A good portion of the dialogue was edited for brevity to allow for better readability while it was on screen. A lot of the language was in passive voice so I tried to punch it up with active voice. I dialed back a bit of Jar Jar's being an asshole and the characters didn't curse. Some things were changed in the dialogue to match the body language of the character and pacing of the language. Sometimes the general reaction of the characters to what was being said didn't seem right. I changed the confrontation between Padme and Nute Gunray in the climax of the throne room. In my edit, Gunray still thinks Padme is a handmaiden (since she's not in makeup and there is no dialogue to suggest that he knows her real identity). I think this scene plays out really well now.

Here's the file. Thoughts? (Updated to .srt format for all interested in downloading and remuxing. It should open in any text editor).