I think letting owen and beru finish their scene first would work better, then maybe cut to an establishing shot of the homestead. Ideally the way I see the scene play out in my head, would be a shot of the homestead from a distance and a speeder comes into frame. Biggs jumps off and you’d here the two of them greeting one another. Specifically the lines you used from the scene inside tosche station. Then then wipe or fade, to show an elapse of time, to the part of the deleted scene where biggs says “I’ve missed you kid.”
Also does anyone know if there was ever a score written for the biggs/ luke deleted scene, that could be added back in?
I’ll keep trying other cuts. As for the soundtrack, leave that to me 😃
Edit:
For now, i’m going to wait a response from TeamNegative1. A better version of the shot would help a lot with rotoscoping!