That last one's good! But I think it's probably best to stick with what you have but with the I insteax of we. Don't change will to might, it should be more definite that her death is imminent.
Post #745210
- Author
- DominicCobb
- Parent topic
- Star Wars Episode III: Labyrinth Of Evil (Released)
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/745210/action/topic#745210
- Date created
- 6-Jan-2015, 10:00 PM