Wow, thanks for the feedback, msycamore! I think part of the problem with my grand plan was that the GOUT English subs were very inaccurate so I rarely used them for reference, so I had no proofreader other than myself. So thank you very much for the proofread.
As far as my subjective take, I'm agreeing with all of your corrections (even "deflector screens") except the exclamation mark. Although the line delivery is definitely unexcited, I think the exclamation still fits in context.
Also, thanks for the mono mix inserts/changes. I won't be including them but I appreciate the additions. Thanks also for the undeserved credit on the "more wealth" line. If I tried to dub every inadequately articulated line as-is, I'd have a much harder job. No, this was just an ordinary mistake.
I will be uploading corrected subs soon.