I'm loving it. I'm still struggling through my first chapter - I got 7,000 words in before starting again as there simply wasn't enough action - but I like coming back to read your screenplay and it's interesting where certain ideas converge with stuff that I've thought of.

I like the name Jeni and I understand where you're coming from in the simplicity of it. I had Sara Jay as a name for the key female character in my story...and then I realised it's the name of an adult movie star!

Keep up the excellent work. It doesn't wink knowingly at the audience too many times which is nice; the references are a lot more subtle.