Is placing your Episode VII thirty years after Endor absolutely necessary though?

I see why you'd replace head into exile with toil in exile, but if you do want it thirty years after I would make it have toiled in exile. I would also change Narrowly escaping... to Since narrowly escaping....

I'm glad I've converted you to the Dark Side of the Star Wars sequels; in time, you will call the true Emperor "Master"!

Haha! While your idea is intriguing, my interest was primarily linguistic.

It's great to see enthusiasm for the notion of writing alternative Star Wars episodes though. I'd rather have an edit of ESB (with no big reveal) as Episode II and a completely rewritten third episode. ROTJ is beyond saving (unless extensive refilming can work miracles).