Nice job, m8 - reading through them (even without the film playing in the background) - you seem to have done a very well rounded version. Hope that MagFan will put yours and ADigitalMan's versions in as an option on his v2.0.
Just on a really nitpicky point - I think you may have mis-spelt 'protocol' in Sub 7, and sometimes the word 'Queen' appears with a capital Q, other times it does not. (not sure if this is in the document you typed or in the film itself).