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timdiggerm
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Collaborative Fanediting: An ROTJ Proposition (BACK ON TRACK WITH EMANSWFAN AT THE HELM--SEE POST 1488 OR OP FOR A LINK!)
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29-Dec-2011, 12:18 PM

Concerning the Bothans & Boushh intro:

While I obviously realize that this entire idea would be difficult to pull off and would require a lot of participation from costumers, special effects, sound and more, I figured I'd try to write the scene anyway. Below is the beginning and I know how the scene should end, but I'm not really sure how to write the middle part (action scenes, I guess). I'll write the ending and post it later.

 

1 SPACE 1


The boundless heavens serve as a back-drop for the MAIN TITLE,

followed by a ROLL-UP, which crawls into infinity.


STAR

WARS


Episode VI


RETURN OF THE JEDI


Luke Skywalker has returned to Dagobah

to complete his training with the Jedi

Master Yoda, in preparation for rescuing

his friend Han Solo from the clutches of

the vile gangster Jabba the Hutt.


Little does Luke know that the GALACTIC

EMPIRE has secretly begun construction

on a second, more powerful Death Star

which, when completed, will spell certain

doom for the Rebel Alliance.


Even now, Bothan Spies in league with

the Rebellion are preparing to enter the

Imperial Capital in an attempt to capture

the new battle station's secret plans...


PAN DOWN to reveal CORUSCANT, the glimmering jewel at the

heart of the Empire. A small asteroid comes into view, slowly

tumbling toward the planet. The camera follows it downward as

it picks up speed, glowing hot and eventually burning as a

meteor, high above the nighttime cityscape of the capital.

As it begins to burn, a voice, distorted as if over a radio

but clearly having a curious accent, is heard.


VOICE

Bravo Team, prepare for insertion in five, four, three...


The meteor bursts, its final moments very bright before

disappearing in a cloud of smoke, ash and dust. From out of

the cloud fall four figures, in dark body armor, almost

invisible against the night sky, falling in formation with

military precision.


2 EXT. CORUSCANT - LANDING PLATFORM - NIGHT 2


The four figures fire small retro rockets, coming to a

sudden yet silent stop on a long, flat landing platform which

juts out from the side of one of the many skyscrapers. Their

helmets are oddly shaped, clearly hiding an alien face behind

their dark visors, while their postures bear the mark of

special forces, secret operatives. One agent looks out at the

horizon, the area directly in front of the platform strangely

clear of very tall buildings, allowing for a long view.


AGENT

It's been far too long since I was permitted to look upon this

beauty. Too long since we could walk the streets in freedom.


Their leader places his hand the agent's shoulder, comforting

yet guiding back to their task.


LEADER

Then come, my brother, and let us remember why we came. For soon,

we may all once again live free.


The agent turns back to the group and nods, as a figure emerges

from the shadows at the far end of the platform, beyond a parked

Y-WING. This figure is BOUSHH, an oddly cloaked bounty hunter, 

who swiftly approaches the strike force.


AGENT 2

I do not know why we are working with this...bounty hunter.


LEADER

A great enemy makes strange bedfellows of many. Difficult things

may be required to accomplish great goals.


The agent nods, as if hearing proverbs, before Boushh reaches them.


BOUSHH (in Ubese subtitled)

I have prepared the necessary arrangements for your stay


LEADER

We would prefer the guest room with full accomodations


Boushh nods and produces a code cylinder, handing it to the Leader

who quickly pockets it.


BOUSHH (in Ubese subtitled)

You will find the bed made before you arrive


All four agents turn, quickly walking to the edge of the landing

platform, away from Boushh, revealing the massive IMPERIAL DRYDOCK

below them. Several STAR DESTROYERS are landed here, in various

stages of repair, with a central command center rising from the

middle of the sprawling complex.


The Bothans all take a running leap off the edge of the platform,

small wings unfolding between their outstretched arms and torsos,

rapidly gliding directly towards the command tower. Boushh watches

them fall, then presses a button on his wrist. A small explosion

erupts near the edge of the Drydock complex, and power begins going

out like a cloak of darkness cast over the facility.

I, unsurprisingly, think this is a great idea for a scene (or else I wouldn't be promoting it). It builds off something already in the movie ("Many Bothan Spies..."). It introduces Boushh earlier, adding further surprise to the Leia reveal. It takes us back to Coruscant, a world we haven't seen since ROTS, helping tie the Celebrations back together a little better (note: I think the Celebrations are key for PT-OT integration, even Naboo). It provides the film with an exciting opening (You know, the action-y bits that I don't know how to write).

Like I said, I'll post the ending of the scene later.