I’ve been reading through this thread again (not finished yet) and there are some things that came back to my attention of being in need of fixing in some way.

The first one would be R2s miracle recovery just when he’s needed. We can probably all agree that this is a really cheap plot device and there have been some suggestions in this thread how it could be improved. I think that a good and easy way to make it somewhat better would be to cut 3PO saying that R2 probably doesn’t have the map. Then I’d also suggest adding some more shots of BB-8 talking to R2 just before he wakes up to imply that BB-8 has been trying to wake R2 up for some time now and finally succeeds in the end. Doing this would require reusing some shots from the first droid scene, but I’d say that’s fine. And while this solution doesn’t fix the problem with R2 having the rest of the map it does improve it somewhat in my eyes.

I also played around with the Hosnian Prime destruction some more. I tried to intercut SKB firing and Poe making his final attack run so that the Resistance is really really close to succeeding but still fails. But that doesn’t work at all… The scene is probably best right after Hans death.

And I also thought about my crawl and came to the conclusion that I’ll replace the first sentence with the “Luke Skywalker has vanished.” line and also slightly edited the beginning of the third paragraph. I’m not 100% sure if this change is a good idea, but I think it makes sense because Luke is who everyone is looking for in the movie and so he should also be mentioned more prominently in the crawl. The old version was better structure-wise, but the new one fits better with the rest of the movie and also has this very very cool first line.