One of my favorite movies is Sunshine, which is about a single mission to the Sun. Your story seems to mostly take place on board a single ship like the mission in Sunshine, which I have wanted to see in a Star Wars movie. I think it would be nice to start out nice and slow like this.

I assume that Ben is going to influence the naming of Obi-wan in some way...

One thing that I find strange is that Nellith suspects Ben of being Force sensitive during the trip. I would think that she chose this particular vessel because she sensed Anakin on board, but seeing only Ben, she then concluded that he must be the Force sensitive.

There's a lot of good detail even in this synopsis, but something that I've had trouble with in my own writing is making the universe appear simple enough that the movie isn't heavy with exposition. In Star Wars, there were only Jedi Knights. I guess the point is that we must first understand what a Jedi is before we can appreciate the differences between classes of Jedi.

I'd like to hear more!