I have a few nitpicks once again (that's what I'm best at :)):

1. Holochess is properly termed "dejarik".

2. They have cassettes in Star Wars?!

3. You use a lot of earthisms, which makes sense because they're speaking English and Star Wars is known to do that, but I think you should add some "Starwarisms" as well. For example, instead of Bail calling Wahr Blahr (is that a tribute to Warbler? :D) a "stupid son of a b****", he could call him a "stupid son of a gundark" or a "mynock-brained hair slug [or mynock-brained idiot, if you don't want to make the Starwarisms seem too forced]".

4. Anything graphically violent or of sexual nature that isn't appropriate for kids makes it feel a lot less like Star Wars.

Otherwise, good job. I like the way you portray hyperspace travel and I thought you did a good job getting Anakin off Tatooine. I like that you have Mandalorians and I think the aspects you take from the prequels work well. I have to say I liked the prequels' Kaminoans, but what you did is just fine as well. I wouldn't have missed them if they never happened. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next installment. :)