Not bad... It does seem somewhat fitting, though I don't know that the woman's voice is exactly fitting for the computer either.

My other main hesitance about that would be that it is literally adding to the film, rather than just splicing in original shots. I don't think that's within Zombie's operating guidelines here. (Though I'm sure he'll express his own feelings on the matter.)

If it could somehow be made to just seem like the guy on the vid-phone was just reading Deckard's questions and responding verbally, that would be less intrusive, I think. Maybe if Deckard's lines were subtitled, but in a way that they looked like they were being typed. (Appearing one letter at a time, in a natural rhythm, with a blinking cursor... Though I don't know why Deckard would be typing it and not speaking... Again it might take explanation from outside the source material to pull it off.) (Though, again, lack of intrusion may not be Zombie's goal, so maybe he's cool with it.)