If ever there was a time to say 'it's so crazy, it just might work'...
Anyway, I realize it's a rough cut, but I thought I'd point these things out anyway:
- Obi Wan says "Qui-Gon would never join you," then "I will never join you." Doesn't really work.
- The music for the beginning of the arena scene needs to change, Across the Stars doesn't make sense at this point.
But you probably already know these things, so I'll just say good luck! Can't wait to find out how this will work!