Something is off here, not sure what. Maybe the audio needs to sound fuller somehow? There needs to be more done with the idea? Thoughts are welcome.
I dunno, seems fine to me, except for them calling Palpy “Johnny” (unless I misheard that).
You didn’t mishear but it’s a failure on my part to adequately express what is happening - which is that it’s a party for one of the clones. You can hear the clone (i.e. Johnny) saying the weird Tommy Wiseu stuff in the background. Palps is meant to look as if he’s just leading/conducting the singing.
Didn’t really look like that. Perhaps show Palps conducting earlier on and have him move his hands up and down as if conducting. Maybe put it a shot of a clone on a Senate platform from the end of the movie and have that when Johnny is talking so we don’t associate the voice with Palps.