The yads/danedits are really good, I, well, I tweaked them. When you author something sometimes when you look at your own work you know in your mind how you want it to be and you see the finished product it's the finished product and your vision...it's sometimes hard to spot the forest for the trees. When I watched these the progression to the Vader reveal was pretty obvious to me and I even commented on it on the thread for it. I felt based on the editors reaction that they weren't going to act on my suggestion so I went ahead and fixed it myself. I can't really recommend my own edit as I haven't put it out there.