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Post #580699

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CWBorne
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CWBorne’s Prequel Treatment Omnibus Thread (Current Work: Revisions & Edits)
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Date created
9-Jun-2012, 5:34 AM

Part 6 as act II finally ends. As long as this is getting at least I won’t have to add much when making it into a script.


Organa tells them to cut the chatter and to provide some covering fire. They hastily do so as she pulls out her item, a thermal detonator, which she forcibly throws and it rolls on the ground several meters. Carima asks what that was, but soon gets her answer as the device explodes, taking out their attackers. Anakin confirms the coast is clear and they start to run off. He mutters to Niwir that Darelda must have gotten the detonator from the assassin but she shrugs and comments that with today’s senators who knows?

The three of them reach the bottom of the hill, and see the spaceport at the top of it. They’re overjoyed at first, but soon hear the buzzing noise and they (along with the camera) turn to see dozens of speeders driven by Mandalorian troopers heading at them. Anakin whispers “Mandalorians” which gets Organa’s attention, but he yells for them to get to the ship.

They race up the hill, stopping every couple of meters to shoot back at the speeders that are getting closer and closer. Just as they are about to hit a close attack, 81 and Kenobi arrive on their own speeders blasting at them and draw the Mandalorian attackers away. Though far away, Anakin and Obi-Wan share a look, nod at each other and the former tells the others to grab on. They’re confused till they see Skywalker grab onto the Jedi’s moving speeder and do the same with HX’s.

After dodging enemy fire both speeders crash softly onto the ground near the ship with Anakin, Darelda, and Carima jumping off just in time. The group heads into the freighter, unfortunately a squadron of troopers is quickly following. In the cockpit Skywalker and Niwir are already at the controls, and the senator orders them to take off. Carima shrugs and says that’s good enough for her. Sure enough the ship starts to take off only for a pounding on the ceiling to start reverberating.

“We’re hearing that sound way too often today” Anakin mutters. 81 starts heading towards the exit and Organa asks where he’s going. Calmly but forcefully he asks her to excuse his temporary leave, but that they should continue taking off and he’ll be back in just a moment. She watches HX head out and can only stare at Kenobi confused when he tells her not to worry as the droid’s done this before.

On the outside of the freighter, 81 crawls to the top and sees a Mandalorian trooper. The latter has magnetic boots attaching him to craft as he blasts at it. The droids fires at them, but it has no effect on their thick armor. The soldier in turn raises its weapon, but HX quickly rushes forward and knocks it out of his hand. A physical fight ensues while the ship starts moving through the air. Inside the cockpit Darelda says whatever the droid’s doing he needs to finish quickly.

Cut to the top of the ship where the Mandalorian uses a chain whip attached to his armor to ensnare 81, and tosses him all around. Anakin is piloting and trying to avoid a rush of laser blasts and other fighters. The droid manages to free himself from the chain and again is targeted, but manages to grab the whip and knock the trooper down to one knee, though the latter’s boots still keep him attached. Fast cut to the cockpit where Carima points to a fast fighter heading right for them. Skywalker says he’s on it.

Back to HX who quickly ties the whip to a protruding pipe on the freighter then backs off and lies flat on his stomach. This confuses the soldier at first who then realizes he’s stuck in place as the enemy fighter is still coming towards. Anakin barely manages to maneuver the ship out of the way while the Mandalorian just frees the whip from his armor, but it’s too late as the enemy fighter slams right into him, finally knocking him off the freighter.

Cut to the cockpit where after a beat of silence, Obi-Wan says he thinks the matter’s been taken care of. Niwir says 81 will need to be let in and Organa goes off to do just that. Skywalker tells Ben that they have slightly bigger problems, and references that there’s countless amounts of cruisers and ships doing everything they can to keep anyone from the leaving the planet. He adds that they don’t have blasters nearly strong enough to hit back.

