AHSOKA - A TWO-PART MINISERIES EDIT (Released) — Page 2

Can I get a DM to this? I’m interested to see what you did!

Can you send me a link please?
starwarsarrowverse22@gmail.com

Just finished watching your edit,it’s obviously better then the show itself.

There’s still problems that i still have with the show,that are in this edit,like sabine being ahsoka’s apprentice,using the force.

Ezra apparently not being held captive by thrawn,the zombie troopers that are worse then stormtroopers.

Ahsoka going out of the ship,is being shot at instead of having the ship be shot at.

I personally would have huyang say what it looks like (giant hyperspace ring),i would edit out ahsoka saying i would like to confirm that,and would have them go straight to the planet.

Also i wouldn’t have the whole wbw with Anakin,instead i’d have ahsoka be rescued… It was cool to see live action clone wars,but really ahsoka didn’t need to learn this,it was at least to me pointless,since she probably already knew that’s better to live then to die,she probably was already taught that.

Not sure how this can be done,have sabine forced pushed to the wall knocking her out,instead of being stabbed.

Also there’s still moments where,i could be wrong i’ll rewatch it, characters just stare for to long,the runtime is being stretched for to long.

Anyways good job!

I know it’s a lot to ask,but if you’re able to make any more changes,maybe in the near future,that’d be great. You don’t have to, just wanted to let you know…

Can I get a link to this? Please and thank you.

Finished watching Part I. Here are my thoughts on it:

First of all, this was very well done, very smooth and watchable. As others have said, one of my biggest gripes with the actual show is the glacial pacing. This edit does a lot to correct that. I liked the addition of dialogue from the trailer, and the dialogue cuts where they were made.

Pacing-wise, I think it could have been improved even more. During the early conversations there are still these big, thoughtful, dragging gaps. I’m not a video editor so I don’t know how well it would work, but I wondered if there was a way to cut back to characters at a later point in the takes during these conversations, to shorten the lengthy pauses. It would make those conversations flow a little faster. Of course, it’s a fine line between making it better and making it feel off. Just a thought.

In the first fight between Sabine and Shin, I greatly prefer 21C Peasant’s ‘slice vs stab’ You gave your reasons for wanting to leave it as it was originally done, and that’s fine. I just think this way would be better, and I don’t see how it could possibly affect much down the line. Personal preference on that one.

I think the idea WtarSars had about cutting the exterior space sequence could work while still retaining the Purrgil. Flow would be something like this: Eye of Sion fires on T-6, Morgan asks about the results, they’re off the scope. Cut to the T-6 starting planetfall, show the Purgill, and then intersperse some shots of the T-6 flying over the surface and landing, picking up the character shots with Ahsoka back in her normal outfit. Maybe there’s a way to make that relatively seamless, or not. I’d love to see someone give it a crack.

I’m torn on removing the ground fight at the T-6. It does tighten up the narrative and Morgan’s dialogue does provide a pathway to omitting it, but I enjoyed that scene. Mere personal preference, again. What was done here still works well.

I think Hera’s holo-meeting with Mon Mothma could be cut completely. When she contacts Ahsoka later, the same information is purveyed to the audience. I haven’t watched Part II of this edit yet, but doing this would be a first step towards eliminating that clunky (in my opinion) bit of the story completely.

Loved the way Ezra’s voiceover was added to the scenes on Seatos with Baylan and Sabine. Really gives some added insight as to how Baylan reads her inner conflict so clearly, and why Sabine makes the choice she does.

Overall, this has the look and feel of professional work. Nice job, and I’m looking forward to checking out Part II!

Hi,
Can I have a link or two please.

Hi, I’m a little bit confused on how to PM you about asking for a link for part 2 on here.

Sounds interesting, can I have a link please?

Really nice edit. Keeps the action flowing and the pace brisk. Highly recommended

Hello,

I loved your Part One edit. Could I get a link to Part Two please?
Here or maxmalkinwright@gmail.com.
Thank you so much!

Part 1 was excellent. Could you please PM me with a link to Part 2

May I please have links to parts 1 and 2 of your edit? Will you PM me?

hi can i get a link for the second part. I downloaded the first one, but didn’t see the second one on faneditnetwork

Hi,

Can I get a link to the 2nd part. Thanks!

May I have a link to both parts of this edit when you have a moment? Thanks and may the force be with you!

Am I the only one who has problems with stutters in Part 2 of this cut?
The video is 25 fps and not the normally used 23,98fps. That might be the problem.

edit: part 1 does not have the problem and is at 24fps, which indicates my theory is correct.

It is especially noticeable when the whales fly around the Republic spaceships and prepare for the Hyperspace jump, if that helps.

Can I please have a link?

Many thanks