This confused me:

ESB

Cut all Grievous in hanger crap.

Show the exteriors

Cut R2 humour.

Cut dialogue about how they get caught – Anakin says “R2 will be along shortly)

Spring the trap instantly

Cut droid screaming

Make security droids voices lower

Remove Greivous’s dialogue as he escapes.

You say ESB without telling us if it begins where it typically does, or when in ESB when it goes back to ROTS. Maybe I'm reading it wrong? And there were a couple of instances of this. Regardless, good luck on the edit!