Could be as simple as starting the third paragraph with meanwhile.
Very nice crawls by the way. I appreciate the thought put into keeping it consistent in tone and style. Have you considered making new PT crawls?
That is true! Transitional words can make a big difference.
And I actually do have rough versions written for PT edits that I’ve been working on. Mine are actually based a lot off of Hal’s crawls, which I think are great. Cloak of Deception actually fits in the format pretty well I think. They’re really a mix between his and the original crawls, minus referencing the specific timespans between films like Hal’s do. The opening sentences are more general.