Okay, for those keeping score, I'm applying all of msycamore's suggested changes EXCEPT:
I really think Han says "You probably don't", which I interpret as a suggestion that Leia doesn't even know her true feelings.
I'm leaving out the barely audible gibberish.
I'm taking the gundark change, but not capitalizing gundark.
And that's it! It's a lot of small changes, but I think, like with Star Wars, it's still a change in the right direction. Thanks for everything so far.