darth_ender said:
Oh, happy to comment on whatever you like. The only difference I noticed about the sail barge was regarding the actions and death of Mr. Fett, which I already commented on. Did I miss anything? I'll again confess that I think you did a good job, and it showed me it can be done and I will be voting yes when presented with your idea.
As for the Lars homestead and surrounding material, I feel you did a good job. It effectively told the story you wanted, and I thought visually it was very interesting. But I personally find it a bit distracting from the main story, particularly the flashback stuff. If we were to include a scene like this, I would suggest forgetting the Falcon once we're focused on Luke; we already know they leave Tatooine and jump to lightspeed. I'd also probably just cut the flashbacks and the panic in the X-wing and simply have him watching the sunset near his home, the sand blows in, he heads to his X-wing, and we're off. Especially with the choice of music, we know exactly what Luke is thinking in this moment, and flashbacks don't fit the Star Wars mold that well. It's not my preferred storyline, but again, if we were to follow your line, I'd probably imply more than I'd show...more powerful and Star Warsy that way.
As always, my comments are meant to be constructive, and I must commend you. You did good work, Ron. You should consider investing in the software and taking some movie editing classes. You've got the natural talent, and you clearly have the passion.
EDIT: in response to the sandworm question, what you'd probably have to do is show several worms throughout the desert, including somebody popping to the surface. This would make it clearer that there are other creatures present.
These were also my thoughts on the matter also... I probaly over did it with the flashbacks and like you say it's un star wars like to do so it was a concern but I atleast tried a little montage so I think you may be correct in that I over complicated the idea when it's better to leave it up to the audience more
I'd really like to show Han and Chewie back in the cockpit of the falson one last time it completes the tatooine adventure a bit more conclusivley like things are back to normal if only for a momment
@fishmanlee I was working on the beggars canyon scene and you sent me a link to the Bobba Fett Holiday special cartoon which is what indirectly inspired the lines for the scene...
you suggested the street singer which is sort of arabic and bingowings suggested nore exotic arabesque dancing music so I ended up coming up with primitave tribal drums whist using the footage from Max Rebo for Rancors lair... I tried the street singer idea and it did not work because the Worrt Barks at C3PO and the Jawas are whispering and it conflicted with this in the scene so I kept it as the original
unless you know how to remove the music thats there and keep the sound effects which I have no idea how to do?
probably you need to remove everything and start from scratch rebuilding the sound from nothing which I did not have time to do...