Well, I’ve figured out a way to fix this screenplay. I’m simply going to excise the SGW-0027 character from the narrative. I still find the character interesting to write for, but her story is detracting from the main story I want to tell with Anakin and Obi-Wan; it quite simply doesn’t belong here.

I’ll be retaining the clone invasion of Geonosis, but instead of following its progress from her POV, I’ll be following it from the POV of the young Darth Vader. This means I’ll have to introduce Darth and his parents at an earlier point in the story, effectively making Darth the third main character.

I don’t know when I’ll get to work revamping the screenplay; it could be sooner, it could be later. In either case, I’ve decided that I’m going to start a new thread to showcase the revised draft. This present draft may be a failure, but I consider it an admirable failure; I want to preserve it as it is.

All that said, if anyone has any thoughts they’d like to give or questions to ask, feel free to give them. If not, then this thread is officially closed.