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Batman v Superman: The Third Alternative (Released)
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17-Aug-2016, 8:12 PM

I just finished watching the workprint you put together and I really like what you’ve done so far. The pacing is a lot better and makes for a much nicer film. I just want to share my ideas and some things I’ve noticed.

*In the intro, I feel it would be a good idea to leave batman saving the girl and embracing her where it was instead of in place of the nightmare sequence. I get what you were going for with that edit, but to me that really gives the viewer an idea for why Batman has this hatred towards Superman early on in the film. Also from what I’ve seen done by other editors and pulled off really well, you could skip past the encrypting sequence altogether. Go from “starting encryption” to the Lexcorp logo. Just skip the percentage screen.

*During Batman’s intro at 17:58-59 I think it would be a good idea to obscure batman from vision as to retain the mystery behind him this early on. I saw another editor do this and it worked really well. Just cut to him running away on the ceiling or whatever haha. It always seemed odd to me that he just stood there silently while the officer looked at him.

*Lois going to Africa feels a bit rushed but I don’t know if there’s anyway to fix that.

*I love the flashback after the Martha namedrop

*It might’ve just been me but the doomsday fight felt a tiny bit rushed. Not really a big deal and I love how you kept it on earth.

*Still not sure how I feel about “Is she with you” line. Take it out and it’s like “Ok well I guess Wonder Woman’s here now.” Leave it in and you’re left thinking that he literally just met her 45 minutes ago. But it definitely works better now that you took out the whole email exchange between the two.

After watching this I’m really excited to see what you bring to the table with this edit. Keep it up!