When it comes to the opening scene, you have the right idea but the audio is rough which makes the cuts seem jarring. I like the scene where the old man says “invasion” but in order to make it a heavier line I would leave a 1-2 second pause before he says it and when he does say it, cut to Queen Amidala and hold the shot there for a few seconds as the music builds. Afterward you will see the army going to toward the city/palace rather than the forest (this shot: http://vignette4.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/0/0b/Trade_Federation_Droid_Army.png/revision/latest?cb=20140622175536) and save the forest sequence for when Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan meet Jar Jar.
If you aren’t already, I strongly recommend editing with 6.1 channel audio, it will make things move along much more smoothly and moving lines around will be much more seamless.
Overall I thought the idea and the goal was good, but I think my suggestions would make them work better.