Good revision. I feel the need to try to modify the clause about the rising tide of dissidence, maybe an analogy that doesn’t seem at odds with that of a spark. Not sure about ‘fabled’ either. I guess it’s time to bust out a thesaurus and get into the weeds.
Post #1341976
- Author
- Hal 9000
- Parent topic
- Dom's (Possibly) Useful TROS Edit (WIP)
- Link to post in topic
- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/1341976/action/topic#1341976
- Date created
- 6-May-2020, 11:02 PM