To be honest, it wouldn't take much. It's just that the paragraph organization is weird. It looks like the parts that say "cut to" seem to be the scene markers, you could just use a setting like in a treatment to divide these sections. And then capatilize important places and names. Or you could figure out a way to organize these breaks that are different from the others, maybe closer to book form, I don't know. I'm working on a treatment too that I'll eventually want feedback on, I know how much work this is, that is essentially just for us with no reward otherwise. But if you do want feedback, maybe something more focused on the bigger picture is in order for now, since if you are open to constructive criticism, things might change anyway.