Really fantastic work! The altered “NOOOOOOO” at the end really saves that scene, even making the overacted gesture seem like it’s better.

As for the rest of it, the pacing is so much better. I actually believe Palpatine as a mastermind and puppeteer, as opposed to a character that things just kind of happen in his favour, and Anakin’s turning to the dark side is far more relatable and easy to take.

I am torn on whether having Coruscant edited into the bridge scene in previous versions was a better approach than having the Death Star under construction in this one.
On one hand, having Coruscant there made the scene fall flat for me, like it may as well have been cut entirely (I know that’s not something you would like to hear given how much effort it must have taken).
On the other hand, having the Death Star at these early stages at the end of ep 3 makes me question how they could have possibly built a bigger, better Death Star between eps 4-6. Still, I think leaving it in was the right choice.
That’s all incredibly nit-picky of me though, and I doubt there’s a perfect way to handle it.

Again, great job! I thoroughly enjoyed it 😃