Here is how I would order the romance flashback:
-Anakin and Padme arrive at Naboo (why they do doesn't need to be explained, the audience can fill in the blanks), but cut their convo about politics, and the meeting with the queen.
-They go to Padme's parents house, but not in Padme's room (that scene is cheesy).
-They have dinner (the floating pear scene).
-They walk to the lake pier, cutting "I don't like sand," and "I love the water."
-They kiss, but don't pull away, which fades into the next day.
-After their convo about Anakin's mother, we cut back to the present day.
And later on (I'd put it after Mace leaves to confront Palpatine, but before Padme's ruminitions) we cut to Anakin and Padme landing on Tatooine. I would order it as such:
-Establishing shot of Tatooine, but cut Watto scene.
-Cut scene where they meet 3PO and he introduces them to the Lars's (which implies that they already know each other).
-Cut Yoda sensing Anakin's pain.
-Cut establishing shot of the funeral (to be used later).
-Cut Clieg's speech.
-Perhaps reverse shot of Anakin walking to his mother's grave and insert it after he gives his eulogy.
-Cut R2 arriving at the Homestead.
-Insert establishing shot at the end, but reverse it so it pans up into the sky, then cut back to present day.
Wow, that sounds like it could actually work. I feel that the tusken raider killing frenzy should also remain in this edit since it will really highlight Anakin's dark side urges. But I will definitely try your idea, thanks for your support on the edit :)