Thanks for the feedback. You have a good point about the 'seeds of rebellion' deleted scenes. One result of my editing goals is that the film is shorter than I would prefer, which including these scenes alleviates. They give Padme some things to do, rather than stand around and fret over Anakin. I also think the tweaked ending in which Padme lives on Alderaan dovetails with the reinstated scenes where she and Bail collaborate on their dissent.
Ever since I did my very limited and highly conservative first set of Star Wars edits, I thought the lead-in novel titles for each film would make good alternative titles. This one is appropriate to the story changes, as you say. Because none of Anakin's other motivations are really driven home sufficiently, I hope I kept enough of the emotional throughline of saving Padme to tie everything together. It would not be feasible to totally remove it through fan editing, though I'm not a big fan of it, so enough of it's foundation must remain to convincingly pull off the edit as a polished film.
My reason for moving Anakin's (now sole) nightmare to later is so that the audience can first be introduced for his political motivations first. Only after the pieces are set in place do we get the emotional undercurrent of his fear about Padme. Also, re-ordering them allows me to imply that Palpatine influenced this, which is important because it 'closes the loop' of the premonition question. What I mean by that is that, were this not the case, Padme's survival would seem like a dramatic cheat; If Anakin tries to prevent her apparently prophesied death, naturally he should inadvertently cause it in the attempt. Because she survives, laying the premonition(s) at the feet of Palpatine solves this dramatic wrinkle.
On an unrelated note, I've been preparing things this week for Emanswfan's sources' eventual release. I'd love to do a v4 using his work, and have something worthy of being shown theatrically. Going back over the edits I've made, trying to assess whether they would work well if a theater full of people (who were willing to see a fan edit) were watching. The obvious detriment is the use of 480p deleted scenes, though Emanswfan's sources ought to smooth out the difference better than any other methods. Aside from that, I really want to make it as smooth and unobtrusive as possible. I put in a few odd lines of dialogue that had been cut, if their removal was conspicuous.
There are three things for Episode III that I'm planning on changing slightly for an eventual v4. The first is the death of Dooku. I like the idea of characterizing Anakin as being affected by the Clone Wars by having him kill Dooku without external provocation. But, it happens rather quickly, and I wonder if it would be more appropriate to merely remove Anakin's hesitation but still include Palpatine's goading. I'd be interested to hear others' take on this; I have not heard any complaints about the Dooku change, and many other edits have done it as well.
I'd like to trim Windu's dialogue as he and Anakin discuss arresting Palpatine. I'd like to remove his line about regaining his trust. It would go like this:
A: I must go, Master.
W: No. [REDACTED] Wait in the Council chambers until I return.
Windu comes across stubborn and more abrasive this way.
The other thing is to attempt to reinstate Anakin's line, "I will do whatever you ask," as Palpatine has him kneel. This may not be technically possible, and for all I know I may have tried to do just this in the first place. If it's possible, I think it'd be helpful to allow Anakin some transition between, "What have I done?" to, "Yeah, let's be evil." It would demonstrate resignation to his loyalty to Palpatine at the cost of all else, which in turn requires him to obey his orders. It's a subtle step removed from immediately joining the dark side.
