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and for the Windu and Anakin talk scene.... maybe you can make Anakin feel and seem to be more rejected.
Cutting after "are you sure?"
and jumping to "for your own good, stay out of this affair, i sense a great deal of cofusion..."
and then jumping again to "wait in the jedi chamber until we return", avoiding the "trust or not" words Windu says... He must seem that he does not trust Anakin for Anakin to hate them and go to save Palpatine!!
lol this is fun.
that way, you can keep the silent scene after this one... and we can understand Anakin to feel hate, desperate and towards the strong republic Palpatine needs.
There is a need for us not to see Anakin getting into his ship too. Finding Anakin there must be a surprise. We left him suffering, in the quiet scene, so why know that he is already going there.
And in the dialogue between Palpatine and Anakin, after they kill Windu, could be shorter. I would try to make Anakin be as quiet as he can be. He is under control of Palpatine already, and we know that.
"I pledge.. bla bla bla" "thank you"
That's a turn off. Let Palpatine speak. You are his slave now.
When Anakin asks "What about the other Jedis in the galaxy?" that is good.
If you agree and could use any of these comments, I would be greateful!