It's good to see another re-writer cut so many ties to the pointless garbage that was in the PT. In your treatment, it seems that at least part of the reason Kenobi became a hermit on Tattooine was because of his life of being ostracized as a clone, which is not something I would have thought of at first (namely because cloning doesn't work that way in my draft) but it is a novel concept. Your explanation feels like a more illuminating (and entertaining) story of Anakin and Kenobi than the PT ever was.

I hope you continue the story!