I was finally able to watch this fan edit, and I must say that I am very impressed. However, there is some dialogue you kept which I believe should have been cut.

For example, you should have cut the first two lines of the following dialogue:

RUNE: She’s right, the Senate will never . . .
NUTE: (interrupting) It’s too late now.
RUNE: Do you think she suspect an attack?
NUTE: I don’t know, but we must move quickly to disrupt all communications down there.

Since Queen Amidala never mentions the senate in this scene, the first two lines of the above dialogue are incoherent and should have been cut in your fan edit. However, this is a minor detail. Overall, your fan edit is excellent and much preferable to the original. I especially enjoyed the fan edit’s treatment of Anakin as a deliberate hero instead of an accidental hero.