A few more thoughts - shouldn't you mention the PDEs too? If you read these threads, many people are confused about how many different versions are there. Any chance you could mention with just a few sentences what are the differences and why should people skip the previous versions?

You (or the narrator) mention(s) 2 kinds of preservations - laserdisc transfers and DE. Isn't it worth mentioning film preservation too? You know, 8mm, 16mm and maybe with 1-2 sentences mention that a couple of fans are doing a 35mm transfer (possibly without mentioning Puggo or -1 if they won't like it). It would make sense to me to mention these projects here, probably between laserdisc transfers and the DE, because later (I assume) you will be mentioning you used material from these projects?

If you talk at the beginning about the cultural impact of Star Wars, wouldn't be it useful to use a minute or two from either the TV intro or the "Making Of" documentary?