Welcome back! Before commenting on the new update I have a doubt about the order of scenes:
“Cut to a pair of hands picking up a blaster rifle, which we soon see belong to steely eyed Carima inside the resistance headquarters…”
This scene, which you placed in the previous update (which is modified, as you said), but this scene is on the last update of page 2 of the topic, my question is: what is the right order? because if it is new, you should delete the scene of that update (page 2) from the topic.
“Cut to Nivir hiding among various cruisers. With acceptance settling on her face, she tells him that if they’re in trouble no amount of help will make a difference. Trukiz mentions…”
And another question I have is that in this scene of this update, Trukiz appears, if I remember correctly, Trukiz was the person with whom Anakin and the rest were to contact once they found the resistance, but when they find it, Fordala says Trukiz died weeks ago. Then it is a mistake? or Trukis (like this in this update) and Trukiz are not the same person, and just change the last letter?

And a question that I’ve been thinking, how do your Jedi dress in your prequels, or at least Anakin (as a Jedi) and Obi-Wan? Like in the original prequels? As in The Clone Wars (2008 TV-Series)? Or as Luke in Episode VI?
I have also doubts to the appearance of Phakerem, it’s kind Jango Fett, but in woman version or as the first Mandalorians as Star Wars Wiki says: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Taung
I’ll give you feedback when you put the next update, as this update is not much to say.