Some terrific work overall, but having studied those scenes a little more, I reckon it’s straightforward to shorten some of them to remove the less effective shots I wasn’t too keen on, while retaining the ones I liked best.

In fact, there’s SO MANY potential ways that the entire show could be cut and re-arranged, that I might play around with sections of it a little more for fun, if the final episode makes it worthwhile to me. For instance, although I showed a possible way to alter the show’s opening scenes more to my own liking back on page 10, there’s a very different style of opening I’d prefer to see now - INSTEAD of showing Boba having ‘flashbacks’ in his ‘bacta tank’ right from the off…I quite like the notion of the first episode starting in a much more straightforward, ‘linear’ way before that aspect of the show is introduced…which would still involve kicking things off with a drastically cut-down version of Boba’s ‘Sarlacc escape’ which leaves it open-ended about HOW he actually got out…

…then we CUT to twin suns, as we pan down to a familiar desolate part of Tatooine…

…but instead of seeing Boba’s hand burst through the sand, we CUT to hearing heavy breathing from inside a familiar helmet as the music kicks in at this point…and we see an exhausted Boba collapse to the ground, as the music fades down again… (NOTE - MAYBE I’D SHOW BOBA CRAWLING A LITTLE EARLIER BEFORE THE ‘VISOR’ SHOT, THEN MISS OUT THE SHOT WHERE THE SAND IS ‘DRIPPING’ OVER THE VISOR, AND CUT TO WHERE IT ISN’T DRIPPING OVER THE VISOR INSTEAD?)

…then things continue normally as per the episode, as we transition to a Sandcrawler coming across Jabba’s barge wreckage at night, and the Jawas steal Boba’s armour and knock him out…

…and then we continue on as normal, as the Tuskens come across Boba and take him back to their camp as a prisoner…as THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT titles appear, and Boba (who’s now shackled) then gets tormented by a group of young Tuskens, and gets stamped on his head, and everything goes dark…

…and at some point AFTER all this, I’d eventually introduce the fact that Boba is actually having ‘flashbacks’ of his desert experiences from inside a ‘bacta tank’ somewhere inside Jabba’s palace…and would have his first PRESENT DAY storyline ‘flashback’ be the scene of him and Fenec Shand infiltrating Jabba’s palace and killing Bib Fortuna, as he then takes Bib’s throne for himself…before eventually being wakened by Fennec…

But I hope to elaborate on all that and more on another thread someday, and in the meantime, it just remains to be seen if we get any more ‘scooter gang’ antics in the final episode, or not… 😉

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NEW POSSIBLE THOUGHT - I COULD EVEN ADD A SHORTENED ‘LINEAR’ VERSION OF ‘THE BOOK OF BOBA FETT’ ONTO THE END OF MY ‘SHORT’ STORIES OF HAN/CHEWIE AND OBI-WAN/LITTLE LUKE/LITTLE LEIA…WHICH WOULD START WITH BOBA SURVIVING THE SARLAAC, THEN SHOWING AN EDITED VERSION OF HIS TIME WITH THE TUSKEN TRIBE AND MEETING/SAVING FENNEC SHAND…THEN TAKING THE THRONE FROM FAT BIB FORTUNA, AND HIS FIGHT WITH THE SYNDICATE AND THEIR GUNSLINGER…BEFORE ENDING WITH FENNEC SHAND KILLING THE MAYOR AND GANG LEADERS, AS SHE THEN DISAPPEARS UP THE STAIRS! (NOTE - NO SCOOTER SQUAD OR MANDALORIAN OR GIANT ‘TERMINATOR’ ROBOTS OR HEALING CHAMBERS INVOLVED)

THE FRIGHTENERS  (released 1996/directed by Peter Jackson)

Theatrical Trailer - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zmQxM32PWRM

I’D PREFER TO SEE AND HEAR THE PHANTOM MENACE END SOMETHING ALONG THESE LINES INSTEAD -

…the Neimodian control ship gets blown up…

…and we continue as normal, as the droid army shuts down and Jar Jar says ???, and we end on Captain Tarpals saying ???

…and then I’d CUT to Darth Maul swiping his lightsaber over Obi-Wan…

NOT SURE YET WHAT OTHER SHOTS I’D STILL WANT TO INCLUDE AT THIS EXACT POINT HERE - NEED TO STUDY THE SCENE MORE

…we hear Obi-Wan grunt as he STARTS to leap upwards (NOTE - I’M NOT including the silly shot of him flying up)

…and then I’d CUT to Qui-Gon’s body as the lightsaber beside him shoots into Obi-Wan’s hand as he somersaults over Maul, then cuts him in half…

FILL IN MORE SHOTS HERE, AS WELL AS WHAT PALPATINE SAYS AT END OF THIS SHOT BELOW

…and then I’d CUT to

FILL IN MORE SHOTS HERE, AS WELL AS WHAT IS SAID

FILL IN MORE SHOTS HERE

…DO I END ON THIS SHOT OF JAR JAR BOWING HIS HEAD AS WE HEAR A MOURNFUL R2?? -

…OR DO I END ON THIS SHOT OF PALPATINE?? -

…OR CAN I PUT THE PALPATINE SHOT SOMEWHERE BEFORE WE END ON THE JAR JAR SHOT??