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Post #690019

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DuracellEnergizer
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Star Wars: The New Dawn (The First Episode in DuracellEnergizer's New PT Re-Write) *COMPLETE*
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Date created
13-Feb-2014, 5:41 PM

RicOlie_2 said:

I love the Spaceballs reference. :D

Truth be told, any reference to Spaceballs in there must be totally coincidental, because I didn't deliberately insert one (I can't even recognize it).

RicOlie_2 said:

I'm liking it so far. You have pretty good dialogue in there. I think it has the right feel to it. It's certainly better than a lot of what's in the PT, but I wouldn't say it's as classic as some of the dialogue in the OT. Of course this is pretty early on in the script and part of what made the OT dialogue classic is the popularity of the movies.

Thanks. I try to make my dialogue sound as natural as possible. I'm none to pleased with the dialogue I gave the priestess and Mystral guard in my earlier post though; it sounds too stiff/artificial when I read it over in my head.