gobalicious said:

This looks absolutely fascinating.

I'm not entirely on board with starting the movie with the rebel spies escaping. It seems like too much of a rehash of the opening of ANH. But I'll leave judgement until I see the rest of the edit.

Let me take a stab at the opening crawl. I'd like to keep the traditional three paragraph format, and shorten it up a bit to be consistent in length with the other movies.

After his disastrous duel with Darth Vader, Luke Skywalker has returned to complete his Jedi training under Master Yoda.

Impatiently waiting for Luke, Lando Calrissian has infiltrated the palace of vile gangster Jabba the Hutt in hopes of rescuing Han Solo.

With the Rebel Alliance scattered across the galaxy, the Empire has begun construction on a second Death Star. In a daring mission, two rebel spies have stolen plans for the weapon and now flee carrying the last hope for the Rebellion....

I take your point about the opening being a rehash of ANH. For me, I like the similarity - and no, I'm not about to start talking about rhyming and poetry, and such crap. But it sets up the climax of the movie in the opening scene, which is scriptwriting 101. And starting a SW movie with a space battle always seems more appropriate.

I like your crawl, BTW. The truth is I wrote the one in my edit in about 5 minutes, and it shows. But as you'll see when you watch the edit, the words aren't the only problem with the crawl.