You are obviously a very good writer and it also makes me smile when others have a few of the same ideas that I do for my prequels -- it lets me know that I'm on the right track in my vision.

My only qualm is the war is not very interesting and I'm not getting any political intrigue. Even though you explained it to me, I still don't see why races that co-existed in a peaceful Republic for thousands of years would just grow to hate each other and end up going to galactic war. Especially if Jedi are in place to resolve disputes. There has to be some impetus, an event or something that divides them. Especially if both sides are essentially good in nature, as it seems yours are. Neither the humans nor aliens are particularly evil are they?

As it is now, it doesn't seem believable and that there is a war, just because it is in the script. Lucas! The reasons why someone would go to war, when it is supposed to be a last straw, are very interesting.

But there is no doubt that there is something there and you have a knack for writing. That's just my opinion anyway.