Like I said, my grammar isn't perfect. I suppose the first might be an error (I can't really notice anything wrong with it, but I suppose it all depends on how one reads the line), but I'm not sure what is wrong with the second -- is it the use of "broke" instead of "broken"?
Post #691742
- Author
- DuracellEnergizer
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- Star Wars: The New Dawn (The First Episode in DuracellEnergizer's New PT Re-Write) *COMPLETE*
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- https://originaltrilogy.com/post/id/691742/action/topic#691742
- Date created
- 22-Feb-2014, 5:21 PM