Ryan, it's good, but I would change a few things:

If Luke left earlier during the storytelling (I have Luke leaving at the mention of Vader), 3PO carries on a bit, then you then cut to Luke and Ben, it helps explains the time gap of how he got to the shuttle. I'd also replace the music at the end of the Ben scene - IMO that music is too associated with the rebel fleet scene. And maybe also trim the Ben scene (the from a certain point of view bit always bugs me).

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