TV's Frink said:

Might be a little too subtle. But repetitive dialogue always has potential.

A better way to underline the redundancy of the Jabba scene could be to replace Jabba's subtitles* with those of Greedo, and Han's dialogue in the Jabba scene with the dialogue from the Greedo scene, having them repeat the earlier scene word for word.

*He does speak Huttese in that scene, right?

Maybe that's still too subtle, but not any more so than your *DELIBERATE CREATIVE DECISION*'s that you used in the other edits....