Luke Skywalker has vanished. In his absence the sinister FIRST ORDER has risen from the ashes of the Empire and have vowed to take control of the galaxy.
Failing to convince the New Republic of this looming threat, General Leia Organa has formed a brave RESISTANCE to stand against the First Order and the powerful Starkiller weapon.
Desperate for help, General Organa has sent her bravest pilot to Jakku to learn the location of the last Jedi, while dark forces gather far above…
This is really good! I like how you said “this looming threat” instead. If I could give any suggestions, I can only pick out two things: I would suggest switching one of the times you use brave/bravest with a different word just for variation, since you use to describe both the Resistance and Poe. Maybe “best pilot”? And maybe you could say “their powerful Starkiller weapon” too. Nitpicky I know. I had actually considered calling it an “ancient weapon” just because I’m confused how the First Order could afford building that thing, but I felt that it was more important to know that it was unknown to the Republic.
OT Fan, yours is good too! I wanted to mention that even though the structural rules I laid out are conventions, they certainly shouldn’t be considered boundaries. Yours gives a lot of detail that mine otherwise couldn’t give. It sounds nice as well!