Good to hear from you again. I was beginning to worry that you'd been ambushed by sand people.
Is my story still up to NeverarGreat Standard, or has it fallen utterly off the deep end?
It is a time of galactic tyranny. The evil EMPEROR OF THE GALAXY, using a twisted clone decoy, lured a fledgling rebellion into attacking and destroying an Imperial superweapon at the moon of Endor.
This rebel victory was short lived, however, as Imperial forces regrouped, and the moon of Endor was soon pulverized under the firepower of the entire Imperial starfleet.
The rebel heroes Luke and Leia Skywalker, narrowly escaping the devastation, evaded the Imperial starfleet and escaped into exile, gathering new strength in the fight for justice and freedom among the darkening stars....
That opening crawl is close to excellent. Smooth, comprehensible. If it were me, OCD would kick in and I would say: "The rebel heroes, Luke and Leia Skywalker, narrowly escape into exile", etc.
As it is, a form of "escape" appears twice in the same paragraph, and "Imperial starfleet, which was in the last.