Kenobi asks if he can maneuver long enough till they can jump to lightspeed. The younger man glances at Carima who grins and says “Mister Kenobi, you’ve met the farmer. Meet Anakin Skywalker, the pilot.” The freighter proceeds to do some remarkable stunts, cutting it close near many ships and mostly avoiding the blasts being fired at it. He even manages to lure so enemy fighters to them, and pulls up the last moment, crashing the crafts into a freighter.

In the back section Darelda lets in 81 who after quickly dusting himself off, apologizes for the wait, as their guest was a bit stubborn. Organa cocks her head and tells the droid with a guarded smile that she always forgets the willingness to do crazy stunts like that are apparently part of his programming. The droid says “Quite, its located somewhere my skills at sabbac and implacable manners.” The two get working the data cube.

On the capital vessel Kwade is going slightly nuts and asks on a communicator why his forces can’t stop one damn ship. Phakerem calmly responds that the pilot’s a Jedi. Traezin rolls his eyes at this and grouses “Jedi on the planet, Jedi in space, I guess they’re everywhere now.” The General clarifies that it’s likely the same one from Nar Shadda, and given that they evaded her Mandalorian forces, there’s probably more than one. The pirate sighs and says of course there is.

Bracett speaks up that with the Jedi is on the ship that means… but is interrupted by Kwade who angrily states they know it means. The general says that if Organa gets out their plans could get compromised. Traezin asserts that nothing is going to derail their arrangement… but just to be safe, that the ship needs to be destroyed. He looks to Phakerem for any objection given that she wanted them alive, but she responds that a few destroyed Jedi is an acceptable loss. Kwade orders his forces to focus on the freighter.

Anakin does his best to further avoid enemy fire, but things are getting frantic. Carima prepares for the jump to light speed, telling him they need just a few more moments. Obi-Wan senses his student’s desperation, and tells him to say calm. Skywalker is too nervous and starting to panic, raising his voice to just under a yell that there’s too many ships. The Jedi Knight tells him to focus and use the Force, but the distressed Anakin replies he can’t. Kenobi tells him to let it have some control, but to no avail.

The lead enemy cruiser creeps up and readies a large homing missile right at them. Obi-Wan closes his eyes and concentrates his thoughts. Carima says she’s just about got it, and Anakin screams that they’re about to get hit, however Kenobi intensely uses the force to manually maneuver the missile just enough to avoid the blast. Less than a moment later the freighter jumps to lightspeed.

Back on the capital cruiser, Phakerem’s mouth curls into a frown and Bracett watches her and Traezin nervously. Kwade looks at the general and says they have an entire fleet; one ship can’t undo that. She can only stare and respond “So you say, Captain.” She states they’ll finish their plans here, and move on to phase two. Bracett is ordered to contact their ships and get them ready the movement into the core systems. The Chiss asks which ones will be going, and gets an answer from Phakerem. “All of them.”

Cut to the cockpit where Carima is overjoyed with relief, even shouting with delight. She says she doesn’t’ know what happened to the torpedo, but it doesn’t matter, they’re safe for now and goes to check on 81 and Organa. Anakin on the other hand is seriously dejected, unable to meet the gaze of the older Jedi. Rubbing his hand over his face he admits he doesn’t know what happened.

Sympathetic, Kenobi says he tried to entirely control the Force instead of allowing it some influence over him. Skywalker isn’t swayed, repeating his line about the number of fighters. Obi-Wan takes a different tact and uses a metaphor that no matter how many planets are in a system, how many ships fly through it, the sun acts just the same. “It shines, it warms, and it gives. It helps to create life, and from life comes the Force. Trust in its power and you’ll see beyond anything, including those ships.”

Anakin manages a smile at that and asks if Ben is still unsure that he wouldn’t be the perfect master. Kenobi smirks and slaps Skywalker on the back and tells him they have some information to decipher. The two head to the back of the ship to meet up with the others.

More to come…


I’ve been going back and editing previous portions as the treatment goes on, so don’t be put off if things seem differed when looking it over.