I think you accidentally double posted, you might want to fix that ;)

Yes, it is. Like I said, there's some interesting stuff in there. Narratively, there's still some holes, but then again it is a treatment. Plus his way of dealing with the Vader secret certainly is interesting.

I'm working on a prequel rewrite related project as well and as research I've read most of the ones online, even some obscure ones, that's why I instantly recognized Dorkman's work.

I saw your Avatar script and I liked it, but I quit reading because, honestly I've never gotten that far in the series so reading your movie version would be a bit of a spoiler...