I'd say that is a lot better now
just a thought but after watching it a few times I think it might be better to cut it back on Vaders last line to "inform me when we are in super lasser range" and leave it at that.
It's more blunt and Vader should not be entertaining the idea he will fail can you chop that in your editor as I think it will improve it further. And then I think it is done
but If you wan't to keep it fine It's just where I can see perhaps further improvement