Aalanfae, my suggestion:

Add more scenes that take place outside of Anakin/Obi's cockpits. Add the vulture droids attacking/clone pilots intercepting to help...but have no dialogue. No shots of Anakin or Obi-Wan in the cockpit. Edit it all together very fast.

That way, when Anakin and Obi-Wan exit their cockpits, it's an epic introduction to two bad-ass as hell Jedi Knights. No dialogue needed, the epic visuals speak for themselves. Just like the start of A New Hope.

I love this idea, and I'm totally going to steal it for my edit.